Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng: tránh lỗi thì, mạo từ và cấu trúc câu (ví dụ: “Some are necessary, such as wearing uniforms every day”). Giảm sự lặp lại và dùng từ chính xác thay vì các cụm từ mơ hồ (ví dụ: “annoying” thay vì “quite annoyed”). Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tối đa 4-5 câu, và dùng liên từ phù hợp để nối ý (for example, however).

例: There are many rules at my school. Some are necessary, for example wearing uniforms every day. However, I find some rules unnecessary and slightly annoying because they are too strict. Overall, I think rules should be reasonable.

提案: Giảm tiếng um/ah và sửa ngữ pháp (chia số ít/số nhiều, động từ). Nói rõ lợi ích cụ thể của quy tắc thay vì nói chung chung. Sử dụng liên từ để giải thích (because, therefore, for example).

例: In my opinion, students can benefit from clear rules because rules help maintain discipline and create a focused learning environment. For example, rules about punctuality encourage students to arrive on time and improve their study habits.

提案: Sửa đại từ nhân xưng và thì (he vs they, supports vs supported). Trình bày một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi nêu ví dụ cụ thể về cách giáo viên tận tâm (ví dụ: giúp ngoài giờ, giải thích cẩn thận). Giữ tối đa 4 câu.

例: Yes, definitely. I had a dedicated math teacher in secondary school who always supported me when I struggled. He stayed after class to explain difficult topics and gave me extra practice problems. I really appreciated his patience and encouragement.

提案: Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (feel annoyed, accept a rule). Nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao một số quy tắc không cần thiết và đề xuất giải pháp ngắn gọn. Dùng liên từ (because, so) đúng cách.

例: I prefer fewer rules because some are unnecessary and restrict students without improving learning. For example, strict rules about hairstyles can make students uncomfortable without any academic benefit. I think schools should review rules and keep only those that support learning.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp số ít/số nhiều và hoàn thành ý (unfinished sentence). Tránh tiếng ngập ngừng. Nếu chưa có trải nghiệm thì nói rõ nguyên nhân và dự đoán dựa trên lý do cụ thể. Giữ câu mạch lạc với liên từ (however, although).

例: No, I have not had a very strict teacher so far; my teachers have been friendly and supportive. However, I imagine I might encounter a stricter teacher in the future if I study in a different school or take more advanced courses.

提案: Sửa phát âm/viết sai từ (rule-free, students), tránh lặp "uh". Trình bày lập luận rõ ràng: nêu cả lợi và hại, đưa ví dụ cụ thể về hậu quả của không có quy tắc. Dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc (I would not like to..., because...).

例: I would not like to work in a rule-free school because without rules students might be distracted and fail to focus on learning. For example, some students could use phones in class or leave early, which would disrupt lessons and lower achievement.

× There are many rules in my school for students.

✓ There are many rules at my school for students.

Original uses 'in my school' which is acceptable but 'at my school' is more natural for referring to rules; also not a grammatical error but stylistic. Suggestion: use 'at my school' for location context.

× Some are I think it is necessary like wear uniforms every day.

✓ Some, I think, are necessary, such as wearing uniforms every day.

The original sentence has word order and form problems. 'I think' should be set off by commas; 'like' is informal and should introduce an example; after 'such as' use a noun or gerund 'wearing'. Suggestion: Place 'I think' parenthetically and use 'such as wearing' or 'for example, wearing'.

× But some of this I find is quite annoyed because it is no half earth too much.

✓ But some of these I find quite annoying because they are excessive.

Errors: 'this' should be plural 'these' to match 'some'; 'find is quite annoyed' is wrong — 'I find [them] quite annoying' or 'I find it quite annoying'; 'it is no half earth too much' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'excessive' conveys intended meaning. Suggestion: Use correct demonstrative 'these', use object pronoun and adjective 'annoying', and replace unclear phrase with 'excessive'.

× MMM, in my opinion, I really think that student would benefit more from rules because, uh, the rules is introduced to makes people better, so it is.

✓ MMM, in my opinion, I really think that students would benefit more from rules because the rules are introduced to make people better.

Errors: 'student' should be plural 'students' to match generic meaning; 'the rules is' should be 'the rules are' (subject-verb agreement); 'introduced to makes' should be 'introduced to make' (infinitive base form). Suggestion: Ensure plural subjects have plural verbs and use base verb after 'to'.

× He always supports, supported me all the time that I needed and I really love them him.

✓ He always supported me whenever I needed him, and I really loved him.

Mixed tenses: 'always supports, supported' mixes present and past — choose past 'supported' to refer to a past teacher. Pronoun 'them him' is incorrect; use 'him'. Also 'all the time that I needed' is better as 'whenever I needed him'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use correct singular pronouns.

× For me, I prefer to have fewer rules at my school because some of them are unnecessary.

✓ For me, I prefer to have fewer rules at my school because some of them are unnecessary.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'fewer rules' and 'some of them are unnecessary' are appropriate. No change needed.

× So I really feel I really feel annoyed and uncomfortable when I merge to accept this rule.

✓ So I really feel annoyed and uncomfortable when I am forced to accept these rules.

Problems: repetition 'I really feel I really feel'; 'merge to accept' is incorrect — likely meant 'have to accept' or 'am forced to accept'; singular 'this rule' should match plural earlier 'rules' -> 'these rules'. Suggestion: Remove repetition, use passive 'am forced to' or modal 'have to', and match plurality.

× MMM for me I have never had a really strict teachers.

✓ MMM, for me I have never had a really strict teacher.

'Teachers' should be singular 'teacher' because 'never had a really strict teacher' refers to the general experience of any single strict teacher. Also add comma after 'MMM'. Suggestion: Match number between verb 'had' and noun.

× My teacher is very friendly, helpful and supportive.

✓ My teacher is very friendly, helpful, and supportive.

Grammatically correct; only added Oxford comma for clarity. No other error.

× They also help me a lot and But I think in the future I will have a strict teacher because I have the.

✓ They also helped me a lot. But I think in the future I might have a strict teacher.

Issues: 'They' conflicts with singular 'My teacher'—use singular 'He/She' or adjust earlier sentence; verb tense inconsistent 'help me' vs past context — use 'helped'. Final clause 'because I have the.' is a fragment and unclear; removed. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent and avoid sentence fragments; clarify reason if intended.

× Uh, for me, I don't really like to work as a teachers in a roof free school because uh, if there are no rules in a school, student will be freedom to do their favorite activities and it is also unacceptable.

✓ Uh, for me, I don't really like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because if there are no rules in a school, students will be free to do their favourite activities, and that would be unacceptable.

Errors: 'a teachers' should be singular 'a teacher'; 'roof free' is incorrect — should be 'rule-free'; 'student will be freedom' should be 'students will be free' (noun/verb/adjective forms); 'their favourite activities' plural matches 'students'; 'it is also unacceptable' improved to 'that would be unacceptable' for natural flow. Suggestion: Use correct hyphenated compound adjectives, match singular/plural, and use adjective 'free' not noun 'freedom'.