Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh', and use clear linking phrases to connect your ideas. Also, provide specific examples to support your points.

例: At my school, there were only a few rules. For example, all students had to wear a uniform to promote equality. Additionally, we were expected to arrive on time to encourage discipline.

提案: Your answer is good but could be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. Avoid repeating words like 'some rules' and provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: I think basic rules are important because they set standards and help students stay disciplined. However, students also need freedom to explore and learn on their own, especially when they are young.

提案: Focus on organizing your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples of why the teacher was good.

例: Yes, during my bachelor's degree, I had an excellent English lecturer named Sharat. He was very knowledgeable and encouraged us to think critically. Moreover, he gave us the freedom to explore topics, which made learning enjoyable.

× There weren't many rules for us at school.

✓ There weren't many rules for us at school.

This sentence is correct in past tense as it refers to a past situation, so no correction is needed.

× they were just a common, like, you know, all should wear uniform.

✓ They were just common, like, you know, everyone should wear a uniform.

The phrase 'a common' is incorrect because 'common' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. Also, 'all should wear uniform' is incorrect; 'everyone' is a better quantifier and 'a uniform' requires an article. The correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× just maintain, uh, uniformity across all people and show them that all are equal and uh yeah, yeah.

✓ just maintain, uh, uniformity among all people and show them that all are equal, and uh yeah, yeah.

The preposition 'across' is not appropriate when referring to uniformity among people; 'among' is the correct preposition to indicate distribution within a group.

× To get to school proper time, uh, just to imply discipline.

✓ To get to school at the proper time, uh, just to imply discipline.

The phrase 'get to school proper time' is missing the preposition 'at' before 'the proper time' to indicate the correct time of arrival.

× Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?

✓ Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?

This sentence correctly uses the modal verb 'would' to express a hypothetical situation, so no correction is needed.

× some rules, some basic rules, set standards and help align the students you know and also make them disciplined.

✓ Some rules, some basic rules, set standards and help align the students, you know, and also make them disciplined.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs commas to separate clauses for clarity. The quantifiers 'some' are used correctly.

× students should be given the freedom of choice to explore and learn, something they have to do in a younger days.

✓ Students should be given the freedom of choice to explore and learn, something they have to do in their younger days.

The pronoun 'a' before 'younger days' is incorrect; it should be 'their' to indicate possession and agreement with the plural noun 'days'.

× while I was studying in my bachelor's in my English lecturer was amazing.

✓ While I was studying for my bachelor's, my English lecturer was amazing.

The phrase 'studying in my bachelor's' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for' when referring to pursuing a degree. Also, the sentence was missing a comma to separate clauses.

× He his name is Sharat and he was exemplar in English and he know what he teaches and he makes people think like him and also he gives us freedom to explore, to learn and also some other stuff.

✓ His name is Sharat, and he was exemplary in English. He knows what he teaches, and he makes people think like him. He also gives us freedom to explore, to learn, and other things.

The phrase 'He his name' is incorrect; it should be 'His name'. 'Exemplar' is a noun, but the adjective 'exemplary' is needed here. 'He know' should be 'He knows' to agree with third person singular. The sentence was also run-on and needed to be split for clarity.