Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid word repetition and grammatical errors, and add one specific example. Use linking words for coherence (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps strengthen our relationships and improves my communication skills. For example, we often share stories about our day and give each other advice, which brings us closer.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence and provide specific topics and a brief example. Use linking words like 'and' or 'for example' to connect ideas, and correct grammar (e.g., 'ask' instead of 'question').

例: We usually talk about daily life and schoolwork. For example, we share ideas about classes and I often ask them for help when I have questions about homework.

提案: Be clear and concise. State your preference in one sentence, give a specific reason, and use correct expressions (e.g., 'feel safer' and 'express myself'). Avoid filler words. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer chatting with one friend because I feel safer and can express myself more honestly. In a one-to-one conversation I find it easier to explain my thoughts without interruptions.

提案: Give a clear preference and one or two precise reasons. Use natural phrasing (e.g., 'face to face' and 'on social media'), correct grammar, and avoid hesitation. Link reasons with 'because' or 'as'.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it's more personal and allows for instant feedback through body language. For example, meeting a friend in person helps me understand their reactions better than texting.

提案: Be concise and clear. Say whether you argue and give a specific reason and result. Use linking words like 'when' and 'but' correctly, and correct grammar (e.g., 'we sometimes disagree' and 'we make up afterwards').

例: Yes, we sometimes argue when we disagree about plans or opinions, but we usually resolve it quickly. For example, if we can't agree on where to go, we discuss the options and then decide together.

× I really love chatting with friends because it can connect together and bond relationship with my friends.

✓ I really love chatting with friends because it can help us connect and build relationships with my friends.

Subject-verb agreement and collocation: 'connect together' is redundant and 'bond relationship' is ungrammatical. Use 'help us connect' (match plural subject) and 'build relationships' (plural) for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'help us connect' and 'build relationships'. Never repeat 'with my friends' twice; keep one instance.

× We can share the story together and improve my communication.

✓ We can share stories together and improve my communication skills.

Word choice and agreement: 'the story' is too specific; 'stories' fits general sharing. 'Improve my communication' needs a noun 'skills' to be natural. Suggestion: use plural 'stories' and add 'skills'.

× So I really love.

✓ So I really enjoy that.

Fragment and register: 'So I really love' is a sentence fragment lacking an object. Use a full phrase like 'I really enjoy that' or 'I really like that' to complete the idea.

× Sometimes I chat with my friends in order to share my ideas and my story in my daily life.

✓ Sometimes I chat with my friends to share my ideas and stories about my daily life.

Tense and register: 'in order to' is wordy; 'to share' is sufficient. Use plural 'stories' and 'about my daily life' for natural English. Present simple 'chat' is fine.

× Or if I have a problem with my homework, I always chat with my friends to question.

✓ If I have a problem with my homework, I always ask my friends for help.

Incorrect verb and collocation: 'chat...to question' is unnatural. Use 'ask my friends for help' or 'ask my friends a question'. Suggestion: use 'ask' + 'for help'.

× Personally I prefer chatting with only one friend because I feel more safety and I can't stronger when I want to share my ideas or my story.

✓ Personally I prefer chatting with just one friend because I feel safer and I can't be strong when I want to share my ideas or my stories.

Adjective/adverb and verb forms: 'more safety' is incorrect; use comparative adjective 'safer'. 'I can't stronger' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'I can't be strong' but context suggests 'I feel stronger', so better: 'I feel safer and more confident when I share my ideas with one friend.' Suggestion: use 'safer' and rephrase to 'feel stronger' or 'feel more confident'.

× Uh, then a big group in message.

✓ Uh, unlike chatting in a big group in messages.

Fragment and preposition use: original is a fragment and missing linking words. Use 'unlike' or 'rather than' to contrast, and 'in messages' for correct plural noun. Suggestion: 'unlike chatting in a big group in messages'.

× Personally I prefer communicate face to face with my friends more than in social media because it can help me connect with together then in chatting on the Internet and I can share my ideas so quickly and umm.

✓ Personally I prefer to communicate face to face with my friends rather than on social media because it helps me connect in person, and I can share my ideas more quickly.

Verb form and preposition errors: need 'prefer to communicate' (infinitive). Use 'on social media' not 'in social media'. 'Connect with together then in chatting' is redundant; use 'connect in person'. 'So quickly' -> 'more quickly'. Suggestion: use infinitive after 'prefer', correct prepositions, and simplify the clause.

× Yes, sometimes if I have the problems with together or we have a idea to share with today together I also have many times to agree with my friends and but after that we also become normal.

✓ Yes, sometimes if we have problems together or if we have an idea to share today, I often disagree with my friends, but after that we usually become okay again.

Tense, article, and word choice errors: 'have the problems with together' is ungrammatical—use 'have problems together'. 'a idea' should be 'an idea'. 'I also have many times to agree' is unclear—context suggests 'I often disagree' or 'we often argue'. 'we also become normal' -> 'we usually become okay again'. Suggestion: correct articles, choose appropriate verbs (disagree/argue), and fix word order.