Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Correct minor grammar errors (e.g., remove repeated words, use 'there' properly) and use more precise vocabulary like 'declare' and 'penalties'.

例: Yes. There are several rules at my university. For instance, students must submit assignments on time, and if they use AI-generated content they must declare it. Moreover, the university has strict anti-plagiarism policies, so students face disciplinary penalties if caught.

提案: Provide a clearer topic sentence and add linking words to structure your points (e.g., 'Firstly', 'However'). Give concrete examples of rules for younger students and a brief reason why adults need fewer rules. Avoid vague phrasing like 'they know'.

例: I think it depends on students' ages. Firstly, younger students benefit from more rules, such as clear rules about punctuality, classroom manners and how to address teachers, because these help them learn discipline. However, for adult students over 18, fewer rules are needed since they can be trusted to manage their own behaviour.

提案: Make the response more natural by using 'professor' or 'lecturer' correctly and simplifying phrasing. Add a specific example of what made the teacher dedicated (e.g., practical case studies, industry experience) and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

例: Yes. Last semester my lecturer for strategic management was very dedicated because he worked in the industry. For example, he brought real case studies to class and shared practical insights, which motivated us and helped us learn a lot.

提案: Avoid repetition and make the topic sentence direct. Explain briefly why fewer rules suit you, with a specific reason or example. Correct grammar: use 'fewer rules' not 'less rules', and tighten wording.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school. As an adult student, I feel we understand acceptable behaviour and responsibilities, especially having grown up in Switzerland, so fewer rules allow more independence and trust.

提案: Improve coherence and correct unclear wording ('learn Foster' unclear). Start with a concise topic sentence, then explain the challenge and the eventual benefit using linking words ('however', 'as a result'). Use precise vocabulary like 'immersion' and 'beneficial'.

例: Yes. In June 2024 I took Korean classes in Seoul and the teacher was very strict, speaking only Korean in class. At first I found it difficult to follow and felt confused, but this immersion was challenging yet very effective, and I improved quickly as a result.

提案: Be concise and fix small errors ('P the students' is unclear). Provide one clear reason with a brief supporting example, and use linking words ('because', 'for example'). Avoid repeating 'no'.

例: No, I would not. Even if students are generally responsible, teachers still need basic ground rules to maintain safety and order—for example, rules about attendance and classroom conduct, especially for younger students.

× Yes there are several rules.

✓ Yes, there are several rules.

Missing comma after introductory yes. Add comma for correct sentence flow and punctuation; this improves readability.

× For example you have to hand in your assignments on time and if you if you use any AI generated content in your assignment then you have to declare it and there.

✓ For example, you have to hand in your assignments on time, and if you use any AI-generated content in your assignment, then you have to declare it there.

Repeated phrase 'if you' is redundant and 'there' was misplaced. Add commas for clause separation, hyphenate AI-generated as a compound adjective, and move 'there' to the correct position to clarify meaning.

× And my university is super strict about plagiarism because it's not tolerated and if they catch you then you will have consequences.

✓ My university is very strict about plagiarism because it is not tolerated, and if they catch you, you will face consequences.

Starting with 'And' is informal; use 'My university'. Replace 'super' with 'very' for formality, change 'it's' to 'it is', add commas to separate clauses, and use 'face consequences' for natural phrasing.

× In my opinion, it depends on the age.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on the students' age.

'The age' is vague; specify by using 'students' age' to indicate whose age is meant and add possessive apostrophe.

× If the students are really young, then it makes sense to have more rules so they know how to behave, especially regarding punctuality and respect and how to communicate.

✓ If the students are really young, then it makes sense to have more rules so they know how to behave, especially regarding punctuality, respect, and communication.

List items should be parallel and separated by commas. Replace 'how to communicate' with 'communication' to match nouns 'punctuality' and 'respect'.

× If the students are already grown up, over 18, then not too many rules because they know.

✓ If the students are already grown up, over 18, then there should not be too many rules because they know how to behave.

Sentence fragment 'then not too many rules because they know' lacks a verb. Add 'there should not be' and 'how to behave' to complete the idea.

× Last semester in my strategic management and ecosystem module, my lecture was really dedicated and motivated regarding the topic since he was working in that field and for us as his students, it was really motivating and we learned a lot.

✓ Last semester in my Strategic Management and Ecosystem module, my lecturer was very dedicated and motivated about the topic since he had worked in that field, and for us as his students it was very motivating; we learned a lot.

Use 'lecturer' (person) instead of 'lecture' (class). Capitalize module names. Use 'very' instead of 'really' for formality. 'Had worked' clarifies past experience; restructure clauses and punctuation for clarity.

× At my age, I prefer less rules at school because we know how everything works and what is acceptable behavior, especially when you grow up in Switzerland.

✓ At my age, I prefer fewer rules at school because we know how everything works and what acceptable behavior is, especially if you grew up in Switzerland.

Use 'fewer' with countable noun 'rules' (not 'less'). Change 'what is acceptable behavior' to 'what acceptable behavior is' for smoother word order. Use 'if you grew up' to match meaning.

× When I first attended Korean classes in Seoul in June 2024, my speaking teacher was very strict and only spoke Korean during lessons.

✓ When I first attended Korean classes in Seoul in June 2024, my speaking teacher was very strict and spoke only Korean during lessons.

'Only spoke Korean' and 'spoke only Korean' both okay, but 'spoke only Korean' is more natural. No tense change required but reorder for clarity.

× Because I knew no Korean at the time, it was quite challenging to follow her instruction and I often felt confused.

✓ Because I knew no Korean at the time, it was quite challenging to follow her instructions, and I often felt confused.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' in this context. Add comma before conjunction to separate clauses.

× Although that immersion did help me learn Foster in the long run, and I was a bit scared.

✓ Although that immersion did help me learn faster in the long run, I was a bit scared.

Fragment and word error: 'Foster' is incorrect — likely 'faster'. Remove unnecessary conjunction 'and' after subordinate clause and make a complete sentence.

× No, I definitely would not want to work as a teacher in a rule free school.

✓ No, I definitely would not want to work as a teacher in a rule-free school.

Add hyphen in 'rule-free' as a compound adjective before a noun.

× One of the main reasons is that even though P the students are accountable for their behavior, they still need some ground rules, especially if they are from the younger generation.

✓ One of the main reasons is that, even though the students are accountable for their behavior, they still need some ground rules, especially if they are from the younger generation.

Stray 'P' is a typo and should be removed. Add comma after 'that' for clarity and include definite article 'the' before 'students'.