Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ. Nên tách ý chính và chi tiết hỗ trợ, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Ví dụ nói rõ tần suất, lý do và lợi ích cụ thể của việc học tiếng Anh và đọc sách.

例: Yes. My main hobbies are learning English and reading books. I study English daily to improve my speaking for work, and I read novels and non-fiction weekly to expand my vocabulary and knowledge.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp (thì, chủ-động từ), ngắt câu hợp lý và tránh lặp từ. Trả lời rõ: tên hoạt động, ai dạy, khi nào, cảm xúc kèm lý do. Giữ không quá 5 câu.

例: Yes, I played the piano when I was a child. My piano teacher taught me weekly lessons for several years, and I enjoyed practicing classical pieces because they challenged me and sounded beautiful.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và ngữ pháp sai (số nhiều/đơn, danh từ không phù hợp). Hãy chọn một hoặc hai sở thích chính từ nhỏ đến nay, giải thích rõ hoạt động và tần suất, dùng liên từ để nối ý. Tránh từ chung chung như "people everywhere".

例: Yes, I have continued playing sports since childhood. I often play football with friends twice a week because it helps me stay fit and socialize with people from my neighborhood.

提案: Sửa lỗi đại từ và cấu trúc phủ định, mở rộng câu bằng lý do ngắn gọn (ví dụ sở thích khác nhau do tuổi tác hoặc sở thích cá nhân). Dùng một câu chủ đề rồi một câu giải thích bổ sung.

例: No, my hobbies are different from my family members'. While they enjoy gardening and cooking, I prefer studying English and reading because I focus more on language learning and personal development.

× I have so many hobbies but my hobby is learning English and reading books.

✓ I have many hobbies, but my main hobby is learning English and reading books.

The student mixes plural 'hobbies' with singular 'my hobby' which is confusing. Use 'many hobbies' or 'my main hobby' to clarify. Also add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: use 'my main hobby' when distinguishing one primary hobby among many.

× I usually improve my skills to achieve my goals.

✓ I usually work on improving my skills to achieve my goals.

The verb 'improve' is grammatically fine but 'work on improving' is more natural in this context. Maintain present habitual tense 'usually' with 'work on improving'. Suggestion: use 'work on' + gerund for ongoing personal development actions.

× When I were a child my hobbies was playing piano and I learned it from my teacher.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was playing the piano, and I learned it from my teacher.

Errors: 'were' should be 'was' for singular first person past; 'hobbies' should be singular 'hobby' to match 'was'; include article 'the' before 'piano'. Suggestion: match subject and verb in past tense and use correct articles.

× It's it was really in interesting and I I'm crazy about it.

✓ It was really interesting, and I was crazy about it.

Remove extra words 'It's it' and duplicate 'I I'm'. Use adjective 'interesting' without 'in'. Maintain past tense 'was' consistently. Suggestion: avoid repetition and check adjective forms.

× Since childhood my hobbies is labor, sports with friends and communicate.

✓ Since childhood, my hobbies have been studying, playing sports with friends, and socializing.

'Hobbies' is plural so verb should be 'have been' not 'is'. 'Labor' is unclear in this context—use 'studying' or 'learning'. 'Communicate' should be the gerund 'socializing' or 'communicating' and parallel with other gerunds. Suggestion: use parallel gerund forms and correct plural verb agreement.

× No, I don't have the same hobby as your as my family members.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members.

Mistake: 'your as my' is confusing and incorrect pronoun use. Use 'my' to refer to the speaker's family and plural 'hobbies' to match 'family members'. Suggestion: remove extraneous pronouns and ensure pronoun refers to correct owner.