Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce repetition and filler words (e.g. “umm”, “then”).

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends. However, due to my busy work schedule, I often cannot reply immediately, so I usually respond when I have free time in the evening.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to separate groups. Give specific examples and finish sentences fully. Avoid trailing off and be careful with informal labels without explanation.

例: I usually chat about two main topics: work and K-pop. For example, with my colleagues we discuss tasks and sometimes complain about stakeholders, whereas with my ‘Army’ fan group we share BTS concert clips and plan meetups.

提案: Answer directly, then explain with specific contrasting reasons and linking words (e.g. “however”, “whereas”). Remove fillers and be concise—one topic sentence plus one supporting detail is enough.

例: It depends on the topic: I prefer group chats for work-related coordination because many people are involved, whereas I choose one-to-one chats for personal or sensitive conversations.

提案: Be decisive and avoid repeating ideas. Start with a direct answer, then give two clear reasons using linking words. Remove stuttering and redundant restatements.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it’s easier to read body language and emotions; however, when schedules or distances make that impossible, I use social media to stay in touch.

提案: Be careful with negative terms like “passive aggressive”; explain briefly and offer a constructive detail. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting example showing how you handle disagreements instead of repeating phrases.

例: Sometimes I have disagreements with friends, but I usually avoid escalation by staying quiet and reflecting first. For instance, I might take time to cool down and then discuss the issue calmly the next day.

× Yes, I do like chatting with my friends, but given my busy schedule because of work UMM, I noticed that I would not instantly reply to their messages but have if I have the time then I would spend my time replying to them.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with my friends, but because of my busy work schedule, I do not always reply instantly to their messages; if I have time, I spend it replying to them.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses awkward modal forms ('would not', 'would spend') where simple present is appropriate for habitual actions. Use simple present for routines: 'I like', 'I do not always reply', and use conditional only when needed. Also simplify phrasing for clarity and correct word order ('because of my busy work schedule'). Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual behavior and keep clauses parallel.

× So I have different friend groups. I have a friend group with Army, which is my fangirl group, and then there's my work group. And of course with work we always chat about or complain about our stakeholders. But with my Army group, you would always chat about the recent concert clips of BTS and our plans to.

✓ I have different friend groups. I have a fangirl group for the Army and a work group. At work we often complain about our stakeholders. With my Army group, we always talk about recent BTS concert clips and our plans.

The original uses 'you would always chat' which incorrectly generalizes and misuses the pronoun 'you' instead of 'we' for personal experience. Also sentence fragments and awkward phrasing ('plans to') appear. Use 'we' to describe the speaker's group activities and complete the sentence ('plans'). Suggestion: Use consistent first-person plural pronouns for group habits and finish incomplete clauses.

× It depends. So if it's a group of people, it's usually about work, or again with my army friend. But if I'm only chatting with one friend, it usually is about umm, talking about something specific, something personal. So it really depends on what the topic is about.

✓ It depends. If it's a group chat, it's usually about work or, with my Army friends, other shared interests. If I'm chatting with one friend, it's usually about something specific or personal. So it really depends on the topic.

The original has article and noun-number issues ('my army friend' vs 'my Army friends') and redundant phrasing ('what the topic is about'). Also 'group of people' is wordy; 'group chat' is clearer. Use plural when referring to the fandom group and avoid redundant 'about'. Suggestion: Use correct articles and plural forms and remove redundant words.

× I prefer face to face communication because it's easier to catch up, easier to to to notice their sentiments, their feelings. If it's face to face. But given our busy schedule, our different location, then of course social media would do. But if I were to give an answer, of course, face to face.

✓ I prefer face-to-face communication because it's easier to catch up and to notice people's feelings. But because of our busy schedules and different locations, social media is more convenient. If I had to choose, I would prefer face-to-face.

Problems: missing hyphen in 'face-to-face', incorrect preposition 'in' not present but 'of our busy schedule, our different location' is ungrammatical and should be pluralized ('schedules' and 'locations') and use 'because of'. Also 'social media would do' is informal; 'is more convenient' fits better. Finally maintain consistent subjects ('people' instead of 'their'). Suggestion: Use correct prepositions and plural forms and prefer clearer verbs for preference.

× Well, it can't be helped, but in instances when I would argue with my friends, my go to mechanism or my go to behavior would be to be passive aggressive. So I don't really speak, speak or talk much because I'm afraid of what I would say and how it would affect them.

✓ Well, it can't be helped. When I argue with my friends, my go-to behavior is to be passive-aggressive. I don't talk much because I'm afraid of what I might say and how it would affect them.

The original overuses conditional 'would' where simple present or modal 'might' is better for likely outcomes. Use simple present for habitual reactions ('my go-to behavior is') and 'might' for uncertain future consequences ('what I might say'). Also hyphenate 'go-to' and 'passive-aggressive'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and 'might' to express possibility.