Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，例如“rulers”应为“rules”，且句子结构不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用正确的词汇。

例: Yes, my school has several rules. For example, students must wear uniforms to promote equality and discipline. Also, mobile phones are not allowed during classes to reduce distractions.

提案: 回答中表达不完整，句子结尾不清晰，且用词重复。建议完整表达观点，使用连贯的句子，并避免重复词汇。

例: Yes, I believe more rules can help students develop responsibility and improve their learning habits by providing clear guidelines to follow.

提案: 回答中存在性别代词混用和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议注意代词一致性，简化句子结构，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, my math teacher, Mr. Wong, explains complex concepts in a simple way. His humorous style usually keeps us interested and attentive.

× Yes, my school has many rulers such as students must wear uniform because it can maintain equality and discipline and also don't allow you to mobile phone during classes to reduce distractions.

✓ Yes, my school has many rules such as students must wear uniforms because they can maintain equality and discipline and also don't allow you to use mobile phones during classes to reduce distractions.

“rulers”应为“rules”，表示规则；“uniform”应为复数“uniforms”，因为指的是多件校服；“it”应改为“they”，指代复数“rules”；“mobile phone”前应加动词“use”，且“mobile phone”应为复数“mobile phones”，因为指多部手机。

× Yes, my school has many rulers such as students must wear uniform because it can maintain equality and discipline and also don't allow you to mobile phone during classes to reduce distractions.

✓ Yes, my school has many rules such as students must wear uniforms because they can maintain equality and discipline and also don't allow you to use mobile phones during classes to reduce distractions.

“uniform”应为复数形式“uniforms”，因为指多件校服；“mobile phone”应为复数“mobile phones”，因为指多部手机。

× Yes, my school has many rulers such as students must wear uniform because it can maintain equality and discipline and also don't allow you to mobile phone during classes to reduce distractions.

✓ Yes, my school has many rules such as students must wear uniforms because they can maintain equality and discipline and also don't allow you to use mobile phones during classes to reduce distractions.

“don't allow you to mobile phone”缺少动词，应为“don't allow you to use mobile phones”，即“允许你使用手机”。

× I think rulers.

✓ I think rules.

“rulers”应为“rules”，表示规则。

× Of course, I think students will benefit more from more regulations because it can teach students about responsibility and how to follow those learning in.

✓ Of course, I think students will benefit more from more regulations because they can teach students about responsibility and how to follow those learnings.

“it”应改为“they”，指代复数“regulations”；“learning in”表达不完整，应改为“learnings”或“learning”，表示学习内容。

× Of course, I think students will benefit more from more regulations because it can teach students about responsibility and how to follow those learning in.

✓ Of course, I think students will benefit more from more regulations because they can teach students about responsibility and how to follow those learnings.

“learning in”中的“in”使用不当，应去掉或改为合适的词。

× Of course, that's my math teacher, Mr. Wong, uh, she explained complex concept in a simple way, and his humorous language still, uh, usually attracts our attentions.

✓ Of course, that's my math teacher, Mr. Wong. He explains complex concepts in a simple way, and his humorous language usually attracts our attention. It's so interesting.

“she”指代“Mr. Wong”错误，应为“he”；“concept”应为复数“concepts”；“attentions”应为不可数名词“attention”；“explained”时态应与上下文一致，改为一般现在时“explains”。

× Of course, that's my math teacher, Mr. Wong, uh, she explained complex concept in a simple way, and his humorous language still, uh, usually attracts our attentions.

✓ Of course, that's my math teacher, Mr. Wong. He explains complex concepts in a simple way, and his humorous language usually attracts our attention. It's so interesting.

“explained”用过去式不符合上下文，应使用一般现在时“explains”，表示习惯性动作。

× Of course, that's my math teacher, Mr. Wong, uh, she explained complex concept in a simple way, and his humorous language still, uh, usually attracts our attentions.

✓ Of course, that's my math teacher, Mr. Wong. He explains complex concepts in a simple way, and his humorous language usually attracts our attention. It's so interesting.

“still”位置不当，应去除或调整位置；“usually”应紧跟动词“attracts”。