Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use clear and correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid unclear or incorrect words like 'abusive wrap'. Also, give a direct answer with specific details and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear a uniform, including a lab coat in science classes. Additionally, we are not allowed to be late for class. These rules help maintain discipline and order.

提案: Provide a clear and structured answer with specific reasons. Avoid repetition and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Try to explain why rules are important with examples.

例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because rules help create a safe and organized environment. For instance, having rules about attendance and behavior can improve learning and respect among students.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Provide specific details about the teacher's qualities and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I recently started college, so I am still getting to know my teachers. However, I have noticed that one of my teachers is very dedicated. She always tries her best to help us beginners understand the lessons clearly.

× Yes, we sought to wear abusive wrap and lab coat and in college and we shouldn't be late for class and that's it. I don't remember.

✓ Yes, we are supposed to wear a uniform and lab coat in college, and we shouldn't be late for class. That's it. I don't remember.

The original sentence contains incorrect word choice ('abusive wrap' instead of 'uniform') and awkward phrasing. 'Sought to wear' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'are supposed to wear'. Also, articles are missing before 'uniform' and 'lab coat'. The sentence is corrected to use proper vocabulary and article usage for clarity.

× Yes, rules, it's important, are important for our life and, and and college everywhere actually. So yeah.

✓ Yes, rules are important for our life and for college everywhere actually. So yeah.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced conjunctions ('and, and and'). Removing the extra conjunctions improves sentence clarity and flow. Also, 'it's important' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence structure.

× I go to college recently so I didn't I don't know the teachers yet but I noticed one of my teacher is very good in her job and she tried to do her best for us as a as a student as beginner and call it.

✓ I started college recently, so I don't know the teachers yet, but I noticed one of my teachers is very good at her job and she tries to do her best for us as students and beginners.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'one of my teacher' should be 'one of my teachers'; 'as a student as beginner' should be 'as students and beginners'. Also, tense consistency is improved ('go to college recently' to 'started college recently', 'tried' to 'tries'). The phrase 'and call it' is unclear and omitted for clarity.