Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答信息量较多但语言不够连贯，存在语法错误与冗余。注意一句话只表达一个主旨，使用连接词使观点清晰，修正时态与词形错误（如"saying"、"3 * a week"、"I see it my free time"等），并把一句话控制在最多五句内。可以先给主题句，然后用一至两句补充细节并用连接词（for example, also, because）衔接。

例: I have several hobbies, mainly cooking and jogging. I enjoy cooking because it is creative and relaxing; for example, I like trying new recipes at the weekend. I also go jogging three times a week to keep fit and clear my mind.

提案: 时态和语法错误较多（应使用过去式），表达不够具体且句子结构混乱。回答儿童时期的爱好时用过去时，给出具体例子并说明感受或结果，避免不完整的从句（如"or which"）。

例: When I was a child, I liked cooking and sometimes went jogging with my parents. I enjoyed cooking because it felt creative and satisfying; for example, I often made simple dishes like fried rice for my family, which made me proud.

提案: 答案重复且语法不准确，时态与结构需改进。使用完成时或表达持续性的结构（have enjoyed / have liked）更合适，给出一两句具体细节或变化来丰富内容。

例: Yes, I've enjoyed cooking since childhood because I find it interesting and creative. Over the years I've improved my skills and still often prepare simple meals for my parents, such as stir-fries and soups.

提案: 开头不自然且有用词错误（例如"Real entirely","watching fields"）。需先直接回答，然后用一两句细节说明相同与不同之处。使用正确搭配（watching films/football/fields?）并注意复数与冠词。

例: Not entirely. I share some hobbies with my family, such as hiking and watching films, which we often do together on weekends because it helps us bond. However, I also have personal interests like photography that I pursue on my own.

× My hobbies are cooking, jogging, and saying I enjoy cooking because it's creative and relaxing and I usually try new recipes at the weekend.

✓ My hobbies are cooking and jogging. I enjoy cooking because it's creative and relaxing, and I usually try new recipes at the weekend.

原句在列举爱好后直接接入“saying I enjoy...”结构，不符合英语表达习惯；此外句子过长且连词使用不当。建议将句子分成两句，先列举爱好，再说明原因和频率。注意连词“and”连接两部分时要保持并列结构一致性。

× I go jogging 3 * a week to keep fit and clear my mind and I see it my free time to relax and improve my.

✓ I go jogging three times a week to keep fit and clear my mind, and I use my free time to relax and improve myself.

原句中的“3 * a week”和“see it my free time”都是错误的量词或短语使用。正确表达次数应为“three times a week”。“see it my free time”应为“use my free time”。句尾缺少宾语，应为“improve myself”。建议注意数字用词、固定搭配（use one's free time）以及反身代词用法。

× When I was a child, I like cooking and jogging.

✓ When I was a child, I liked cooking and jogging.

句子描述过去的习惯或状态，应使用过去时态。原句使用一般现在时“like”与时间状语“when I was a child”不一致。建议把动词改为过去式“liked”。

× I enjoy cooking because it future creative and enjoyable.

✓ I enjoyed cooking because it was creative and enjoyable.

原句“future creative”不是正确的形容词搭配，且时间背景是过去（when I was a child），应使用过去时“was”。建议使用“was creative and enjoyable”。

× I often prepare simple meals for my parents such as fried rice or which made me proud.

✓ I often prepared simple meals for my parents, such as fried rice, which made me proud.

原句结构混乱，“or which made me proud”连接不当，且时态与前文（过去）不一致。应把动词改为过去式“prepared”，并用非限制性定语从句“which made me proud”来修饰前面的整体动作。

× Yes, I like cooking since my childhood because is interesting and creative.

✓ Yes, I have liked cooking since my childhood because it is interesting and creative.

“since my childhood”表示从过去持续到现在，需用现在完成时，故动词用“have liked”。此外缺少主语“it”来说明“is interesting”，应为“it is interesting”。建议使用现在完成时表达自童年以来持续的喜好。

× I usually prepare simple meals for my parents.

✓ I usually prepare simple meals for my parents.

句子本身语法正确。根据上下文，若指过去一直持续到现在可改为“I usually prepare...”，无需修改。此处保留原句作为正确表达。

× Real entirely. I share a few hobbies with my family, such as hiking and watching fields, which we often do together on weekends because it helps us bond.

✓ Really, yes. I share a few hobbies with my family, such as hiking and watching football matches, which we often do together on weekends because they help us bond.

原句开头“Real entirely.”不是英语表达。应为“Really, yes.”或“Actually, yes.”；“watching fields”没有意义，可能想说“watching football matches”或“watching films”。此外“which we often do...”指代复数爱好，后句谓语主语应使用复数“they help us bond”。建议使用恰当的词汇并保持代词指代一致。

× However, I also have personal interest like photography.

✓ However, I also have personal interests, like photography.

“personal interest”若是泛指多个爱好应使用复数“interests”。此外在列举时最好加逗号“like photography”。建议将名词改为复数形式以表达多个兴趣。