Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần giảm tiếng ấp úng và sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng hơn. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp (topic sentence), sau đó liệt kê tối đa 3 sở thích với chi tiết ngắn gọn và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Tránh dùng từ không đúng (ví dụ “excited, person says”) và lỗi ngữ pháp như thiếu động từ ("interested" cần 'am interested').

例: To be honest, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing sports, especially badminton and basketball, and I also like swimming. In my free time I often watch different kinds of films because they help me relax.

提案: Cần dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sửa ngữ pháp số nhiều/số ít ("a lot of hobbies"). Nên cho thông tin cụ thể và mạch lạc: nhấn mạnh sở thích chính, tần suất và lý do. Giảm tiếng ấp úng và sắp xếp ý theo thứ tự hợp lý.

例: Yes, I did. I had several hobbies as a child, but swimming was my main one. I used to go swimming three to five times a week because my parents encouraged me to be active and I loved the water.

提案: Trả lời nên ngắn gọn và tự tin, tránh hỏi lại ("Is this swimming?"). Sửa thì và cấu trúc ("I have been keen on swimming since childhood"). Nói rõ tần suất bằng cách dùng từ chính xác ("five to six times a week") và thêm lý do hoặc hoạt động liên quan để phong phú nội dung.

例: Yes, I have. I have been keen on swimming since I was a child. I usually swim five to six times a week with my close friends because it keeps me fit and it's a social activity.

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng lẫn cấu trúc câu để truyền đạt ý rõ ràng. Tránh lỗi ngữ cảnh ("my father is 2 eyes" không rõ nghĩa) và dùng thì đúng. Nên nêu chủ đề, so sánh cụ thể (ai làm gì), tần suất, và lý do/hiệu quả. Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, we share an interest in badminton. My father and I often play badminton together at the park near our house, usually on weekends. We use these matches as a way to keep fit and spend time together.

× Uh, to be honest, I am uh, excited, person says I have a lot of hobbies such as about sports and badminton, uh, playing umm, basketball or swimming.

✓ To be honest, I am an excited person; I have a lot of hobbies, such as sports, badminton, basketball, and swimming.

The original sentence uses 'excited' directly before 'person' without the article 'an' (article error/ adjective use) and has awkward phrasing 'person says'. It also misuses 'such as about sports' and lists activities inconsistently. Suggestion: use the indefinite article 'an' before a singular countable noun and list hobbies with parallel structure and commas.

× Besides, I also uh, interested in watching some kinds of films too.

✓ Besides, I am also interested in watching various kinds of films.

The verb 'interested' needs the auxiliary verb 'be' to form the passive/adjective structure 'be interested in'. The phrase 'some kinds of films' is wordy; 'various kinds of films' or 'different types of films' is clearer. Suggestion: include the correct form of 'be' and use parallel, concise noun phrases.

× When I was a kid, I had a lot of hobby.

✓ When I was a kid, I had a lot of hobbies.

The noun 'hobby' is countable and should be plural when used with 'a lot of'. Use 'hobbies'. Suggestion: match quantifiers with plural nouns for countables.

× I always went to swimming about 3-4, five times a week.

✓ I always went swimming about three to five times a week.

The verb pattern is 'go swimming' (no 'to'). Also write numbers consistently and use 'three to five' instead of '3-4, five'. Suggestion: use the correct collocation 'go swimming' and express number ranges clearly.

× Yes, is this swimming?

✓ Yes, it's swimming.

The original is ungrammatical and sounds like a question. Use a contraction 'it's' or 'yes, swimming' to give a natural short answer. Suggestion: keep responses concise and maintain declarative structure when confirming.

× I always spend umm 5 to 6 * a week swimming with my close friends.

✓ I always spend about five to six hours a week swimming with my close friends.

The original has a '*' placeholder and missing time unit. Use 'spend [time] [unit] a week' and write numbers in words for style. Suggestion: specify the time unit (hours) and use 'about' for approximation.

× Yes I have a big fan of badminton and my father is 2 eyes and my father always go to the park near me house to playing badminton when we have freeze times.

✓ Yes, I am a big fan of badminton. My father enjoys it too; he always goes to the park near my house to play badminton when we have free time.

Multiple errors: 'have a big fan' should be 'am a big fan' (verb-pronoun structure), 'my father is 2 eyes' is nonsensical—likely intended 'my father likes it too', 'go' should be 'goes' for third person singular, 'me house' should be 'my house', and 'to playing' should be 'to play' (infinitive). 'freeze times' should be 'free time'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, correct pronouns, use infinitive after 'to', and choose correct vocabulary ('free time' instead of 'freeze times').

× We've always used playing badminton to a ways to keep fit and do exercise.

✓ We've always used playing badminton as a way to keep fit and exercise.

Incorrect preposition and article: 'to a ways' is wrong. Use 'as a way' (singular) and 'exercise' does not need 'do' here. Suggestion: use 'as a way to' + base verb or 'to keep fit and exercise' for natural phrasing.