Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: open with a direct topic sentence, avoid odd word choices (e.g., "leaves my strengths", "conventions"), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific example and a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me share ideas and learn from their experience. For example, we exchange practical tips about studying and work, which often helps me solve problems. As a result, I feel less stressed and more confident.

提案: Make sentences coherent and correct vocabulary: start with a clear topic sentence, explain specific topics (e.g., deadlines, project issues), and avoid unclear words like "magnets" or "all fun." Use linking words to show cause and effect.

例: I usually talk to my friends about work because I often face tight deadlines and heavy tasks. For instance, we share time-management strategies and software tools, and they give me emotional support when I’m stressed.

提案: Good structure and relevant content but fix grammar and be concise: use correct tense and clearer nouns (e.g., "a friend had career problems"), and avoid filler words. Add a linking word to show result.

例: I prefer talking in a group because we get diverse perspectives on personal and professional issues. For example, when a friend had career problems last month, the group suggested several options and resources, which helped him decide.

提案: Strong answer: clear preference and appropriate contrast. Improve natural phrasing and grammar ("face-to-face meetings" / "more important or personal conversations"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word for contrast.

例: I prefer communicating via social media because it’s convenient for arranging plans when everyone is busy. However, I choose face-to-face meetings for more important or personal conversations.

提案: Be grammatically correct and specific: correct mistakes ("we discussed our preferences and found a compromise"), avoid vague phrases like "find a components." Use a brief example and a linking word to show resolution.

例: Not really. My friends and I usually express disagreements calmly and try to understand each other. For instance, when we disagreed about a trip last month, we discussed our preferences and found a compromise that suited everyone.

× That also leaves my strengths and relieves tension.

✓ That also highlights my strengths and relieves tension.

The verb 'leave' is not the appropriate collocation with 'strengths' in this context. 'Leave' is often transitive with an object meaning to allow something to remain; 'highlight' or 'brings out' is a more natural verb to show strengths. Use 'highlights' to correctly convey making strengths more noticeable.

× So I find the conventions with friends very beneficial for our overall.

✓ So I find conversations with friends very beneficial for my overall well-being.

'Conventions' is the wrong word here; 'conversations' fits the context. The phrase 'for our overall' is incomplete and ungrammatical; it needs a noun such as 'well-being' and should match the speaker (my). Revise to 'my overall well-being' to complete the idea and correct possessive reference.

× To be honest, I usually chat with my friends about work because I'm all fun and a lot of pressure from deadlines and a heavy workload.

✓ To be honest, I usually chat with my friends about work because I have a lot of pressure from deadlines and a heavy workload.

The phrase 'I'm all fun' is incorrect and unrelated; likely intended 'I have a lot of pressure.' Use present simple 'have' for states ('I have a lot of pressure'). This corrects the tense and meaning.

× I turn to them for practical solutions like time, magnets, tips, and full emotional support when I feel stressed.

✓ I turn to them for practical solutions like time-management tips and full emotional support when I feel stressed.

The list contains incorrect items: 'time, magnets, tips' is not meaningful. The intended phrase is 'time-management tips.' Replace with the correct compound noun and use commas appropriately. 'For' is correct preposition here.

× I prefer talking with a group because we can discuss personal and professional issues and gain diverse perspectives.

✓ I prefer talking with a group because we can discuss personal and professional issues and gain diverse perspectives.

No grammatical change needed; sentence is correct. Included here to indicate checked for subject-verb agreement.

× For example, one had a career, uh, problems last month.

✓ For example, one of my friends had career problems last month.

The original is ungrammatical: 'one had a career, problems' is incorrect word order and missing noun. Use 'one of my friends' to clarify the subject and 'had career problems' as correct past tense phrasing.

× Several colleagues suggested different career options and useful resources, which helped me decide it.

✓ Several colleagues suggested different career options and useful resources, which helped me decide.

The pronoun 'decide it' is incorrect; after 'decide' no direct object is needed here. Remove 'it'. The rest of the sentence is correct. Also 'colleagues' is fine without article.

× To be honest, I prefer communicating via social media because we are often busy and it's much more convenient for arranging daily plans.

✓ To be honest, I prefer communicating via social media because we are often busy and it's much more convenient for arranging daily plans.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present tense; included to confirm tense consistency.

× It also gives me more freedom to reply when it suits me, although I still choose face to face meeting for a more important or personal conversations.

✓ It also gives me more freedom to reply when it suits me, although I still choose face-to-face meetings for more important or personal conversations.

Use plural 'meetings' to match general reference, and hyphenate 'face-to-face' when used as adjective. Also remove 'a' before 'more important' and match plurality with 'conversations.'

× Not really. My friends are very kind, so even if we disagree, we usually express different views calmly and try to understand each other.

✓ Not really. My friends are very kind, so even if we disagree, we usually express our different views calmly and try to understand each other.

Add 'our' before 'different views' for clarity and naturalness; otherwise sentence is fine. This improves possessive reference and flow.

× For instance, last month we had different opinions about a trip, but we discussed our preference and find a components.

✓ For instance, last month we had different opinions about a trip, but we discussed our preferences and found a compromise.

Mismatch of tenses and incorrect word choices: 'discussed' (past) should pair with past 'found' not 'find'. 'Preference' should be plural 'preferences' and 'find a components' is nonsense; intended 'found a compromise.' Correct past tense and word choice.