Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，但内容有些重复和不连贯。应明确说明购买频率，并解释喜欢买鞋的原因；“sport shoes”应改为“sports shoes”，“a good shoes”应改为“good shoes”，“journal journey”不符合语境，可能想表达“愉快的旅行”。“sometimes I wear pink”意思不清，可以说“Sometimes I buy pink shoes.” 建议控制在3—4句话，并使用“because”和“especially”等连接和补充信息。

例: Yes, I do. I usually buy a new pair of shoes every few months, especially sports shoes, because they are comfortable and practical. I sometimes choose colorful ones, such as pink shoes, to match my clothes.

提案: 回答了问题，但语法和表达问题较多。“always always buying”应改为“usually buy”或“have bought”，“a good shoes”应改为“a good pair of shoes”，“offline shoulder”应为“physical shop/store”。“not only also”结构使用错误，且句子过长。建议采用清晰结构：先回答频率，再说明网购的优点，最后补充不合适时可以退货。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. I usually shop online because there are more choices and it is convenient to compare prices. If the shoes do not fit me, I can simply return them.

提案: 回答很简短，虽然直接表达了预算不高，但缺少具体金额或范围，也没有清楚说明原因。“such as clothes how you want”表达不自然，应改为“such as clothes or accessories”。建议给出大致金额，并用“because”解释为什么不愿意花太多钱。

例: I usually spend around 30 to 50 dollars on a pair of shoes. I do not like spending too much on shoes because I also need money for clothes and other daily necessities.

提案: 观点明确，选择了舒适的鞋子，但原因句的逻辑和语法不清楚。“comfortable shoes”前通常不加“the”，“which mean”应为“which means”；“you can run and walk 1000 miles”与“不舒服的鞋”逻辑矛盾，应该表达为“you cannot walk or run comfortably”。另外，“fashionable shoes is”应改为“fashionable shoes are”。建议先给出选择，再说明舒适鞋适合日常活动，并进行简单比较。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods every day. They allow me to walk and run without hurting my feet. Although fashionable shoes look attractive, they are not always practical.

× And I also think wearing a good shoes with me having a good journal journey.

✓ I also think that wearing good shoes helps me have a good journey.

“Shoes”是可数名词，表示鞋子这一类事物时通常使用复数形式，不能说“a good shoes”。如果使用“a”，后面的名词必须是单数，例如“a good shoe”。这里用“good shoes”更自然。

× And I also think wearing a good shoes with me having a good journal journey.

✓ I also think that wearing good shoes helps me have a good journey.

“a”不能放在复数名词“shoes”前面。另外，“journey”是可数名词，前面需要限定词，因此应说“a good journey”。

× And I also think wearing a good shoes with me having a good journal journey.

✓ I also think that wearing good shoes helps me have a good journey.

原句中“wearing... with me having...”的结构不完整且不自然。可以使用“wearing good shoes”作主语，再用“helps me have...”表达“有助于我拥有一次好的旅程”。

× Yes, I always always buying shoes online because for me to choose a good shoes not only also go to offline shoulder, we always go to the online to choose the shoes.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because I can choose good shoes online instead of going to offline shops.

“always”表示经常发生的习惯，后面应使用一般现在时“buy”，不能使用“buying”。“Always buying”通常需要放在特定结构中，例如“I'm always buying shoes online”，但这里表达日常习惯，使用“I always buy”更合适。

× Yes, I always always buying shoes online because for me to choose a good shoes not only also go to offline shoulder, we always go to the online to choose the shoes.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because I can choose good shoes online instead of going to offline shops.

“Shoes”是复数名词，不能与“a”搭配。表示一般的鞋子时，应说“good shoes”，而不是“a good shoes”。

× Yes, I always always buying shoes online because for me to choose a good shoes not only also go to offline shoulder, we always go to the online to choose the shoes.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because I can choose shoes not only in offline shops but also online.

“not only”通常要和“but also”搭配使用，构成“not only...but also...”结构。原句缺少“but”，所以连接关系不完整。

× Yes, I always always buying shoes online because for me to choose a good shoes not only also go to offline shoulder, we always go to the online to choose the shoes.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because I can choose shoes not only in offline shops but also online.

原句包含多个不完整结构，并且“because”后面的内容组织混乱。改为“I can choose shoes not only in offline shops but also online”后，主语、谓语和比较结构都完整，意思也更清楚。

× If I don't like it and I don't fit it, I return OK.

✓ If I don't like them or they don't fit me, I return them.

“Shoes”是复数，所以应使用“them”和“they”，不能使用单数代词“it”。此外，表示鞋子是否合脚时，应说“they don't fit me”，而不是“I don't fit it”。

× I would like to buy other stuff such as clothes how you want.

✓ I would rather spend my money on other things, such as clothes.

“such as clothes how you want”结构不完整，“how you want”不能直接放在“clothes”后面。可以改为“such as clothes”，完整表达“例如衣服”。

× For me, I love the comfortable shoes more because wearing uncomfortable shoes which mean you can run and you can walk 1000 mile.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because wearing comfortable shoes means that I can run and walk 1,000 miles.

“Wearing comfortable shoes”是一个动名词短语，整体作单数主语，所以谓语应使用“means”，不能使用“mean”。

× For me, I love the comfortable shoes more because wearing uncomfortable shoes which mean you can run and you can walk 1000 mile.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because wearing comfortable shoes means that I can run and walk 1,000 miles.

“1,000”表示多于一英里，因此“mile”必须使用复数形式“miles”。只有数量为一时才使用单数“mile”。

× So I would like to wear the comfortable shoes and I don't think the fashionable shoes is comfortable.

✓ So I would like to wear comfortable shoes, and I don't think fashionable shoes are comfortable.

“Fashionable shoes”是复数主语，因此谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”，不能使用单数形式“is”。

× So I would like to wear the comfortable shoes and I don't think the fashionable shoes is comfortable.

✓ So I would like to wear comfortable shoes, and I don't think fashionable shoes are comfortable.

这里是在泛指舒适的鞋子和时尚的鞋子，并不是指特定的鞋子，因此不需要使用定冠词“the”。应说“comfortable shoes”和“fashionable shoes”。