Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and direct: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm), use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and add one specific supporting detail. Keep under 5 sentences.

例: Yes. There are several rules at my school, and the most important is that all students must wear the school uniform. For example, wearing a uniform helps maintain discipline and makes everyone feel equal.

提案: Clarify your opinion with correct vocabulary and grammar. State your position directly, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, for example). Avoid unclear phrases like ‘all lose’ and ‘finalized’.

例: Yes, I think more sensible rules could help. For example, stricter safety rules would protect students from dangerous situations, and clear behavioral rules can create a better learning environment.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific details about why the teacher was dedicated. Correct grammar (she works, she supports), avoid unclear fragments and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I have. My high school English teacher was very dedicated. She always prepared extra materials and stayed after class to help students, which motivated me to improve my writing.

提案: Give a direct stance (more or fewer) and then explain with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and fillers, and use correct expressions (decisions should be made by school management).

例: I prefer a balanced number of rules — not too many but enough to keep order. The school management should set rules that focus on safety and respect, while allowing some flexibility for students.

提案: Give a clear, complete answer: name the teacher only if relevant, describe one or two specific behaviors that made her strict, and explain whether it was positive or negative. Fix repetitions and incomplete thoughts.

例: Yes, I had a strict teacher named Ms. Molly. She enforced punctuality and strict homework deadlines, which felt harsh but improved my study habits and punctuality.

提案: State your opinion clearly, give a concise reason and one specific example of how rules help. Avoid unnecessary words and ensure grammatical correctness (workplaces).

例: No, I would not. Rules are necessary in any workplace; for example, safety and attendance policies protect staff and students and ensure the school runs smoothly.

× Yes, there are many rules in my school but umm the most important rule is all students must wear the school uniform and they are punctual at all time when they come.

✓ Yes, there are many rules in my school, but the most important rule is that all students must wear the school uniform and be punctual at all times when they come.

Missing conjunction 'that' after 'is' to introduce a clause ('There is that...') and incorrect phrase 'they are punctual at all time' should be 'be punctual at all times'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: include 'that' after 'is' when introducing a full clause and use plural 'times' and infinitive 'be' to match 'must' structure.

× Certainly, because all lose from the schools are finalized by the management team that would be beneficial to all students and also they are able to protect all students from dangerous situations.

✓ Certainly, because all loss cases from the school are finalized by the management team, which is beneficial to all students and helps protect them from dangerous situations.

Original sentence has unclear noun 'lose' and awkward structure. 'Lose' likely intended 'loss' or 'losses' or 'cases'. Replaced with 'loss cases' and used relative clause 'which is beneficial' to link properly. Also changed 'they are able to protect all students' to 'helps protect them' to avoid ambiguous subject reference. Suggestion: use clear nouns and relative clauses and ensure pronouns refer to the correct antecedent.

× Certainly, I really love her. She is mostly UMM. She work hard and support everything to her students. Moreover, she touched me well and.

✓ Certainly, I really love her. She is very dedicated. She works hard and supports her students in every way. Moreover, she influenced me positively.

Multiple issues: 'She work' should be 'She works' (third person singular verb agreement). 'Support everything to her students' is incorrect collocation; use 'supports her students' or 'supports them in every way'. The fragment 'She touched me well and.' is incomplete and unclear; replaced with 'influenced me positively'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with third person singular 's' and use appropriate verb-object structures; avoid sentence fragments.

× Personally, I don't have particular answer because it depends on umm, the importance of management. However, I think this must be finalized and conclude from the teacher management team.

✓ Personally, I don't have a particular answer because it depends on the importance of the management. However, I think this must be finalized and concluded by the teacher management team.

Missing article 'a' before 'particular answer'. 'Conclude from' is incorrect preposition; use 'concluded by'. Also 'finalized and conclude' mixed forms; use parallel participles 'finalized and concluded'. Suggestion: include necessary articles and maintain parallel verb forms and correct prepositions.

× Exactly, she was Molly. She she was really strict, but she had the thing, umm, under her behavior because she would like.

✓ Exactly. Her name was Molly. She was really strict, but she had self-control and good behavior because she wanted the best for her students.

Original has repetition 'She she' and incomplete phrases 'the thing under her behavior' and 'because she would like' which are ungrammatical. Rewrote to convey intended meaning: 'self-control' and 'wanted the best'. Suggestion: remove repeated words and complete thoughts; ensure cause clauses ('because') explain the reason clearly.

× Personally, I would not because the rules are the most important for every workplaces. It can protect all staff as well as students from the danger, however.

✓ Personally, I would not, because rules are very important in every workplace. They can protect staff as well as students from danger.

Incorrect modal use 'I would not' is acceptable but needed completion; more natural is 'I would not' followed by reason. 'every workplaces' is plural mismatch; use 'every workplace'. 'It can protect' should be 'They can protect' to agree with plural 'rules'. Removed 'the' before 'danger'. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement with determiners ('every' + singular) and match pronouns to their plural antecedents.