Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fix grammar (subject-verb agreement). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases like "because" twice.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends. For example, we often share funny stories and support each other emotionally, which helps me relieve stress.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct verb forms and concise phrasing. Use linking words (for example, such as) and give one or two specific topics as examples rather than a long list with hesitations.

例: We chat about things that happen in our lives. For example, we discuss relationships when someone breaks up and celebrate when someone gets a promotion.

提案: Combine short fragments into complete sentences and avoid small errors. Use a linking word to connect ideas (so/therefore) and give one clear reason with a brief example.

例: I prefer chatting with one friend because conversations are more personal and focused. For instance, we can discuss private issues calmly without interruptions, so the talk feels more sincere.

提案: Reduce repetition and correct word choice (e.g., "misunderstanding" not "misjudgment"). Use one linking phrase and give a concise reason with a brief example.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read tone and facial expressions. For example, I can tell when a friend is upset and respond appropriately, which prevents misunderstandings.

提案: Eliminate filler words and use clear vocabulary (e.g., "disagreement" and "debate"). Start with a topic sentence, then explain briefly how you handle disagreements and give a short example showing resolution.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends when we disagree. However, I present my opinion calmly and debate the issue, and we usually resolve it without harming our friendship—for example, we discuss the facts and agree to disagree if needed.

× It help me relieve stress.

✓ It helps me relieve stress.

Subject-verb agreement: the singular subject 'It' requires the third-person singular present form 'helps' rather than the base form 'help'. Use 'helps' to match the subject and maintain present-tense meaning. Suggestion: Use 'helps' whenever the subject is third-person singular in present simple sentences.

× We basically chat about everything happens around us, uh, no matter is someone who is uh, breaking up, uh, with her boy or girlfriend again or if someone is gonna get a promotion.

✓ We basically chat about everything that happens around us, whether someone is breaking up with her boyfriend or girlfriend again, or if someone is going to get a promotion.

Several issues: a relative clause needs 'that' or 'which' to link 'everything' and 'happens' (Grammar problem type 10/26), and the phrase 'no matter is' is incorrect; use 'whether' to introduce alternatives. 'Gonna' is informal and should be 'going to'. Also use 'boyfriend' as one word. Suggestion: Use 'that happens' after 'everything' and 'whether' to introduce alternatives; avoid colloquial 'gonna' in formal responses.

× No distractions at all and we can talk about intimate topics without worrying someone leaked the information out and we can enjoy a quiet place.

✓ No distractions at all, and we can talk about intimate topics without worrying that someone will leak the information, and we can enjoy a quiet place.

Missing conjunction and incorrect verb forms: after 'worrying' a clause is needed ('that someone will leak...') to show the feared action. Use future 'will leak' or present simple for general fears; 'leaked' is past and mismatches context. Also include commas to clarify sentence structure. Suggestion: Use 'without worrying that someone will leak the information' to form a complete clause and correct tense.

× I prefer chatting face to face because I can tell the tone changes and the facial expression changes when face to face and I can't tell the changes by social media and it will lead to a misjudgment sometime.

✓ I prefer chatting face to face because I can notice changes in tone and facial expressions when face to face, and I can't notice those changes through social media, which can sometimes lead to misjudgments.

Use 'notice' rather than 'tell' for perceiving changes; use plural 'expressions' and 'changes' consistently. 'By social media' is incorrect preposition; use 'through social media'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' and 'misjudgment' pluralized as 'misjudgments' or 'a misjudgment' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use 'notice changes in tone and facial expressions' and 'through social media' and 'sometimes'.

× We share all the bad and the good things in life.

✓ We share all the bad and good things in life.

Redundant definite article 'the' before 'good things' is unnecessary and sounds unnatural. In present simple general statements, omit the second 'the'. Suggestion: Use parallel structure: 'all the bad and good things' or simply 'all the good and bad things'.

× I prefer to chat with only one friend because I enjoy the personal conversation with a particular person.

✓ I prefer to chat with just one friend because I enjoy having a personal conversation with a particular person.

Collocation: 'prefer to chat with only one friend' is fine, but 'enjoy the personal conversation' is unidiomatic; use 'having a personal conversation'. 'Only' vs 'just' preference is stylistic. Suggestion: Use 'having a personal conversation' to sound natural.

× I prefer to chat with only one friend because I enjoy the personal conversation with a particular person. No distractions at all and we can talk about intimate topics without worrying someone leaked the information out and we can enjoy a quiet place.

✓ I prefer to chat with just one friend because I enjoy having a personal conversation with a particular person. There are no distractions, and we can talk about intimate topics without worrying that someone will leak the information, and we can enjoy a quiet place.

Sentence fragment 'No distractions at all' lacks a subject and verb; add 'There are' to form a complete sentence (sentence without a verb issue). Also see earlier note about 'worrying that someone will leak' for preposition/tense. Suggestion: Use complete sentences such as 'There are no distractions at all' and include full clauses after 'without worrying'.

× I argue with friends sometimes, uh, if there's uh, umm mis disagreement between our discussion, I would put forward my opinion and also uh, debut his opinion sometimes, but it won't affect our relationship because it's only for the matter.

✓ I argue with friends sometimes. If there is a disagreement in our discussion, I will put forward my opinion and sometimes rebut their opinion, but it doesn't affect our relationship because it's only about the matter.

Multiple errors: 'mis disagreement' is incorrect (should be 'disagreement'), and 'there's' contraction is acceptable but use 'there is' for clarity. Use 'will' instead of 'would' to state habitual or likely actions (future/modal tense). 'Debut his opinion' is incorrect word choice; 'rebut their opinion' is appropriate. Use 'doesn't' not 'won't' for habitual effects; pronoun 'their' instead of 'his' for gender-neutrality. Suggestion: Use 'rebut' for countering an opinion, correct 'disagreement', and maintain consistent tense (present simple or will for habitual/typical actions).