Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более естественно и грамматически правильно: используйте правильные артикли и формы глаголов, избегайте повторов и излишней фразы. Дайте чёткое вступление (тематическое предложение), затем одну-две поддерживающие детали с логическими связками (например, because, and, also). Старайтесь не превышать 3–4 предложений и используйте более точную лексику (enjoy, competitive, team sport).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy playing volleyball because it is a fun and social team sport. I also like it because it keeps me fit and improves my coordination.

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и согласование времен; употребляйте единственное/plural правильно (sports vs sport). Дайте чёткое предложение и затем подкрепление с конкретикой (как часто, с кем, что вы улучшили). Используйте связки (because, so, and) чтобы фразы были связными.

例: Yes, I did. As a child I enjoyed playing basketball with my friends because it was fun and kept me active. We played every weekend, which helped me improve my dribbling and teamwork skills.

提案: Упрощайте временные конструкции и корректно используйте present perfect или past simple. Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные детали (что именно вы рисуете, как часто, зачем). Избегайте фрагментов и неточных выражений (the fun → fun).

例: Yes, I have. I have loved drawing since I was a child, especially cartoons and animals because I find it relaxing. I often make small sketchbooks and still draw occasionally to relax.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ ясно и грамматически правильно: скажите прямо, совпадают ли хобби, затем объясните кратко почему с конкретной деталью. Избегайте неполных предложений и неправильного порядка слов. Используйте связки (but, although, because) и дайте пример одного отличающегося хобби у членов семьи.

例: No, not really. My family members prefer watching TV and gardening, while I enjoy more active hobbies like volleyball and drawing, so our interests are quite different.

× Yes, I have hobby.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby.

The noun 'hobby' is a countable singular noun and requires an article 'a' before it: 'a hobby'. Используйте неопределенный артикль 'a' перед исчисляемым существительным в единственном числе.

× My hobby is play volleyball.

✓ My hobby is playing volleyball.

After a linking verb 'is' to name an activity, use the gerund form 'playing' rather than the base verb 'play'. Используйте форму герундия (verb + -ing) после 'is' для обозначения занятия.

× Play volleyball is so interesting and this it's sports.

✓ Playing volleyball is very interesting and it is a sport.

Sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary words. Use 'Playing volleyball' (gerund phrase) as the subject, 'very' instead of 'so' for clarity, and 'it is a sport' (singular) to identify category. Упорядочите слова правильно, используйте герундий и согласуйте число существительного.

× I like doing sports and running.

✓ I like doing sports and running.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Предложение правильно: можно использовать 'doing sports' и 'running' без артиклей.

× For me play volleyball, it's so interesting play.

✓ For me, playing volleyball is very interesting.

Use a comma after 'For me', use the gerund 'playing', and avoid repeating 'play'. Replace 'so' with 'very' for naturalness. Избегайте повторов, используйте герундий и правильный порядок слов.

× Yes, I had a hobby when I I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby when I was a child.

Duplicate word 'I' should be removed. В предложении случайное повторение 'I' нужно удалить.

× I enjoyed playing basketball with my friends because it was a fun and active team sports and I like improving my skills and spending time outdoors.

✓ I enjoyed playing basketball with my friends because it was a fun and active team sport, and I liked improving my skills and spending time outdoors.

'Team sports' should be singular 'team sport' to match 'a fun and active', and maintain tense consistency: use past tense 'liked' to match 'enjoyed'. Также исправьте согласование времен и число существительного.

× Well, yes, I have enjoyed drawing things. I was a child.

✓ Well, yes, I have enjoyed drawing since I was a child.

Combine sentences to show duration: 'have enjoyed' with 'since I was a child' indicates continuation from past to present. 'I was a child' alone is fragmentary. Объедините части предложения для выражения продолжающегося действия: 'have enjoyed ... since I was a child'.

× I like to draw cartoons and the animals because it was relaxing and the fun.

✓ I like to draw cartoons and animals because it is relaxing and fun.

Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'animals', use present tense 'is' to match 'like', and omit 'the' before 'fun'. Уберите лишние артикли, используйте настоящее время и корретный порядок слов.

× It makes me feel good.

✓ It makes me feel good.

Sentence is correct as written. Предложение грамматически верно; изменений не требуется.

× For example, I use it to make small sketchbooks and I still draw some time.

✓ For example, I use it to make small sketchbooks, and I still draw from time to time.

'Some time' is incorrect for occasional actions; use the phrase 'from time to time'. Add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Используйте устойчивое выражение 'from time to time' для обозначения периодичности.

× No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members because in my family don't have hobbies.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members because my family doesn't have the same hobbies as me.

Original sentence misses the subject before 'don't'. Use 'my family doesn't' for singular collective noun, and clarify 'the same hobbies as me' or 'as I do'. Исправьте отсутствие подлежащего, используйте 'my family doesn't' и ясное сравнение.

× I like different hobbies just like.

✓ I like different hobbies from them.

'Just like' is incomplete; use 'different from them' or 'different from my family' to complete the comparison. Сделайте сравнение полным: 'different from them'.