Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically correct, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetition. For example, say what kinds of dishes you like to cook, whom you cook for, and why you enjoy it.

例: I enjoy cooking, especially Asian and Italian dishes, for my family and friends. For example, I often make homemade dumplings and pasta because I like experimenting with flavors, and my guests always compliment the meals.

提案: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence and specific examples. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid hesitation. Mention what you painted, how often, and why your friends liked it to add content.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved painting and making crafts. For example, I often painted animals and colorful landscapes, and my friends liked them because I used bright colors and creative details.

提案: Answer directly using present perfect/continuous to show continuity, then give details about frequency and purpose. Use linking words and correct grammar, and complete the final idea about how it affects your room or family.

例: Yes, I have continued painting since childhood, although I don't do it often. Occasionally I create a painting and hang it on my wall, which brightens my room and my family always compliments it.

提案: Be concise and use a clear contrastive linking word (however/whereas). State the family member's hobby and then clearly state your different hobby with a brief reason or comparison to add depth.

例: No, I don't. For example, my father enjoys playing music, whereas I prefer painting because I find it more relaxing and visually expressive.

× I like to cooking for my family or my friends.

✓ I like to cook for my family or my friends.

Use the base form after 'to' (infinitive). 'To cooking' is incorrect; use 'to cook' or use gerund without 'to' (e.g., 'I enjoy cooking').

× Uh, they very they are very enjoy.

✓ They really enjoy it.

The original has incorrect word order and missing object. Use subject + adverb + verb + object. 'They are very enjoy' is ungrammatical; use 'They really enjoy it' or 'They enjoy it very much'.

× Uh, what I cooking, I prefer, uh, I can tell many, many favor.

✓ As for what I cook, I prefer... I can make many, many flavors.

Several issues: verb form missing ('cook' not 'cooking' after 'I'), unclear phrase 'tell many many favor'. Likely intended 'make many flavors'. Rephrase to 'As for what I cook, I prefer... I can make many different flavors.'

× Yes I did when I was a child. I liked to, I like to painting umm and uh, handmade.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I liked to paint and make things by hand.

Inconsistent tenses and wrong verb forms: after 'liked to' use base verb 'paint' not 'painting'. 'Handmade' is an adjective; to express making things by hand use 'make things by hand' or 'do handicrafts'.

× I made the song umm, I draw some picture that my friends very like.

✓ I wrote songs, and I drew some pictures that my friends really liked.

Use past tense consistently for childhood activities: 'made the song' is better as 'wrote songs'. 'I draw' should be past 'I drew'. Place adverb 'really' before verb 'liked'.

× Yes I do. I still painting but not frequently. Not frequently.

✓ Yes, I do. I still paint, but not frequently.

After auxiliary 'do' use base verb 'paint' not gerund 'painting'. Repeat 'Not frequently' is redundant; combine into one sentence.

× Sometimes I will draw a painting and put it on the wall.

✓ Sometimes I draw a painting and put it on the wall.

Using 'will' can be acceptable for habitual actions but 'Sometimes I draw' is more natural. 'Draw a painting' is fine, though 'paint a picture' is also natural.

× It make my family make make my room look very.

✓ It makes my room look nice and makes my family happy.

Subject-verb agreement and missing adjective: 'It makes' (not 'make'), repetition 'make make' is wrong, and 'look very' needs an adjective like 'nice'. Clarify intended meaning into two effects.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This sentence is correct; no article error. Included for completeness; no change needed.

× No, I, I don't, uh, for example, my father, uh, my father's hobby is umm, play music.

✓ No, I don't. For example, my father's hobby is playing music.

Use gerund 'playing' after 'hobby is'. Also separate into clearer sentences. Avoid infinitive 'play' after 'is'.

× Uh, but I prefer painting.

✓ But I prefer painting.

Sentence is acceptable; minor disfluency 'Uh' removed. 'Prefer painting' is correct gerund usage after 'prefer'.