Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrases like "I'm still fun" and tighten wording. Use one linking word to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends. It helps me relax after a busy day, and we often share jokes or discuss plans for the weekend. For example, last night we planned a group study session, which made me feel productive and happy.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then provide specific examples of topics using clear vocabulary. Remove hesitations and repetition. Use linking words (for example, or such as) to list details and keep sentences concise.

例: We usually talk about schoolwork, such as homework, upcoming exams, and group projects. We also chat about daily activities, like what we did that day or plans for the weekend.

提案: Answer directly and politely, then give a clear reason with a brief example. Avoid informal or unclear phrases like "one fan" and use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain your preference.

例: I prefer chatting with one friend because conversations are more relaxed and personal. For example, in a one-on-one chat I feel more comfortable sharing my opinions, whereas in a group I might worry about being teased.

提案: Start with a clear statement of preference, then explain why with a specific reason and example. Improve grammar (use full phrases) and avoid short fragments. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it feels more natural and I can read body language. For example, when I'm bored at home I sometimes go out to meet a friend, and we play sports or talk in person, which lifts my mood.

提案: Give a direct answer then explain typical causes and how you handle arguments. Use correct tense and clearer phrasing, and keep it concise (2–3 sentences). Add a brief example of how you resolve conflicts.

例: Sometimes I argue with friends, usually when there is a misunderstanding or someone is rude. However, I try to talk calmly and resolve the issue quickly so the friendship is not damaged; for instance, I apologize if I was wrong and ask to discuss the problem later.

× I really like it when I chat with my friends. I feel I'm still fun and much better than not doing anything.

✓ I really like it when I chat with my friends. I feel I'm still funnier and that is much better than doing nothing.

The phrase 'still fun' is an adjective but comparison requires comparative form 'funnier' (Incorrect use of adjectives/comparative form falls under present tense/usage here). Also 'not doing anything' is awkward; 'doing nothing' is the natural expression. Suggestion: use comparative adjective 'funnier' and the idiomatic phrase 'doing nothing.'

× Me or me likely I will chat with them about my about my schoolwork or my what do I do in my day?

✓ I will probably chat with them about my schoolwork or about what I do during the day.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun order and redundant fragments ('Me or me likely', repeated 'about my'). This is a sentence structure and pronoun misuse issue. Correct structure: subject 'I', modal/adverb 'will probably', object 'chat with them about...', and a clear clause 'what I do during the day.' Suggestion: remove redundant words, use 'probably' for likelihood, and reorder to subject-verb-object.

× Of course one fan because you know that group people can make fun of you or bully you don't know what they will do

✓ Of course one person, because you know that groups of people can make fun of you or bully you; you don't know what they will do.

'One fan' is incorrect in this context; 'one person' suits the meaning. 'Group people' should be 'groups of people' — plural noun with 'of'. Also run-on sentence needs punctuation. Suggestion: use 'groups of people' for plural groups and add punctuation to separate clauses.

× face is a bit nervous but I feel it's better. For example, if I am bored in my house, I will go out and play with him face to face.

✓ Face-to-face I am a bit nervous, but I feel it's better. For example, if I am bored at home, I will go out and meet a friend and play with them face to face.

'Face is a bit nervous' misuses 'face' as subject; needed expression 'face-to-face I am a bit nervous.' 'In my house' is better as 'at home.' 'Play with him' assumes gender; use 'a friend' or 'them' for neutrality. Also hyphenate 'face-to-face' when used adjectivally/adverbially. Suggestion: rearrange sentence to place subject 'I' and use 'meet a friend' and gender-neutral pronoun 'them.'

× sometimes when they may make me be angry and I hope I don't get to argue with my friends any time.

✓ Sometimes they make me angry, and I hope I never have to argue with my friends.

'They may make me be angry' uses modal 'may' awkwardly and 'make me be angry' is unnatural; simple present 'make me angry' is clearer for habitual situations. 'I hope I don't get to argue' is incorrect modal/verb phrase; use 'I hope I never have to argue.' Suggestion: use simple present for repeated actions and 'have to' for necessity/obligation.