Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete, especially towards the end. Try to complete your thoughts fully and avoid grammatical errors. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there were many rules at my middle and high school. For example, we had to wear uniforms to promote equality and discipline. Additionally, there were strict rules about punctuality and behaviour to maintain order.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more coherent and natural. Avoid repeating the same points and try to use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer.

例: Yes, I believe students benefit from having strict rules. For instance, wearing uniforms helps create a sense of equality and discipline. Moreover, rules like banning mobile phone use during class help students focus better.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding filler words like 'Umm' and correcting grammar mistakes. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more fluent and natural.

例: Yes, I do. My high school English teacher was excellent. He taught in an engaging way, which helped us improve our English quickly. Furthermore, he was very patient and always willing to help students.

× Also, we there are strict rules about.

✓ Also, there are strict rules about it.

The original sentence has an incorrect word order for 'there are' construction. The correct form is 'there are' followed by the subject. The phrase 'we there are' is incorrect. The corrected sentence places 'there are' at the beginning to properly introduce the existence of strict rules.

× For instance, we must wear uniform to force a sense of equality and discipline.

✓ For instance, we must wear uniforms to foster a sense of equality and discipline.

The modal verb 'must' is correctly used, but the noun 'uniform' should be plural 'uniforms' because it refers to the general rule for all students. Also, 'force' is not the best verb here; 'foster' better expresses encouraging a sense of equality and discipline.

× This forced a sense of equality and discipline.

✓ This forces a sense of equality and discipline.

The sentence is describing a general truth or ongoing effect of wearing uniforms, so present tense 'forces' is more appropriate than past tense 'forced'.

× And also we were not allowed to use mobile phone.

✓ Also, we were not allowed to use mobile phones.

The modal verb phrase 'were not allowed to' is correct, but 'mobile phone' should be plural 'mobile phones' to refer generally to all phones. Also, starting the sentence with 'And also' is redundant; 'Also' alone is sufficient.

× Firstly, he taught English in a very engaging manner so we can improve our English levels very quickly.

✓ Firstly, he taught English in a very engaging manner so we could improve our English levels very quickly.

The main verb 'taught' is past tense, so the subordinate clause should also be in past tense 'could' to maintain tense consistency.

× In addition, he is was very patient.

✓ In addition, he was very patient.

The phrase 'is was' is incorrect; only one verb is needed. Since the context is past, 'was' is the correct past tense form of 'to be'.