Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời nên trực tiếp, ngắn gọn và ngữ pháp chính xác. Tránh lỗi động từ và mạo từ; liệt kê sở thích rõ ràng bằng cấu trúc song song. Sử dụng tối đa 3-4 ý và không quá 5 câu. Ví dụ nói: chủ đề → vài chi tiết (thói quen, tần suất).

例: I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing football twice a week because it keeps me fit, drawing in my free time to relax, and cooking simple meals for my family on weekends.

提案: Cải thiện: Sử dụng thì quá khứ khi nói về thời thơ ấu và tránh lặp từ. Sắp xếp câu rõ ràng: bắt đầu với câu chủ đề ở thì quá khứ, sau đó nêu lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng từ nối để mạch lạc (for example, because, so).

例: When I was a child, I had many hobbies. For example, I played football with my friends every afternoon and watched movies with my family on weekends because it helped us relax and spend time together.

提案: Cải thiện: Sử dụng cấu trúc hiện tại hoàn thành cho hành động kéo dài (have + past participle). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và chọn từ chính xác (enjoy reading books, it's relaxing, it brings new ideas). Thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I have enjoyed reading books since I was a child. I usually read in my free time because it is relaxing and helps me learn new ideas and perspectives.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng với lý do hoặc tần suất. Chú ý danh từ số nhiều và mạo từ (movies, at the weekend). Dùng linking words để diễn đạt mạch lạc (for example, because, so).

例: Yes, my family and I share some hobbies, especially watching movies. We often watch films on the weekend because it is a relaxing way to spend time together and talk about the story afterwards.

× Yes, I have any hobby as play football, drawing, picture play games and cooking.

✓ Yes, I have several hobbies such as playing football, drawing, playing video games and cooking.

'any' is incorrect in positive statements about possession; use 'several' or 'many'. Verbs describing hobbies should use gerunds (playing, drawing, cooking). 'picture play games' is unclear; likely 'playing video games'. Use 'such as' to list examples.'

× When I was, when I was child, uh, I have many hobbies. I play football and watch movies and cooking because it has relaxed and to connect with my family on the weekend I feel.

✓ When I was a child, I had many hobbies. I played football, watched movies and cooked because they relaxed me and helped me connect with my family on weekends.

Tense consistency: talking about childhood requires past tense ('had', 'played', 'watched', 'cooked'). Remove filler repetition. Use plural 'they' to refer to multiple hobbies. 'has relaxed' is incorrect; use 'relaxed me'. 'on the weekend' -> 'on weekends'. Also improve word order for clarity.'

× Yes I do in enjoy the reading book since I was a child I usually read in my free time because it's happy, relax and the new thing.

✓ Yes, I have enjoyed reading books since I was a child. I usually read in my free time because it makes me happy, relaxed and helps me learn new things.

Use present perfect 'have enjoyed' for an action that started in the past and continues. 'the reading book' -> 'reading books'. 'it's happy, relax and the new thing' is ungrammatical; express effects properly: 'makes me happy, relaxed and helps me learn new things'. Maintain subject-verb agreement and adjective/adverb forms.'

× Yes, I do my family and enjoy watching movies together. We often watch film at weekend because it's a relaxing way to spend time together.

✓ Yes, I do. My family and I enjoy watching movies together. We often watch films on the weekend because it's a relaxing way to spend time together.

Original sentence lacks correct structure and pronoun order. Use 'My family and I' instead of 'I do my family'. 'watch film' should be plural 'watch films' or 'watch a film'. Preposition: 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend' depending on dialect; 'on the weekend' is acceptable. Add punctuation and correct word order.'