Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it ends abruptly and lacks completeness. Try to finish your thoughts fully and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a more natural flow. For example, after mentioning punctuality and uniforms, you could explain why these rules are important with linking phrases like 'because' or 'which helps'.

例: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school to ensure a disciplined and respectful environment. For example, students must attend classes punctually and wear the school uniform at all times, which helps maintain order and a sense of unity among students.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and word choice (e.g., 'roles' should be 'rules', 'a bad situations' should be 'bad situations'). Also, try to expand your answer with reasons or examples using linking words like 'because' or 'as a result' to make your response more effective.

例: No, I don't think more rules would benefit students because too many rules can create bad situations and make students feel frustrated or angry.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and provides specific supporting details, which is excellent. To improve further, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. For example, you could use 'in addition' or 'moreover' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, consider replacing common words like 'a lot about life' with more precise expressions.

例: I had many wonderful and knowledgeable teachers when I was a student. However, my high school English teacher stands out as the best because she not only taught me English but also imparted valuable life lessons, such as resilience and perseverance when facing challenges.

× These rules help maintain order and create.

✓ These rules help maintain order and create a positive environment.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'create' without specifying what is created, resulting in an incomplete sentence. Adding 'a positive environment' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× I think more roles can create a bad situations for students and make them sometimes angry.

✓ I think more rules can create bad situations for students and sometimes make them angry.

The word 'roles' is incorrect; it should be 'rules' to match the context. Also, 'a bad situations' is incorrect because 'situations' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. The corrected sentence uses 'bad situations' without 'a' and adjusts word order for clarity.