Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one specific detail. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends, especially in group chats on Telegram. We use these groups to make decisions because it’s easy to get everyone’s opinion quickly.

提案: Organize your answer: start with a general topic sentence, then give two specific examples using linking words (e.g., "for example", "also"). Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., "go to restaurants" not "go to restaurant").

例: We usually talk about plans and personal matters. For example, we decide where to go for coffee or restaurants, and we also share problems or new books we’ve read.

提案: Clarify your main opinion and avoid unclear words ("submarine" is wrong here). State preference directly, then give 1–2 clear reasons joined by linking words like "because" or "so". Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

例: I prefer group chats to one-on-one conversations because they are more lively and we can discuss many topics. For instance, group chats let several friends suggest ideas when we plan outings.

提案: Make your position clear and give balanced reasons without repeating. Replace vague words like "fake" and explain briefly why face-to-face is better (e.g., body language, trust). Use one or two sentences only.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it feels more genuine and you can read body language. While social media is convenient, it can be misleading, so I choose in-person meetings for important conversations.

提案: Give a concise answer and explain one reason with a clear example. Remove hesitations and incorrect phrases like "frightening fighter" and repeated words. Use linking words such as "because" or "but" to show contrast.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends because we have strong opinions. For example, we often disagree about politics or how to organize group activities, but usually we resolve it quickly.

× Yes, I like chatting my best friends and we have a lot of group chats on Telegram and we always if we decided to new decisions we we discuss in our group chat and I like group chatting is also chatting with my besties.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with my best friends, and we have a lot of group chats on Telegram. If we decide on something new, we discuss it in our group chat, and I also enjoy chatting with my besties.

The sentence lacked the preposition 'with' after 'chatting' (Verb + -ing often requires a preposition when indicating a person). 'If we decided to new decisions' mixed tenses and used incorrect wording; use present simple for habitual actions: 'If we decide on something new'. 'Decisions' is redundant here; use 'something' or 'a decision'. Also remove the repeated word 'we' and restructure for clarity.

× Uh, OK, if we go to anywhere, uh, go to restaurant, coffee or also other buildings we should visit, we always discuss in our group chat with my besties and also, uh, we get, we use it to discuss our problems and new books if we read.

✓ Uh, OK, if we go anywhere, for example to a restaurant, a cafe, or other places we should visit, we always discuss it in our group chat with my besties. We also use it to discuss our problems and new books we have read.

Use 'go anywhere' not 'go to anywhere'. 'Go to restaurant, coffee' needs articles and correct noun: 'a restaurant' and 'a cafe'. 'Other buildings we should visit' is unnatural; 'other places we should visit' is clearer. 'Discuss in our group chat with my besties' needs an object: 'discuss it'. 'New books if we read' should be 'new books we have read' to indicate books already read.

× For me chatting with only one friend is submarine then group chats.

✓ For me, chatting with only one friend is worse than group chats.

The student used 'submarine' mistakenly; the intended comparative is 'worse than'. Use 'than' for comparisons. Also add commas for clarity and correct word order.

× In the group chats we have a lot of friends, we always discuss and chatting different about different topics.

✓ In the group chats we have a lot of friends; we always discuss and chat about different topics.

Mixing 'discuss and chatting' is inconsistent: use parallel verbs 'discuss and chat' or both gerunds. 'Chatting different about different topics' is incorrect order; correct phrase is 'chat about different topics'.

× But one with one friend is so boring and some uncomfortable for me.

✓ But being with one friend is so boring and somewhat uncomfortable for me.

'One with one friend' is ungrammatical; use 'being with one friend'. 'Some uncomfortable' should be 'somewhat uncomfortable' or 'a bit uncomfortable'.

× Actually I prefer to face to face communicate because social media is fake.

✓ Actually, I prefer to communicate face-to-face because social media is fake.

The verb and adverb order is wrong: use 'communicate face-to-face' or 'face-to-face communication'. Hyphenate 'face-to-face' when used as an adverb or adjective.

× I think that's why I always prefer to face to face communication, face to face talking and about new life feature like that.

✓ I think that's why I always prefer face-to-face communication and face-to-face conversations about new life developments or similar topics.

Use 'face-to-face communication' not 'to face to face communication'. 'Talking and about new life feature like that' is ungrammatical; 'conversations about new life developments' is clearer. Use 'face-to-face' consistently and hyphenated.

× And social media is good but it is bad. Face to face is better than social.

✓ Social media has good and bad aspects, but face-to-face communication is better than social media.

The original had fragmented sentences and the comparison 'better than social' is incomplete; specify 'social media'. Combine ideas into a single clear sentence and maintain parallel structure.

× Uh, yes, absolutely yes. I sometimes I go with my friends, but my but some, my some friends are so frightening fighter and always they are good with my views and my information information.

✓ Uh, yes, absolutely. Sometimes I argue with my friends, but some of them are aggressive and often disagree with my views and information.

Remove repeated fillers and correct tense/aspect: 'I sometimes I go with my friends' is unclear; likely means 'I sometimes argue with my friends'. 'Frightening fighter' is wrong vocabulary; use 'aggressive' or 'confrontational'. 'Always they are good with my views' is incorrect: use 'often disagree with my views'. Remove duplicated 'information'.

× That's why we sometimes we argue with each other.

✓ That's why we sometimes argue with each other.

Remove the repeated 'we'. Use 'sometimes argue' (simple present for habitual action). Keep subject-verb order correct.