Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 请注意语法、发音和句子组织。回答应直接开门见山，然后用一两句具体细节支持。避免填充词（如“um”“mmm”）和无关词（如“dentist”“clapping the school”）。动词形式要正确（例如“I can swim”，“I like playing badminton”）。可以用连接词（and, also, besides）使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I enjoy several sports. I can swim well and I often play tennis with my deskmate. I also like playing badminton, which I usually play at my school gym twice a week.

提案: 用正确时态（过去时）和更清晰的词汇回答。开头直接回答并提供具体细节，如频率、地点和感受，避免模糊或重复。减少犹豫词，句子不超过五句。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved riding my bicycle. Before I started kindergarten I rode around my neighborhood with friends almost every day, so I became quite good at it and enjoyed the freedom it gave me.

提案: 注意时态和数字表达的准确性，去掉重复表述。先给出直接答案，然后用一两句说明开始时间、重要经历和感受。使用连接词使结构清晰，如“because”“so”或“then”。

例: Yes, swimming has been my hobby since childhood. I started when I was about five and by eight I was competing in local meets, which boosted my interest because I began winning some medals.

提案: 回答要更简洁、有条理，避免含糊和自相矛盾的表达。先回答是或否，然后说明相同或不同的部分并给出具体例子（例如父亲是自行车教练）。注意人称代词和语法（he/she, plays）。

例: Yes and no. We all enjoy sports, but my father prefers cycling; he used to be a cyclist and now works as a cycling coach, while I focus on swimming.

× I can swimming.

✓ I can swim.

该句中情态动词 can 后面应接动词原形而不是动名词或现在分词。改为 "I can swim."。建议记住情态动词（can, could, will, should 等）后接动词原形的规则。

× I'm very good at that dentist and I also like playing tennis.

✓ I'm very good at that and I also like playing tennis.

原句中的 "that dentist" 是不合适的代词搭配，似乎是口误。若要表达“我在那方面很擅长”，应使用指示代词 that 或具体名词。若想说“我在游泳方面很擅长”，应改为 "I'm very good at swimming."。建议明确要指代的对象或直接使用具体名词。

× I usually play tennis with my desk mate and I also like play badminton.

✓ I usually play tennis with my deskmate and I also like playing badminton.

动词 like 后应接动名词（doing）或不定式，两者都可但在习惯表达中常用动名词。这里把 "play badminton" 改为 "playing badminton" 更自然。另注意 "desk mate" 常写作一个词 "deskmate"。

× It's my uh, the clapping the school.

✓ It's the club at my school.

原句结构混乱，猜测想表达“这是我学校的俱乐部”。应使用固定搭配 "the club at my school" 或 "my school's club"。建议先理清要表达的名词短语顺序：限定词 + 名词 + 地点补语。

× when I was a child, I like writing the bikes because, umm, especially before the kindergarten, and I usually ride my bicycle in the neighborhood with my friends, maybe, uh, almost every day.

✓ When I was a child, I liked riding bikes, especially before kindergarten, and I usually rode my bicycle in the neighborhood with my friends almost every day.

叙述过去经历时应使用过去时：like → liked；ride → rode。另 "writing the bikes" 应为 "riding bikes"（拼写错误与词性错误）。建议在描述过去习惯或经常发生的事情时统一使用一般过去时。

× So I'm very good at it and I like it gradually.

✓ So I became very good at it and gradually I grew to like it.

原句时态与副词用法不当。若描述逐渐形成的喜好应用过去时或现在完成的结果表达（became / grew to like）。"I like it gradually" 不自然，应表达为 "gradually I grew to like it"。建议使用合适的时态和自然的副词位置。

× I started swimming about 5 years old and until 9:00 until I'm nine years old.

✓ I started swimming at about 5 years old and continued until I was nine years old.

表示年龄时常用介词 at，且时间段要用过去时（was）。原句中 "until 9:00" 是错误的时间表达，且混用时态。建议使用 "started at" 和 "continued until"。

× And yes, and maybe about where I was 8 years old, I joined a competition and I get a good grades.

✓ When I was about 8 years old, I joined a competition and I got good grades.

描述过去事件要用过去时：get → got，且 "a good grades" 数量与冠词不匹配，应为 "good grades" 或 "a good grade"。建议保持时态一致并注意单复数和冠词。

× So I gradually love this. Uh, sports. So yeah, uh, this is as my hobby. This is childhood chapter since my childhood.

✓ So I gradually came to love this sport. So yes, this has been my hobby since childhood.

原句结构混乱，时态和搭配不当。应使用 "gradually came to love" 或 "gradually grew to love" 表示逐渐产生的感情；描述持续到现在用 "has been my hobby since childhood"。建议将句子合并并用正确的时态表达持续性。

× MMM, perhaps the same as my dad, but umm, my hobby is play swimming.

✓ Maybe it's the same as my dad's, but my hobby is swimming.

原句 "my hobby is play swimming" 语法错误，应使用名词形式 swimming。所有格表达父亲的爱好应为 "my dad's"。建议使用名词或动名词作表语，并用所有格表示所属关系。

× But my father, uh, is also like sports, but we don't have that enough.

✓ But my father also likes sports, though we're not exactly the same.

原句中动词和代词使用错误："is also like sports" 应为 "also likes sports"（第三人称单数）。"we don't have that enough" 不自然，改为更清晰的表达。建议注意主谓一致和自然表达。

× But we don't have the same program like because she, she is uh, bicycle player before and now he's a bicycle coach.

✓ We don't have the same interests because he used to be a cyclist and now he's a cycling coach.

原句代词混乱（she / he），时态和词汇也有问题。"bicycle player" 不自然，应为 "cyclist" 或 "bicycle rider"。此外用过去常态 "used to be" 表示过去的职业。建议核对人物性别代词并用正确名词。

× So our hobby is the same. The sports, we're all like sports.

✓ So our hobby is the same: we all like sports.

原句冗余且语序不自然。应合并为简洁句型 "we all like sports"。建议用清晰的主谓结构并避免重复。