Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on accuracy and clarity: use correct grammar (there are rules), correct word choice (rules, not roles), and form complete sentences. Give a clear topic sentence then 1–2 specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation and filler words (uh).

例: Yes. There are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear a uniform and arrive to class on time. Also, mobile phones are not allowed during lessons.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one concrete example. Use linking words (because, so) and correct vocabulary (rules, pupils). Avoid vague or unclear phrases and long hesitations.

例: I think students could benefit from some additional rules because clear expectations help them develop good study habits. For example, a rule about homework submission would encourage consistency and improve learning outcomes.

提案: Give a brief topic sentence confirming yes/no, then describe specific behaviors that show dedication (e.g., stayed after class, prepared materials). Use one or two supporting details and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I have. My maths teacher was very dedicated; she stayed after school to help students and always prepared extra practice sheets, which helped many of us improve our grades.

提案: State your preference clearly (more or fewer) and give two short reasons linked with connectors (because, although). Use correct vocabulary (prefer to have fewer rules) and avoid unclear phrases like 'moral fear rules'.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school because students feel more motivated and creative with more freedom. However, some basic rules, like punctuality and respect, should remain to maintain order.

提案: Be precise and use appropriate adjectives (strict, strict but supportive). Explain one or two concrete examples of strict behavior and its effect on students. Avoid incorrect words (dangerous) and gender/confusing references.

例: Yes, I had a strict teacher who enforced silence during lessons and checked homework every day. Although strict, she improved our discipline and helped many students achieve better exam results.

提案: Answer directly and give a balanced view: state your preference then explain advantages and possible disadvantages using linking words. Use correct grammar (rule-free, not role free) and avoid repetitions.

例: I would be hesitant to work in a completely rule-free school. While it might encourage creativity, the lack of basic rules could lead to chaos; I would prefer a school with flexible rules that still ensure safety and respect.

× Yes, there are any roles for the students at my school.

✓ Yes, there are some rules for the students at my school.

The speaker used 'any' incorrectly with a positive statement and 'roles' instead of 'rules'. Use 'some' for plural nouns in affirmative sentences. Also 'roles' (positions) is the wrong word; 'rules' is correct.

× Uh, like uh must uniform wear and uh attend uh attend their attend the class on time and uh don't allow.

✓ For example, students must wear a uniform, attend their classes on time, and follow the rules.

The original has wrong word order and missing verbs. Use 'must' + base verb ('must wear'), use plural 'classes' or 'class' consistently, and 'don't allow' is unclear — 'follow the rules' expresses intended meaning. This corrects sentence structure and verb usage.

× I think students would benefit more from more roles, uh, because when π pupils, uh, uh, stayed at, uh, any rules, they learn many things and uh, their life will be successful and uh, they are shine.

✓ I think students would benefit more from more rules, because when pupils stay within rules, they learn many things, their lives will be more successful, and they will shine.

Replace 'roles' with 'rules'. Use present tense 'stay' for general statements. 'Stay within rules' is the correct phrase. Use plural 'lives'. 'They are shine' is incorrect; use 'they will shine' or 'they shine'. Also remove unclear characters and fix word order.

× Yes, I had really dedicated teacher, uh, she's very strict and, uh, and very strict and very, uh, disciplined. Uh, that's why, uh, she.

✓ Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher. She was very strict and disciplined.

Missing article 'a' before 'really dedicated teacher'. For past reference, use past tense consistently: 'had' implies past, so 'she was' rather than 'she is'. Remove repetition and incomplete clause.

× Basically, I prefer have, uh, moral fear rules at schools because uh, when many rules, uh, uh students are fed up and fewer rules, uh, students are happy and uh, but I think.

✓ Basically, I prefer having reasonable rules at school because if there are too many rules students become fed up, while with fewer rules students are happier.

Use 'prefer having' or 'prefer to have' rather than 'prefer have'. 'Moral fear rules' is unclear; 'reasonable rules' fits intended meaning. Use conditional 'if there are' and parallel structure 'while with'. Complete the thought rather than trailing off.

× Yes, I heard of really strict teacher because she is dangerous and very careful about students and he all time worried their students how students write in.

✓ Yes, I had a really strict teacher. She was strict and very careful about students; she was always worried about how students wrote.

'He' is the wrong pronoun for 'she'. 'Heard of' is incorrect here; use 'had' or 'know of'. 'Dangerous' is inappropriate—probably 'strict'. Use past tense consistently and correct phrase 'worried about how students wrote'. Fix pronoun reference and verb forms.

× Yes, I like to work as a teacher in a role free school, because when does not do not any roles in school. I am freely and very enjoy this time and I think it was it is very wonderful time.

✓ Yes, I would like to work as a teacher in a school without many rules because when there are no strict rules, I feel free and enjoy my time; I think it would be a wonderful experience.

Use 'would like' to express preference. 'Role free' should be 'a school without many rules' or 'a rule-free school'. Fix double negatives 'does not do not any roles'. Use 'feel free' not 'I am freely'. Match tense and clear phrasing: 'would be' for hypothetical. Improve word order and vocabulary.