Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail explaining why you enjoy chatting. Use linking words if you add a second point.

例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with my friends because it makes me feel relaxed and happy. For example, when we meet on weekends we laugh about our week and share advice, which helps me unwind.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then specific examples of typical topics. Avoid vague or unclear phrases and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: We usually talk about memories from high school and what we are doing now. For example, we reminisce about funny classroom moments, then move on to discussing work, hobbies, and future plans.

提案: Answer directly and provide a short explanation with one specific detail. Avoid confusing or irrelevant phrases about numbers or groups.

例: I prefer both, but I usually chat in a small group of three friends because it’s easier to keep the conversation balanced and everyone can join in.

提案: State your preference clearly (face-to-face or social media) and give a concise reason with a clear example. Avoid mixed or unclear sentences and unnecessary details about being inactive unless relevant.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I value seeing people's expressions and having real conversations. For instance, I meet friends for coffee to talk instead of texting, since it feels more personal.

提案: Answer directly and use simple, appropriate language. Say whether you argue and give a specific example of a typical disagreement, avoiding confusing or inappropriate words. Use linking words to clarify.

例: Sometimes we argue, but only about small things like who will drive or plans for the weekend. For example, we might disagree about which restaurant to choose, but it’s usually resolved quickly.

× Yes, I love them. I love it when I am around with them because I feel, I feel.

✓ Yes, I love talking with my friends. I love it when I am around them because I feel happy.

Pronoun use and phrasing: 'them' alone is unclear after 'Yes, I love'; use 'talking with my friends' to match the question. 'Around with them' is ungrammatical; correct is 'around them'. The repeated 'I feel, I feel' is incomplete; supply an emotion such as 'happy' to finish the thought.

× You always talk about all memories and more, like in high school. I'm also a future by lifestyle.

✓ We usually talk about memories, for example from high school. I also like to talk about plans for the future and my lifestyle.

Pronoun and word choice: 'You always talk' is inappropriate for speaking about the student's experience; use 'We usually talk'. 'All memories and more' is vague; 'memories' is sufficient. 'I'm also a future by lifestyle' is ungrammatical; intended meaning appears to be discussing 'future plans and lifestyle', so rephrase accordingly.

× I prefer both, but most of the time I'm with my two friends. Most of my group city of group supervisors were three members.

✓ I prefer both, but most of the time I'm with two friends. Most of my groups had three members.

Number and word order errors: 'my two friends' is acceptable but redundant with 'my'; simplified to 'with two friends'. The phrase 'group city of group supervisors' is meaningless; likely intended 'groups' or 'group members'. Use 'groups had three members' to indicate plural groups with three members each.

× I prefer this to be a personal goal for contact with them. Using social media is not only a useful you don't want to look at my messages of your flight online and I am not active in my social media.

✓ I prefer face-to-face contact because it is more personal. Using social media can be useful, but I am not very active on social media and I do not like checking messages online often.

Preposition and sentence structure errors: 'I prefer this to be a personal goal for contact with them' is awkward; 'I prefer face-to-face contact' is clear. The original second sentence runs several ideas together and misuses prepositions ('of your flight' is irrelevant). Break into two sentences, clarify contrast and use proper prepositions 'on social media' and 'checking messages online'.

× Read my high school friends. You don't argue, but we make college sex at work. We argue about small things.

✓ With my high school friends, we don't argue about important things, but we sometimes argue about small things.

Sentence fragments and inappropriate/misused words: 'Read my high school friends' is nonsensical; likely meant 'With my high school friends'. 'We make college sex at work' is incoherent and contains an inappropriate phrase; probably a transcription error. Remove that and clarify that arguments are about small things. Ensure complete sentence structure and appropriate vocabulary.