Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Also, avoid repeating 'rules' unnecessarily. Use a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, there are several rules for students at my school, such as adhering to a proper dress code and maintaining discipline to create a positive learning environment.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, explain why professionalism is important with a specific example.

例: Absolutely, I believe students would benefit from having more rules because they encourage discipline, which is essential for success. For instance, following rules helps students develop professionalism, enabling them to achieve their academic and career goals.

提案: Focus on one teacher and use correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases like 'no one ever miss' and provide specific details about what makes the teacher effective. Use linking words to improve flow.

例: Yes, my English teacher does an excellent job. She teaches in an engaging way that all the students enjoy, which helps everyone understand the lessons clearly.

× I know my English teacher who taught us in a way that every children enjoys and no one ever miss.

✓ I know my English teacher who taught us in a way that every child enjoys and no one ever misses.

The word 'children' is plural, but 'every' requires a singular noun, so it should be 'every child'. Also, 'no one' is singular and requires the verb 'misses' to agree in number. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and proper use of singular/plural forms.