Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: state a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct grammar (e.g., 'when you are bored', 'from a distance', 'you don't need to meet them in person'). Use one supporting reason and an example. Keep answer under 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends. It helps me feel connected when I’m bored, and I can keep in touch from a distance without meeting in person. For example, I often message a college friend when I need a quick laugh or advice.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific examples using linking words (for example, or, and). Correct grammar: 'We usually talk about plans, such as going to the cinema or hiking, and sometimes about our future careers.' Limit fillers and split into two supporting points if needed.

例: We usually talk about plans and future goals. For example, we arrange activities like going to the cinema or hiking, and we also discuss our career plans and job prospects.

提案: Give a direct preference or say you like both, then explain briefly and specifically using linking words (because, however). Correct grammar: 'both of them', 'other people'. Avoid vague phrases like 'different issues'—specify differences (e.g., variety of topics vs deeper conversation).

例: I like both, because chatting in a group gives me a variety of topics and energy, while talking one-on-one allows for deeper, more personal conversations. For instance, I might discuss weekend plans with a group but share personal problems with a single close friend.

提案: Provide a clear reason and specific benefits of face-to-face communication. Remove unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g., 'structure of their face', 'move your four accounts together'). Use linking words and one example. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows for clearer expression through facial expressions and tone of voice. For example, when discussing a sensitive topic, seeing someone’s expressions helps me understand their feelings better than messages do.

提案: Answer directly and give specific examples of typical disagreements, using correct grammar (e.g., 'different opinions on topics like politics or career choices') and linking words (for example, however). Explain how you handle arguments briefly. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases like 'negative answer'.

例: Sometimes we argue because we have different opinions on topics like politics or career choices. For example, we might disagree about which industry is better to work in, but usually we calm down and try to listen to each other’s point of view.

× Of course I do because when you are boring, you can chat with them, uh, from, uh, far distance and you didn't need, you don't need to, uh, see them, uh, outside, you know?

✓ Of course I do because when you are bored, you can chat with them from a distance and you don't need to see them outside, you know?

The sentence uses 'boring' (which describes something that causes boredom) instead of 'bored' (which describes a person's feeling). Also 'far distance' is unnatural; 'from a distance' is the correct prepositional phrase. The speaker mixed past 'you didn't need' and present 'you don't need'; since the context is general present truth, use present tense 'you don't need'. Suggestion: use 'bored' for feelings, 'from a distance' for location, and keep consistent present tense for general statements.

× We usually chat about, umm, have some, umm, exciting plan like going to cinema or going to uh, hiking. Or maybe we are talking about uh, our future, about working.

✓ We usually chat about having some exciting plans like going to the cinema or going hiking. Or maybe we talk about our future and work.

After 'chat about' we need a noun or gerund phrase: 'have some exciting plan' is incorrect; use 'having some exciting plans'. 'Going to cinema' needs an article: 'the cinema'. 'Going to hiking' is incorrect — use 'going hiking' (gerund) or 'going on a hike'. The second sentence uses 'are talking' which is unnecessary; simple present 'we talk' fits habitual actions. Suggestions: use gerunds for activities ('having', 'going hiking'), pluralize 'plans' for multiple examples, and use 'the cinema'.

× The both because uh, both of them have different uh, issues and you can talk about many things with other peoples and umm, I enjoy with both of them. I can say only this.

✓ Both, because they have different issues and you can talk about many things with other people, and I enjoy spending time with both of them. That's all I can say.

'The both' is incorrect; use 'both'. 'Both of them have different issues' is okay but 'they have different issues' is more natural. 'Other peoples' is wrong; 'people' is already plural and not countable here. 'I enjoy with both of them' lacks the verb 'spending time' or similar. 'I can say only this' is awkward; 'That's all I can say' is natural. Suggestions: use 'people' not 'peoples', use complete verb phrases like 'enjoy spending time with'.

× I prefer to communicate face to face because, uh, when you visit someone, you can talk about many things and you can see, uh, their, uh, structure of their face, you know, And I think you can, uh, move your four accounts together.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face because when you visit someone you can talk about many things and see the structure of their face. I also think you can bring your four accounts together.

Remove redundant commas and fillers. 'Structure of their face' is awkward but grammatically acceptable; simplified to 'see the structure of their face'. The phrase 'move your four accounts together' is unclear; likely 'bring your four accounts together' (meaning combine or manage them together). Use 'bring' instead of 'move' for collocational correctness. Suggestions: simplify phrasing, remove fillers, and use correct collocations like 'bring accounts together'.

× Sometimes we do, yeah, because, uh, you have different opinion in somethings like uh, politics or uh, job likes and we can't talk normally together and maybe we are uh, we have negative answer.

✓ Sometimes we do, because you have different opinions about things like politics or jobs and we can't talk normally together, and maybe we have negative reactions.

Use plural 'opinions' instead of 'opinion' when referring to different views. 'Different opinion in somethings' should be 'different opinions about things'. 'Job likes' is ungrammatical; 'jobs' or 'job preferences' works. 'We have negative answer' is unclear; 'negative reactions' or 'responses' is better. Maintain simple present for habitual actions. Suggestions: pluralize nouns when needed, use 'about' for topics, and choose clear nouns like 'reactions' or 'responses'.