Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. For example, use 'vandalize' instead of 'vandalism' and avoid repeating 'you are not allowed'. Also, try to add linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there are many rules at my school. For instance, students are not allowed to go out during class hours, and they must not vandalize the school walls.

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more coherent. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain why more rules are beneficial.

例: Yes, I believe more rules would help students discipline themselves better. Moreover, following these rules can prepare them for responsibilities they will face in the future.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and better grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid short, choppy sentences.

例: Yes, I have a teacher named Margie who does her job very well. She helps us a lot, especially when we are unsure about our assignments. For example, she gives us clues and guidance to understand what to do.

× you are not allowed to vandalism the walls of the schools.

✓ you are not allowed to vandalize the walls of the school.

The verb 'vandalism' is a noun, but here a verb is needed after 'allowed to'. The correct verb form is 'vandalize'. Also, 'schools' should be singular 'school' to match the context.

× Yes, it will help them to discipline themselves and also to maintain the rules of the school.

✓ Yes, it will help them discipline themselves and also maintain the rules of the school.

After modal verbs like 'will', the base form of the verb is used without 'to'. Therefore, 'to discipline' and 'to maintain' should be 'discipline' and 'maintain'.

× So they will so that they will use this in the future.

✓ So they will use this in the future.

The phrase 'so that they will' is redundant and incorrectly placed. The sentence should be simplified to 'So they will use this in the future' for clarity and correctness.

× She did very well.

✓ She does very well.

The question is about a current teacher's performance, so present tense 'does' is appropriate instead of past tense 'did'.

× she helped us a lot, especially when we don't know what we're going to do.

✓ she helps us a lot, especially when we don't know what we're going to do.

The sentence mixes past tense 'helped' with present tense 'don't know'. To maintain tense consistency, 'helps' should be used to match the present tense context.

× if we don't have idea about our assignment, she helped us and she gave us clue what to do.

✓ if we don't have an idea about our assignment, she helps us and gives us clues about what to do.

The phrase 'have idea' is missing the article 'an'. Also, 'clue' should be plural 'clues' to match the context. Additionally, tense consistency requires present tense verbs 'helps' and 'gives'.