Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が冗長で文法ミスや不必要な繰り返しがあります。まず最初に簡潔に主題文を述べ、その後一つか二つの具体的な理由や例を述べてください。二重の問いかけ（“So I want to ask how how do you feel...”）は避け、聞き返しは自然な表現に直しましょう。また文法（時制、代名詞、一致）を修正すると流暢さと正確さが上がります。具体的には“I like catching up with friends and sharing what’s new with me”のように簡潔にまとめてください。

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me stay updated on their lives and share my own news. For example, I often tell them about small events from my week, like a funny incident at work, which leads to a longer conversation.

提案: 内容がやや不明確で、意図と文法に問題があります。まず直接的にトピック文（例：I usually talk about recent events in my life）を述べ、次に具体例を一つ示してください。さらに“whether she can feel empathy”のような表現は不自然なので、“to see if they understand or sympathise”など自然な表現に変えましょう。文脈に応じて“accident”のような具体語が突然出るのは避け、一般的な例を使うと良いです。

例: I usually talk about recent events in my life, such as things that happened at work or with my family. For example, I once told a friend about a small accident I had on my bike to see if they understood how I felt, and they offered helpful advice.

提案: 答えは主旨を伝えていますが、文が途中で終わっていたり語彙や文法（複数形、人称代名詞）が間違っています。まず明確な主張（I prefer one-on-one conversations）を述べ、理由を一つか二つ示してください。人数の表現は“up to three people including me”ではなく“with up to three people”などと正しく言いましょう。理由は簡潔に述べ、文を完結させてください。

例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because I feel more comfortable and can have deeper conversations. However, I also enjoy small groups of up to three people, since larger groups can feel noisy and distracting.

提案: 表現が不自然で文法エラーや語順の問題があります。まずは明確な主張（I prefer face-to-face communication）を述べ、その理由を一つ述べてください。感情や非言語的手がかり（表情や声の調子）に触れると説得力が増します。例えば“because I can see facial expressions and tone of voice”のように具体的に説明しましょう。文全体を短く明瞭に保つことが重要です。

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can see facial expressions and hear tone of voice, which helps me understand how someone really feels. For instance, when a friend is upset, I can notice their body language and respond more appropriately.

提案: 回答は誠実ですが、文法（代名詞、一致、時制）と自然な語句選択を改善する必要があります。まず“Not so much”の後に簡潔な理由を続け、意図を明確に述べましょう。相手を問い詰める表現（“why you think about that”）は不自然なので“why she thinks that”や“why she holds that view”のように言い換えてください。また連結語（Therefore, As a result）を使い因果関係を明確にしましょう。

例: Not really, because I try to understand my friends’ feelings first. If I disagree, I usually ask why they think that, and after listening I often understand their point of view.

× Yes, I like chatting with my friends, I like catching up with my friends, so I often share what happened to me recently. So I want to ask how how do you feel in your case?

✓ Yes, I like chatting with my friends and catching up with them, so I often share what has happened to me recently. How do you feel in your case?

The original contains run-on sentences and improper question formation. Combine related clauses with a coordinating conjunction and replace the repeated phrase with a pronoun to avoid redundancy. Use present perfect 'has happened' to link recent experience to the present. Form the direct question 'How do you feel in your case?' without the extra 'how'. Suggestion: Use shorter sentences or proper conjunctions and avoid repeating words.

× I usually chat about what happened to me recently because I want to ask her whether she can feel empathy or not.

✓ I usually chat about what has happened to me recently because I want to ask her whether she can feel empathy or not.

Use present perfect 'has happened' to describe recent events relevant to the present. Present simple 'happened' implies a finished past time and is less natural when coupled with 'recently'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for recent events that affect the present.

× I want to know others feelings for the accident.

✓ I want to know others' feelings about the accident.

Possessive form for 'others' requires an apostrophe: others'. Preposition 'about' is the correct collocation with 'feelings' when referring to an event. Suggestion: Use 'others' feelings' or 'others' feelings about' and ensure correct apostrophe placement.

× I prefer to chat with only one friend, but that said, I like talking with up to three person including me, so too many is no good for me because.

✓ I prefer to chat with just one friend, but I also like talking in a group of up to three people including myself, so too many people is not good for me.

Use 'people' (plural) instead of 'person' and 'myself' as the reflexive pronoun when including the speaker. 'Too many' must be followed by a plural noun. Also finish the sentence; 'because' needs a clause explaining why, or remove it. Suggestion: Use correct plural forms and reflexive pronouns and avoid sentence fragments.

× I prefer to communicate face to face to be a social media because if I talk with my friends via social media, I can't understand her feeling.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face rather than via social media because if I talk with my friends online, I can't understand their feelings.

The phrase 'to be a social media' is incorrect; use 'rather than via social media' for contrast. Use 'online' or 'via social media' and match pronoun number: 'their' for plural or generic friends. 'Feelings' plural is more natural. Suggestion: Use clear contrast structures ('rather than') and consistent pronouns.

× So I want to know her feeling and mindful how so it's good.

✓ So I want to know how she feels and be mindful, which is better.

Original has incorrect word order and wrong word forms: 'her feeling' should be 'how she feels'. 'Mindful' needs a verb phrase 'be mindful'. Use 'which is better' to express the result. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb order in indirect questions and appropriate verb forms after adjectives.

× Not so much because I want to understand her feeling.

✓ Not much, because I want to understand her feelings.

'Not so much' is informal but acceptable; 'Not much' is more natural. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' and match the purpose clause. Suggestion: Use 'feelings' and concise expressions.

× So if I can't agree with her views, I often ask her why you think about that.

✓ So if I don't agree with her views, I often ask her why she thinks that.

Match tense and pronouns: use 'don't' for present simple negative. The embedded question should use 'she' not 'you' ('why she thinks that'). Remove extra 'about'. Suggestion: Use correct subject in reported/embedded questions and consistent verb forms.

× So at last I can understand her.

✓ In the end, I can understand her.

'At last' is understandable but 'in the end' is more natural in this context. Keep concise word order. Suggestion: Use 'in the end' to express final outcome and ensure clear placement of time expressions.