Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your hobbies, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (use present simple for routines) and avoid redundancy.

例: I enjoy watching movies and listening to music. For example, I often watch comedies to relax after work, and I listen to upbeat music to boost my energy or to calm down when I feel stressed.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence about childhood hobbies, use past tense consistently, and give one or two specific examples. Use linking words (for example, especially) and correct common errors (I was a child, I helped my mom, washing plates).

例: When I was a child, I often helped my mother with household chores. For example, I regularly washed the plates and cleaned the kitchen, especially when my mother was busy with work.

提案: Answer directly and concisely: state that you have continued the hobby and give specific activities. Use present perfect or present simple to show continuity and correct word choice (household chores, fold clothes). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I have continued helping my family with household chores since childhood. I still wash dishes, fold and arrange clothes, and tidy the rooms, and I do these tasks almost every weekend.

提案: Be clear and confident. Start with a direct answer (Yes/No/Partly) and explain with a specific comparison. Use linking words (for example, however) and avoid repetition. Correct grammar (my mom and I, many similarities).

例: Partly. My mother and I share similar interests — for example, we both enjoy cooking and keeping the house clean. However, she likes baking more, while I prefer quick meals and organizing rooms.

× I have sometimes I watch movies and listen to the music because it helps me to boost my energy and sometimes it helps me to get my emotion.

✓ Sometimes I watch movies and listen to music because they help me boost my energy and sometimes help me manage my emotions.

Sentence mix of present simple and redundancy; 'I have sometimes' is incorrect word order and unnecessary. Use 'Sometimes I watch' for habitual actions (present simple). 'Music' is generally uncountable so remove 'the'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'movies and music'. 'Help me to boost' -> 'help me boost' (infinitive without to is also acceptable, but shorter). 'Get my emotion' is unnatural; use 'manage my emotions'.

× As far as I can remember, when I I'm still a child, I almost do the housework.

✓ As far as I can remember, when I was a child, I mostly did the housework.

Tense error: 'I'm still a child' mixes present continuous with past context; use past tense 'was'. 'Almost do' is incorrect collocation; use 'mostly did' for frequency in the past. Maintain past simple for past habits.

× I help it with my mom, especially when she's busy doing something.

✓ I helped my mom, especially when she was busy with something.

Pronoun 'it' is incorrect referring to helping someone; use direct object 'my mom'. Also adjust tense to past simple to match the past context. 'Busy doing something' is wordy; 'busy with something' is more natural.

× So I'm the one who's gonna make some of the chores, like washing plate.

✓ So I was the one who did some of the chores, like washing plates.

Context is past; 'gonna' (going to) is informal and future-oriented, incorrect here. Use past simple 'was' and 'did'. Use plural 'plates' or 'the plates' for natural phrasing. Avoid colloquial 'gonna' in formal responses.

× Like what I said from the last question, I love to help my mom wed the household chores like washing plates, arrange the clothes and some other chores that I see in the house.

✓ Like I said in the last question, I love helping my mom with household chores like washing plates, arranging clothes, and other tasks I see around the house.

Tense and verb form: 'love to help' is acceptable but 'love helping' is more natural here. 'Wed the household chores' is incorrect word choice; use 'with household chores'. Use gerunds for list items: 'washing', 'arranging'. Maintain consistent parallel structure. 'Some other chores that I see in the house' -> 'other tasks I see around the house' is clearer.

× Maybe me and my mom, but I'm not that so sure because me and my mom have a very lot of of similarities.

✓ Maybe my mom and I, but I'm not very sure because my mom and I have a lot of similarities.

Incorrect pronoun case: use 'my mom and I' as subject. Avoid 'me and my mom'. 'Not that so sure' is ungrammatical; use 'not very sure'. Remove duplicated 'of'. 'A lot of' goes before noun 'similarities'.

× Like we love to make chores, we love to cook, to clean the house.

✓ We like doing chores; we enjoy cooking and cleaning the house.

'Love to make chores' is incorrect collocation; use 'like doing chores' or 'love doing chores'. Maintain parallel structure and use verbs that fit: 'cook' and 'clean' become gerunds when listing activities. Replace repetition 'we love' with varied phrasing for natural speech.