Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сосредоточьтесь на чёткой структуре: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретикой. Уберите паузы и повторения (umm, uh) и исправьте грамматику (например, "I like cooking" вместо "I like cook cooking"). Используйте связку для плавного перехода между хобби (например, 'and also'). Ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений.

例: Yes, I have two hobbies. I enjoy reading novels because they help me relax after work, and I also like cooking for my family every day, which lets me try new recipes and save money.

提案: Начните с чёткого утверждения в прошедшем времени и добавьте конкретные детали о хобби. Избегайте повторов и коротких фрагментов; соединяйте идеи с помощью связок (for example, and, also). Уточните частоту или с кем вы занимались (e.g., 'every weekend with friends').

例: Yes, I did. As a child I often played video games and rode my bike with friends every weekend, and I also enjoyed reading storybooks in the evenings.

提案: Дайте ясный топик-сентенс и организуйте поддерживающую информацию хронологически. Исправьте времена и формы (например, 'I've enjoyed cooking since I was a child', 'I used to ride my bike'). Употребляйте связки (also, and) и конкретизируйте примеры, чтобы избежать сумбура.

例: Yes, I've had several hobbies since childhood. I've enjoyed cooking since I was a child, I used to ride my bike with friends every weekend, and I also played video games a lot when I was younger; I still enjoy reading today.

提案: Ответьте прямо и поясните сходства с членами семьи. Избегайте неясных фраз ('red cups') и пауз; уточните, что именно вы делаете вместе (e.g., 'we enjoy trying new recipes'). Используйте связки для логики и ограничьте длину до 2–3 предложений.

例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. My mother also enjoys cooking, and we often try new recipes together at the weekend, while my sister and I both enjoy reading and recommend books to each other.

× Yes, I do my hobby.

✓ Yes, I do.

The phrase 'I do my hobby' is ungrammatical in English; use 'I do' to answer 'Do you have any hobbies?' or 'My hobby is...'. Use simple 'Yes, I do' or 'My hobby is reading.' Suggestion: Answer directly or state 'My hobby is reading.'

× It is umm reading a book.

✓ It is reading books.

Use plural 'books' for a general hobby; 'reading a book' sounds like one instance. Use the gerund 'reading' to name the hobby. Suggestion: Say 'My hobby is reading' or 'I enjoy reading books.'

× I like uh, reading and umm, I like cook cooking uh, because I.

✓ I like reading, and I like cooking because I cook at home every day for my family.

Original sentence has disfluencies and incorrect verb forms. Use gerund 'cooking' after 'like' and complete the clause: 'because I cook at home every day for my family.' Suggestion: Remove fillers and use clear structure: 'I like reading and cooking. I cook at home every day for my family.'

× Home everyday cooking for my family.

✓ I cook at home every day for my family.

Missing subject and auxiliary placement errors. Add subject 'I' and proper word order: 'cook at home every day.' Suggestion: Use full sentence with subject and verb.

× Yes I did my hobby is I chilled this play video games and.

✓ Yes, I did. My hobby was that I played video games and rode my bike.

Mixed tenses and incorrect forms: 'did' used as auxiliary is fine for past; 'chilled' is wrong form—likely 'child' confusion. Use past tense 'played' and 'rode' for actions in the past. Suggestion: 'When I was a child, I played video games and rode my bike.'

× By bike.

✓ I rode my bike.

Fragment without subject and verb. Use complete clause 'I rode my bike.' Suggestion: Combine with previous sentence: 'I played video games and rode my bike.'

× And I like reading and I like reading.

✓ I like reading.

Redundant repetition and unnecessary conjunction. Keep single clear statement. Suggestion: Avoid repetition: 'I like reading.'

× Yes I do. I've enjoyed cooking I think I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have. I've enjoyed cooking since I was a child.

Missing preposition 'since' to indicate starting point with present perfect. 'I think' is unnecessary and confuses meaning. Suggestion: Use 'I've enjoyed cooking since I was a child.'

× I used to ride by bike every weekend with my friends.

✓ I used to ride my bike every weekend with my friends.

Incorrect preposition 'by' instead of possessive 'my'. Use 'ride my bike'. Suggestion: 'I used to ride my bike every weekend with my friends.'

× I also playing video games a lot of when I was a younger and I still enjoy reading.

✓ I also played video games a lot when I was younger, and I still enjoy reading.

Missing auxiliary or wrong verb form: use past tense 'played' not 'playing'; remove extra 'of' and use 'younger' without article. Add comma before 'and'. Suggestion: 'I also played video games a lot when I was younger.'

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ (No correction needed)

This question is grammatical as written; no article errors.

× Yes I do uh.

✓ Yes, I do.

Fillers are unnecessary; remove 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: Keep answers concise.

× My mother enjoys cooking and I often cook with her at weekends so we don't love trying new red cups.

✓ My mother enjoys cooking and I often cook with her at weekends, so we love trying new recipes.

'Don't love' contradicts likely meaning; 'red cups' is incorrect word choice for 'recipes'. Use 'love' positive and 'recipes' noun. Also add comma before 'so'. Suggestion: 'We love trying new recipes.'

× My sister is fond of reading uh, and I also enjoy reading.

✓ My sister is fond of reading, and I also enjoy reading.

Only filler 'uh' removal needed and add comma for coordination. Structure is otherwise correct. Suggestion: 'My sister is fond of reading, and I enjoy it too.'