Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然并直接。先用一句主题句表明有爱好，然后用简洁的细节说明每个爱好的频率和原因，避免多余词汇与语法错误。可以改进发音（例如去掉多余的冠词和重复词），并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I have a few hobbies. I play basketball more than three times a week because it helps me stay fit, and I play video games every day to relax after studying.

提案: 注意时态一致和拼写（例如 'had' 而不是 'have'，'paint' 而不是 'plant'）。先用一句清楚的主题句说明童年爱好，再补充具体情境与感受。避免重复短语并改正文法错误，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, when I was a child living with my grandmother, I loved painting. I wasn't very good at it, but I enjoyed experimenting with colors and drawing simple scenes.

提案: 回答要直接且用词准确。避免不必要的填充词（如 'MMM'）和错误短语（如 'eaten on one thing'）。使用正确时态和词汇表达持续时间（e.g. 'since childhood' vs 'since junior high'），并用连词阐明对比。

例: No, I don't have any hobby that has lasted since childhood. The longest-standing hobby I have is playing video games, which I started in junior high school.

提案: 先给出直接回答，然后具体说明与家人一起做这项活动的频率和感受。修正常见错误（如 'sample B' 应为 'same as'，去掉重复词），并用连词使句子连贯。注意时态和单复数。

例: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family, especially fishing. On weekends we go fishing together, and it's exciting when we catch a big fish.

× For example, the basketball and the video games.

✓ For example, basketball and video games.

句中不需要定冠词“the”来泛指兴趣爱好。体育或娱乐活动作泛指时应使用不定冠词或省略冠词。建议把“the basketball and the video games”改为“basketball and video games”。

× I play basketball like maybe more than three times a week and video games every day.

✓ I play basketball maybe more than three times a week and play video games every day.

原句中缺少第二个谓语动词，导致句子结构不平行。两个并列的活动应有相同的动词形式，故在第二部分补上“play”。

× Yes, I have some hobbies when I was a child, when I was a little kid living with my grandma.

✓ Yes, I had some hobbies when I was a child, when I was a little kid living with my grandma.

句子描述过去的情况，应使用过去时。原句中用了现在时“have”，与“when I was a child”时间不一致。建议将“have”改为过去式“had”。

× I really love painting, although I plant very bad, but it's quite interesting.

✓ I really loved painting, although I'm very bad at it, but it's quite interesting.

原句多个问题：1) 表过去爱好应用过去时“loved”（若仍喜欢可保留现在时）；2) “plant”拼写错误且误用，正确表达应为“be bad at it”；3) 句中既有“although”又有“but”造成连接词重复，应保留其一。建议改为“I really loved painting, although I'm very bad at it.” 或若现在仍喜欢用“I really love painting, although I'm very bad at it.”。

× MMM no, I reckon that I have never eaten on one thing or a hobby since I was a child.

✓ No, I reckon that I have never stuck to one thing or one hobby since I was a child.

原句结构和用词错误：1) “eaten on one thing”毫无意义，应为“stick to”或“keep”表示坚持某事；2) “one thing or a hobby”重复且不自然，改为“one thing or one hobby”更清晰；3) 时态“have never ... since I was a child”可用现在完成时与自过去持续到现在的含义相符。建议使用“have never stuck to one thing or one hobby”。

× My longest habit I kept is playing video games, but it formed when I was in the junior high school.

✓ The longest habit I kept is playing video games, but it started when I was in junior high school.

原句语序和时态不当：1) “My longest habit I kept”语序不自然，改为“The longest habit I kept”或更自然“The hobby I've kept the longest”；2) “it formed”搭配不佳，通常用“started”或“began”；3) “the junior high school”中定冠词多余，一般说“junior high school”。建议改为“The hobby I've kept the longest is playing video games; it started when I was in junior high school.”。

× Yes, I do have the sample B as my father.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobby as my father.

原句中“the sample B”完全不合语境，可能拼写或词汇错误。应表达“与我父亲相同的爱好”即“the same hobby as my father”。此外“do have”中的助动词可省略为“have”。

× We all love fishing and in the weekend we we will go fishing together and it's quite interesting when we when we hook up some very big fish.

✓ We all love fishing, and on weekends we go fishing together. It's really exciting when we catch some very big fish.

原句问题：1) 介词短语应为“on weekends”或“at the weekend”，而非“in the weekend”；2) 重复词“we we”与“when we when”是口误，应删除重复；3) 时态混乱，描述习惯性行为应用一般现在时“go fishing”而不是将来时“will go”；4) “hook up some very big fish”表达不自然，通常说“catch”。建议改为“We all love fishing, and on weekends we go fishing together. It's really exciting when we catch some very big fish.”