Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve sentence structure and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., verb forms, articles) and avoid repeating words like “singing and shopping” unnecessarily.

例: I have two main hobbies: singing and shopping. I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and lets me express my emotions through music. Additionally, I like shopping because I enjoy finding attractive items that make me feel happy and confident.

提案: Use past tense consistently and make sentences more concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence about your childhood hobby, then add specific reasons or a short example. Fix grammar errors (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid awkward phrasing.

例: Yes, I did. My childhood hobby was riding a bicycle because it was very popular then. Many of my classmates had bikes, and I learned to ride so I could join them and make new friends.

提案: Answer directly with a concise topic sentence and use consistent tense. Avoid repetition and improve linking between ideas. Provide one or two specific details (e.g., when you sing, or a situation) and correct verb forms and articles.

例: Yes, I still enjoy singing, which has been my hobby since childhood. I find it relaxing and a great way to express my emotions, especially when I sing ballads or practice at home after school.

提案: Be specific and organized: state whether you share hobbies, then give clear examples and reasons. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and name examples accurately. Avoid vague phrases and give a short supporting detail about how your family influenced you.

例: Yes, we share a hobby of watching movies. My father often watched a range of films, from Marvel blockbusters to historical dramas, and he used to play them at home when I was a child, which encouraged me to enjoy movies too.

× I have two hobbies and they are singing and shopping.

✓ I have two hobbies: singing and shopping.

The original sentence is acceptable but more natural punctuation is to use a colon to list hobbies. No plural error; this suggestion improves clarity and style.

× So I like singing because singing can help me to relax and I can express my feelings through the singing and for shopping because I like to buy some beautiful things so I always singing and shopping.

✓ I like singing because it helps me relax and lets me express my feelings, and I enjoy shopping because I like to buy beautiful things, so I am always singing and shopping.

Problems involve repeated noun phrase 'singing' used awkwardly and incorrect verb form 'always singing' without auxiliary. Use 'helps' (third person singular) and 'lets' to match subject; replace 'through the singing' with 'express my feelings' and use 'I am always singing and shopping' to form present continuous or better 'I always sing and go shopping' depending on intended meaning. Corrections follow listed grammar types 2 and 8.

× Yes, I do. Riding bicycle is my hobby when I was child, so riding bicycle are popular at that time.

✓ Yes, I did. Riding a bicycle was my hobby when I was a child, and riding bicycles was popular at that time.

Tense inconsistency: question asks about past hobbies so use past tense 'did' and 'was.' Articles missing before 'bicycle' and 'a child.' 'Riding bicycle are popular' has plural/verb agreement error; use 'riding bicycles was popular' or 'bicycles were popular.' This addresses past tense, singular/plural, and subject-verb agreement issues (IDs 5, 1, 27).

× So many students they have their own bicycle and in order to make more new friends so I decided to learn riding bicycle and as my hobbies.

✓ Many students had their own bicycles, and to make more new friends, I decided to learn to ride a bicycle as a hobby.

Redundant pronoun 'they' after 'students' is incorrect. Tense should be past 'had.' Use 'to learn to ride' rather than 'learn riding bicycle.' 'As my hobbies' incorrect number and article; use singular 'a hobby.' Addresses pronoun misuse, verb form, article, and pluralization (IDs 12, 8, 22, 1).

× Yes I do, same is my hobby when I was child.

✓ Yes, I do. Singing has been my hobby since I was a child.

Original mixes present and past incorrectly and lacks article 'a child.' Use present perfect 'has been' to show continuation from childhood to present. This fixes tense and article errors (IDs 6, 22).

× So I like singing because I think it is interesting and it helped me a lot for relaxing so I enjoy singing.

✓ I like singing because I think it is interesting and it helps me relax a lot, so I enjoy singing.

Tense inconsistency: 'helped' (past) should be present 'helps' if hobby continues. 'For relaxing' is awkward; use 'helps me relax.' This addresses present tense and verb+ing usage (IDs 6, 8).

× Also I can still singing to express my feeling so I think it is magical.

✓ Also, I can still sing to express my feelings, so I think it is magical.

Incorrect verb form 'singing' after modal 'can' — use base form 'sing.' Also pluralize 'feelings.' Adds commas for clarity. This matches grammar type 8 and 1.

× Yes I do I have the same hobbies which is watching movie.

✓ Yes, I do. I have the same hobby: watching movies.

'Hobbies which is' mixes plural and singular; use 'hobby' singular and 'movies' plural. 'Watching movie' needs plural or an article 'a movie.' This fixes pronoun/reference and number agreement (IDs 12, 1).

× So my dad is really like to watching movies such as marvel romantic or about some history.

✓ My dad really likes watching movies, such as Marvel films, romantic movies, or historical films.

Incorrect structure 'is really like to watching' — should be 'really likes watching.' 'Marvel' should be capitalized and clarified as 'Marvel films.' 'About some history' is awkward; use 'historical films.' This addresses third person singular and verb+ing issues and word choice (IDs 2, 8, 13).

× So when I was child he always played the videos so I like to watch movie.

✓ When I was a child, he always played videos, so I liked to watch movies.

Missing article 'a child.' 'Played the videos' is better as 'played videos.' Tense should be past 'liked' to match 'was.' 'Watch movie' needs plural 'movies.' This fixes past tense, article, and pluralization (IDs 5, 22, 1)}]}7430}nprintf(error)