Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并注意句子准确性与连贯性。尽量控制在最多5句内，先用主题句直接回答，然后用一至两句具体细节说明（如频率、技能水平或喜好原因）。避免语法错误（如“I can do often”，“I'm specialized on that”应改为“I play them often”或“I’m quite skilled at them”），并使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I play the piano and also compose my own pieces, which I practice several times a week. I also enjoy team sports like basketball, badminton and soccer, and I play them regularly to stay fit. These activities help me relax and keep my energy high.

提案: 回答要更清晰地表达时间和因果关系，避免时态混乱。先直接回答（Yes/No），然后用一两句话说明哪些爱好从小开始、是谁影响的以及具体例子。注意语法和词汇搭配（如“trust many thing”不自然，应为“try many things”或“become interested in many activities”）。

例: Yes, most of my current hobbies started in childhood. My mother encouraged me to try many activities, so I learned to draw and play the piano when I was young. Because of that early exposure, I have kept these hobbies into adulthood.

提案: 回答要具体并更准确使用时态和固定搭配。先直接回答，然后给出一两个具体例子并说明持续时间或成就。避免冗余（例如重复“most of my hobbies”），并把未来计划表达得更流畅（如“I plan to study art at university”）。

例: Yes, I have had several hobbies since childhood. I began drawing and learning the piano when I was very young, and I have developed strong skills in piano over the years. I am also planning to study art at university because I have always been passionate about it.

提案: 回答要更简洁并注意比较表达。直接回答（Yes/No/Partly），然后说明哪些活动是共同参与的以及为何兴趣或水平不同。改进不自然表达（如“they're not specialized so many”应为“they aren’t as skilled”）。使用连接词使逻辑清楚。

例: Partly. I often play frisbee and badminton with my parents, so we share some hobbies. However, they aren't as skilled or as committed as I am, so we don't always play at the same level.

× I do have a lot of hobbies and I'm so proud of that.

✓ I have a lot of hobbies and I'm very proud of them.

原句中“do have”虽非完全错误，但在陈述句中不需要强调助动词，且“that”指代不清。改为“I have... I’m very proud of them” 更自然。建议在简单陈述时省略多余的助动词，用复数代词指代复数名词。

× Firstly, I can play music like piano and I can compose music.

✓ Firstly, I can play the piano and I can compose music.

在英语中谈论乐器时通常在乐器前加定冠词“the”，所以应为“play the piano”。中文建议：提到乐器时记得用“the + 乐器”。

× In addition, I like to stay active, so I do various health activities including basketball, badminton, volleyball and soccer.

✓ In addition, I like to stay active, so I do various physical activities including basketball, badminton, volleyball and soccer.

“health activities”用法不自然，通常用“physical activities”或“sports”。中文建议：选择固定搭配“physical activities/sports”来表达体育运动。

× I can do often and I'm specialized on that.

✓ I play them often and I'm specialized in them.

原句语序和词汇使用不当。“I can do often”不符合英语习惯，且“specialized on”应为“specialized in”。中文建议：频率副词通常放在动词前或后（例如“play them often”），“specialize in”表示擅长某事。

× Yeah, it's for most of the hobbies right now.

✓ Yeah, that's true for most of my hobbies now.

原句“It’s for most of the hobbies right now”结构不通顺。改为“that's true for most of my hobbies now”更符合表达。中文建议：用“that's true for...”来表达“这对……适用”。

× It's developed from my childhood.

✓ They developed from my childhood.

“It”与“developed”主谓不一致，且要指代“hobbies”（复数），应使用“They developed”。中文建议：注意代词与先行词一致，复数名词用复数代词和动词。

× My mom started, encouraged me and told me to trust many thing as I can.

✓ My mom started me on them, encouraged me and told me to try as many things as I could.

原句措辞不当。“started”需要宾语且短语“started me on them”更自然；“trust many thing as I can”语法错误，意图应为“试很多东西”，用“try as many things as I could”。中文建议：用固定短语“start someone on something”并用“try as many things as I could”表达尽可能多尝试。

× Therefore, when I grow up, I had a lot of hobbies and I persisted all of them.

✓ Therefore, when I grew up, I had a lot of hobbies and I stuck with them.

时间状语“when I grew up”需要过去时；“persisted all of them”用法不当，应使用“stuck with them”表示坚持这些爱好。中文建议：注意与时间状语一致的时态，并使用常见搭配“stick with something”。

× Yes, definitely. Most of my hobbies are developed from my childhood.

✓ Yes, definitely. Most of my hobbies developed in my childhood.

“are developed from my childhood”被动结构不自然，直接用过去时“developed in my childhood”更简洁。中文建议：描述过去形成的习惯用过去式。

× For example, like I started to draw when I was little and I also started to play piano and I'm specialized on it.

✓ For example, I started drawing when I was little and I also started to play the piano and I'm specialized in it.

“For example, like”重复且不必要；“started to draw”可改为“started drawing”；同样“play piano”应为“play the piano”，并把“specialized on”改为“specialized in”。中文建议：避免口语中多余的填充词，使用固定搭配。

× And in the future I will study art in my university which is I find interested in.

✓ And in the future I will study art at my university, which I find interesting.

“study art in my university”应为“study art at my university”；定语从句“which is I find interested in”语序和形式错误，应为“which I find interesting”或“which I am interested in”。中文建议：用“interesting”作表语或用“be interested in + 名词/动名词”。

× Well, it is hard to say, although my parents and I usually hang out together like playing the frisbee or badminton, but I believe they're not specialized so many compared to me.

✓ Well, it's hard to say. Although my parents and I usually hang out together doing activities like playing frisbee or badminton, I believe they aren't as specialized as I am.

原句冗长且有多处错误：“like playing the frisbee”中“the”可省，“doing activities”更自然；“not specialized so many compared to me”语法错误，正确比较结构为“not as specialized as I am”。中文建议：把复杂句拆成两句，使用正确的比较结构“not as ... as”。

× So sometimes I would say it's difficult to play together.

✓ So sometimes I would say it's difficult for us to play together.

原句缺少明确的主体，改为“difficult for us to play together”更清晰。中文建议：表达“对我们来说很难一起玩”时使用“difficult for us to ...”。