Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more grammatically correct. Use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid repetition. Also, provide a more structured response with linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, there are many rules at my school. For example, all students must wear a uniform. Boys wear a dishdasha with a money, while girls wear a similar traditional outfit.

提案: Focus on expressing your opinion clearly and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words to explain your ideas logically and try to avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I believe students can benefit from having more rules, as long as these rules are not too strict. If the rules cause too much stress, they might have a negative effect. Therefore, a balance is important.

提案: Make your sentences grammatically correct and clearer. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about the teacher's qualities.

例: Yes, I have a teacher named Miss Alham Hermani who teaches me three subjects at college. She is very dedicated and knowledgeable. Currently, she is in Malaysia pursuing her PhD in education.

× Yes of course there is many rules in my school for students like for example we have a uniform for all students to wear it and for man for man he wears dishdasha with money and for women we were as like.

✓ Yes of course there are many rules in my school for students. For example, we have a uniform for all students to wear, and for men, they wear dishdasha with money, and for women, we wear similar attire.

The phrase 'there is many rules' is incorrect because 'rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'man' should be plural 'men' to match the context. 'We were as like' is incorrect; it should be 'we wear similar attire' to correctly express the idea. Using correct singular/plural forms and verb agreement improves clarity.

× Yes, of course, I think the students would benefit more from more rules. But in some bands, if it's not like stressing, it is good for students, but it is more stress. There is no perfect. That's all what I want to say.

✓ Yes, of course, I think the students would benefit more from more rules. But in some cases, if it's not too stressful, it is good for students, but it can cause more stress. There is no perfect system. That's all I want to say.

The original sentence uses 'bands' incorrectly; 'cases' or 'situations' is more appropriate. 'If it's not like stressing' is ungrammatical; it should be 'if it's not too stressful'. Also, 'There is no perfect' is incomplete; it should be 'There is no perfect system'. These corrections improve modal verb usage and overall sentence clarity.

× Actually yes, I have Miss Alham and Hermani which is the best one who teach me in my college 3 subject and now she go to Malaysia to complete his educational PhD.

✓ Actually yes, I have Miss Alham and Hermani who are the best teachers who teach me three subjects in my college, and now she is going to Malaysia to complete her educational PhD.

The phrase 'who teach me' is correct but 'which is the best one' is incorrect; 'who are the best teachers' is appropriate for people. 'She go to Malaysia' should be 'she is going to Malaysia' to indicate present continuous tense. Also, 'his educational PhD' should be 'her educational PhD' to match the pronoun. Using correct relative pronouns, verb forms, and pronouns improves grammatical accuracy.