Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to be more concise and structured by stating the main rule clearly, then briefly explaining it. Avoid repeating phrases and focus on clarity.

例: At my school, there is one main rule: students must be punctual and wear proper attire to attend classes. If a student is late or not dressed appropriately, they are not allowed to enter the classroom.

提案: Your answer lacks specific supporting details and contains hesitation. Try to provide clear reasons and examples to support your opinion, and avoid filler words to sound more confident.

例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because rules teach discipline and time management. For example, having rules about homework deadlines helps students develop responsibility and improve their study habits.

提案: Your answer provides some information but is disorganized and contains many hesitations. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific examples, and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I have a teacher named Silva who does her job very well. She ensures students follow the dress code by informing other staff when necessary. Additionally, she provides all the materials we need for class. Although she is strict, I think this helps students stay focused and disciplined.

× Well at my school there are no specific rules for this for everyone and there is only one rule like you have to be be on the time and if you are in if you are coming in the class so you have to wear a proper attire so that you can attend the class otherwise you can't go into the class.

✓ Well, at my school there are no specific rules for everyone, and there is only one rule: you have to be on time, and if you are coming to the class, you have to wear proper attire so that you can attend the class; otherwise, you can't go into the class.

The original sentence had awkward phrasing and redundancy, such as 'be be on the time' and 'if you are in if you are coming in the class'. The phrase 'there is only one rule like' is incorrect; it should be 'there is only one rule:'. Also, 'a proper attire' is incorrect because 'attire' is uncountable and does not take an article. The sentence was corrected to use 'there are' correctly and to improve clarity and grammar.

× So apart from this, if they are, if they are abiding the rules so they can get many benefits, which I don't know.

✓ So apart from this, if they abide by the rules, they can get many benefits, which I don't know.

The phrase 'abiding the rules' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'abide by'. Also, the sentence had redundant 'if they are' and an unnecessary 'so'. The correction simplifies the sentence and uses the correct preposition.

× Ah, well, yes, her name is Silva and she is very perfect.

✓ Ah, well, yes, her name is Silva and she is very good.

The word 'perfect' is not typically used to describe a person in this context; 'very good' or 'excellent' is more appropriate. While this is more of an adjective usage issue, it relates to pronoun reference and appropriateness of description. The pronouns 'her' and 'she' are correct.

× And if, if you don't have a like proper attire and uniform in your school, So she always, uh, mentioned to the, so mentioned to the other professor and she always providing the stuff which we are required.

✓ And if you don't have proper attire and uniform in your school, she always mentions it to the other teachers and always provides the things we require.

The phrase 'mentioned to the, so mentioned to the other professor' is incorrect; it should be 'mentions it to the other teachers'. Also, 'she always providing' is incorrect verb form; it should be 'she always provides'. The preposition 'in your school' is acceptable, but the sentence needed restructuring for clarity and grammar.

× But on the other hand, uh, she is very strict. So which is quite, uh, good for students.

✓ But on the other hand, she is very strict, which is quite good for students.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'So which is' after a period, creating a sentence fragment. The correction combines the sentences properly and removes unnecessary fillers for clarity.