Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngữ pháp đúng và mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lỗi thì (play vs watch), sắp xếp ý theo cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ, tối đa 3 câu. Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (sports, video games) và câu nối (for example, On weekends). Ví dụ cụ thể về thời lượng sẽ hữu ích (e.g., a few hours each day).

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing sports, especially badminton, and playing video games online. On weekends I usually spend a few hours each day on these activities, for example practicing badminton with friends.

提案: Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc, tránh tiếng ậm ừ và câu không hoàn chỉnh. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + brief). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (tên các bộ phim hoạt hình hoặc tần suất) và dùng liên từ (when, because) để nối ý. Giữ dưới 5 câu. Tránh cấu trúc lặp và sai mạo từ (the watch → watching).

例: Yes, I did. As a child I loved watching cartoons, especially Tom and Jerry. I used to ask my mother to let me watch my favorite cartoons every night before bed because they made me laugh.

提案: Cần diễn đạt rõ mối liên hệ giữa quá khứ và hiện tại. Dùng thì phù hợp (used to / have liked since childhood / still practice). Tránh từ sai (strife) và lỗi ngữ pháp (I'm currently was). Nêu tần suất hiện tại (e.g., every weekend) và lý do bạn tiếp tục duy trì sở thích. Sử dụng liên từ như since, so, although để nối ý.

例: Yes, I have. I have liked playing badminton since I was a child and I still practice it with my grandparents. Although I am busy with my studies, I try to play badminton every weekend because it keeps me fit.

提案: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ (daily daily). Dùng cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh và các liên từ (for example, so, because) để giải thích lợi ích. Sửa ngữ pháp (my parents and I, share the same hobby). Nêu ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động và tần suất, và kết luận ngắn gọn về lợi ích cho quan hệ gia đình.

例: Yes, my parents and I share the same hobby of playing sports. For example, we often play badminton or go for walks together on weekends. Doing activities together helps us talk about our daily lives and strengthens our family bond.

× I have many hobbies like playing sport, watch video games or playing online game.

✓ I have many hobbies like playing sports, watching video games, or playing online games.

'Sport' should be plural 'sports' when referring to activities in general; 'watch' should be the gerund 'watching' to match the list of activities; 'playing online game' should be plural 'playing online games' to be consistent with countable nouns. Suggestions: use plural for general activities and use gerunds after 'like'.

× I often spend my week weekends to I spend almost of time on weekends for my hobbies.

✓ I often spend most of my weekends on my hobbies.

Use 'spend' with a time expression: 'spend most of my weekends' is correct. 'Week weekends' is incorrect and redundant; 'almost of time' is ungrammatical — use 'most of my weekends' or 'almost all of my time on weekends'. Suggestion: use 'spend + amount of time + on + noun'.

× Looking back, I remember that when I was trying.

✓ Looking back, I remember when I was a child.

The phrase 'when I was trying' is incomplete and likely incorrect; context implies childhood. Use past tense noun phrase 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: provide the correct time reference and complete the clause.

× I have many hobbies, but uh, the most I like is the watch umm, cartoons.

✓ I had many hobbies, but the one I liked most was watching cartoons.

Pronoun and tense consistency: in past reference use 'had' and 'liked'. 'The most I like is the watch cartoons' is ungrammatical; use 'the one I liked most was watching cartoons' and gerund 'watching'. Suggestion: match tense and use 'the one ... most' structure.

× And I often uh, ask my mom for what? For watching umm some my favorite cartoon every night.

✓ And I often asked my mom to let me watch my favorite cartoons every night.

Use 'ask someone to do something' or 'ask permission to do something'. 'Ask my mom for watching' is incorrect. Also 'some my favorite cartoon' is wrong; use 'my favorite cartoons' or 'a favorite cartoon'. Suggestion: use 'ask someone to' or 'ask someone for permission to'.

× Absolutely yes, I remember that when I was a strife I had I would like to play badminton and I often practice with my grandparents nowadays.

✓ Absolutely. I remember that when I was young I used to like playing badminton, and I often practice with my grandparents nowadays.

'When I was a strife' is incorrect phrase — likely meant 'young'. 'I had I would like' is ungrammatical; use 'used to like' for past habits. Keep 'nowadays' with present tense 'practice'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habitual actions and correct time word.

× I'm currently was quite busy with study so but I'm also really liked playing sports that.

✓ I'm currently quite busy with my studies, but I also really like playing sports.

Mixing present 'I'm' with past 'was' and 'liked' is inconsistent. Use present tense 'I am currently' and 'I also really like'. 'With study' should be 'with my studies'. Remove extraneous words. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and correct noun forms.

× So I was quite lucky when me and my parents have the same uh, hobby like playing sport, we often spend time playing badminton together or walking together.

✓ I was quite lucky that my parents and I share the same hobby of playing sports; we often play badminton together or go walking together.

Use 'that' or 'because' instead of 'when' here; subject order 'my parents and I' is more natural. 'Have the same hobby' should be 'share the same hobby' or 'have the same hobby'. 'Playing sport' -> 'playing sports'. Suggestion: use correct conjunction and natural subject order.

× When playing together, we can't talk about the daily daily life and it can get through my family re.

✓ When we play together, we can talk about daily life and it brings my family closer.

'Can't' is contradictory with context; likely meant 'can'. 'Daily daily life' is redundant. 'Get through my family re' is unclear — 'bring my family closer' conveys intended meaning. Use correct verb and clearer expression. Suggestion: avoid redundancy and choose clear verbs to express relationship improvements.