Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答表达了“不喜欢买鞋”的观点，但没有直接说明购买频率，而且“changing the shoes”“causing effects for me in changing frequency”不符合自然英语。建议先明确回答频率，再说明原因，并使用更准确的表达，如“buy new shoes”“It takes time to find the right pair”。可以补充一个具体情况，使答案更完整，但控制在2至3句话。

例: I don’t really like buying shoes, so I only buy a new pair once or twice a year. It takes me a long time to find the right size and style, and I usually replace my shoes only when they are worn out.

提案: 回答的基本意思可以理解，但“juice”应为“shoes”，而且“it doesn't fit me a lot by buying online”表达不自然。建议直接回答“No, I haven’t”，然后说明网购鞋子最大的问题是无法试穿，最后可以补充尺码不合适或退货麻烦等具体原因。

例: No, I haven’t bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on first. Sizes can vary between brands, and returning shoes would be inconvenient if they didn’t fit.

提案: 回答提到了预算，但“one thousand dollars Hong Kong dollars”应改为“1,000 Hong Kong dollars”，“it lets me have cost in effective”也不自然。建议使用“spend no more than...”和“good value for money”等固定表达，并说明为什么设定这个预算。还可以根据鞋子的类型进行简单比较，让内容更具体。

例: I usually spend no more than 1,000 Hong Kong dollars on a pair of shoes. I think that is a reasonable budget because I want something durable but still good value for money. I would spend more only on sports shoes that I use regularly.

提案: 回答明确选择了舒适的鞋子，但“comfortable shoes prefer to me”语法错误，应改为“comfortable shoes are better for me”。“walking around my homes”不自然，可以说“walking around the house”或“wearing at work”。建议先给出选择，再解释舒适鞋子适合日常走路和工作，并可补充时尚性不是首要考虑因素。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I walk a lot during the day. Comfortable shoes are better for running errands and wearing at work, even if they are not the most stylish. For me, comfort is more important than appearance.

× I don't like buying shoes actually because changing the shoes is time consuming and causing effects for me in changing frequency.

✓ I don't like buying shoes, actually, because changing shoes is time-consuming and affects how often I need to buy them.

“changing the shoes”表示一般意义上的“买鞋/换鞋”，不需要使用定冠词“the”。“is time-consuming and causing”结构不平行，而且“causing effects for me in changing frequency”表达不自然。这里应使用一般现在时“affects”，因为这是一个长期的个人习惯和观点。建议使用“affect how often...”来表达“影响……的频率”。

× No, I don't purchase juice online because it doesn't fit me a lot by buying online

✓ No, I don't buy shoes online because they don't fit me well.

根据问题语境，“juice”应为“shoes”。“shoes”是复数，所以代词应使用“they”，不能使用单数“it”。“fit me a lot”不符合英语习惯；描述鞋子是否合脚，应使用“fit me well”。原句末尾的“by buying online”结构不完整且重复，删除后句子更清晰。

× I will spend not more than one thousand dollars Hong Kong dollars because it lets me have cost in effective besides, it's so expensive for me to purchase a single good.

✓ I usually spend no more than one thousand Hong Kong dollars on shoes because I want to keep my spending reasonable. Besides, a single pair of good-quality shoes can be expensive.

问题问的是平时的消费习惯，因此不应使用表示将来的“will spend”，应使用一般现在时“I usually spend”。正确的货币表达是“one thousand Hong Kong dollars”，不能说“dollars Hong Kong dollars”；“spend money on shoes”中的介词应使用“on”。“it lets me have cost in effective”句子结构错误，可以改为“I want to keep my spending reasonable”。另外，“a single good”表达不完整；鞋通常说“a single pair of shoes”。

× I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes because comfortable shoes prefer to me a good walking around my homes or even in working places.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes because they are better for walking around at home or even at work.

“comfortable shoes prefer to me”主语和动词搭配错误，应该表达为“they are better for...”，因此这里属于句子结构错误。“comfortable shoes”在后半句可用复数代词“they”代替。“a good walking”中的“walking”是不可数的活动名词，不能使用冠词“a”。“homes”在这里表示一般的“家”，通常使用单数“home”；固定表达是“at home”。“working places”不自然，表示工作场所或工作时可以说“at work”。