Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: أجابتك واضحة ولكن غير فعّالة من ناحية التنظيم والاقتصاد في الكلام. تجنب تعداد طويل بدون ربط أو توضيح. استخدم جملة موضوعية قصيرة ثم اذكر اثنين إلى ثلاثة هوايات مع سبب أو وصف مختصر. انتبه للقواعد (مثلاً use of gerunds like "playing").

例: I enjoy several hobbies, especially playing football and drawing. I play football twice a week because it keeps me fit, and I like drawing in my free time to relax and express my ideas.

提案: الرد يحتوي على أخطاء قواعدية وصياغية ويحتاج إلى جملة موضوعية واضحة وزمن مناسب (past tense). أضف تفاصيل بسيطة عن متى ولماذا كنت تحب تلك الهوايات، واستخدم روابط بسيطة لزيادة الترابط.

例: When I was a child, I had two main hobbies: drawing and swimming. I started drawing at age six because I loved colours, and I took swimming lessons every summer to become more confident in the water.

提案: الجواب مشوش وغير منطقي، يحتوي على أخطاء في المفردات والأسماء غير واضحة. يجب الإجابة مباشرة عن الهواية الوحيدة أو الأساسية التي استمرت منذ الطفولة، ثم شرح السبب أو كيف استمرت. استخدم كلمات واضحة ومفهومة وامتنع عن تكرار غير ضروري.

例: Yes, I have kept drawing since childhood. I began drawing cartoons when I was little and I still draw regularly because it helps me relax and improve my creativity.

提案: الرد قصير ومختلط بالقواعد الخاطئة وصياغة غير طبيعية. يجب أن تذكر ما إذا كانت الهوايات متشابهة، تحدد مع من، وتشرح كيف أو لماذا تشاركونها، مع استخدام أزمنة صحيحة وروابط بسيطة.

例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my brother, especially football and swimming. We often play football together on weekends, which helps us bond and stay active.

× When I child I have two hobbies, it's drawing and swimming.

✓ When I was a child I had two hobbies: drawing and swimming.

The sentence uses incorrect tense and missing verb: 'When I child' is missing 'was' and refers to past time, so past simple 'was' and 'had' are required. Also 'it's' is wrong for listing hobbies; use a colon or 'they were'. Suggestion: use 'When I was a child, I had two hobbies: drawing and swimming.' Error explained in Arabic: الجملة تحتاج زمن الماضي البسيط لأن الحديث عن ماضٍ ('When I was a child')، لذلك يجب استخدام 'was' و 'had' بدلاً من 'have' وعبارة 'it's'.

× Yes, I have many hobbies. Many hobbies in a child such as Draw It Blade, Electronic Game and Vinnie.

✓ Yes, I had some hobbies as a child, such as drawing, electronic games, and Winnie (or the name of the hobby/person).

The original mixes present tense with past context and has incorrect word order 'Many hobbies in a child'. Also some items are unclear or miscapitalized; 'Draw It Blade' and 'Vinnie' seem to be names and should be clarified. Use past tense 'had' and phrase 'as a child' and list items with commas. Error explained in Arabic: الجملة خاطئة في ترتيب الكلمات والزمن؛ يجب استخدام صيغة الماضي 'had' عند الحديث عن الطفولة، وعبارة 'as a child' صحيحة بدلاً من 'in a child'. كما يجب كتابة أسماء الهوايات بشكل واضح ومنسق.

× Yes, I have both hobbies with my brother because we will interesting with him.

✓ Yes, I share hobbies with my brother because we are both interested in them.

Errors: 'have both hobbies with my brother' is awkward—use 'share hobbies' or 'have the same hobbies'. 'We will interesting with him' mixes future auxiliary and adjective incorrectly; correct is 'we are both interested in them' (present simple passive/adj structure). Suggestion: 'Yes, I share hobbies with my brother because we are both interested in them.' Error explained in Arabic: الخطأ هنا في استخدام الزمن والشكل؛ لا نستخدم 'will interesting' ولا 'interesting' بهذه الطريقة. الصيغة الصحيحة هي 'are interested in' أو 'share hobbies' للحديث عن الاهتمامات المشتركة.

× Yes, I have many hobbies such as playing football, swimming, basketball, drawing and tennis.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies, such as playing football, swimming, basketball, drawing, and playing tennis.

List items should be parallel in form. 'Playing football' and 'playing tennis' should match; 'swimming' and 'drawing' are gerunds and acceptable, but better to use parallel gerund forms for all. Also add a comma after 'hobbies'. Error explained in Arabic: المشكلة هنا في التوازي في أجزاء القائمة؛ من الأفضل جعل عناصر القائمة بنفس الشكل النحوي (جميعها صيغة -ing) وإضافة فاصلة للفصل.

× Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?

✓ Do you have a hobby that you have had since childhood?

This sentence is already grammatical but may require consistency: expand contraction 'you've' to 'you have' for clarity in speaking tests. Tense 'have had since childhood' (present perfect) is appropriate to indicate a hobby continuing from childhood. Error explained in Arabic: الجملة صحيحة نحوياً؛ إن رغبت بالوضوح يمكن كتابة 'you have' بدل الاختصار 'you've'.