Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız soruya genel olarak yanıt veriyor, ancak “I like I don't mind” ve “I can't spend my money to other things” ifadeleri doğal değil. Fikrinizi doğrudan belirtin ve ne sıklıkta ayakkabı aldığınızı mutlaka söyleyin. “I don’t buy shoes very often” gibi net bir topic sentence kullanın; ardından mevcut ayakkabınızın yeterli olduğunu ve paranızı başka ihtiyaçlara harcamayı tercih ettiğinizi açıklayın. “Actually”, “because” ve “so” ifadelerini daha kontrollü kullanarak gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

例: I don’t really enjoy buying shoes, so I only buy them when I need a new pair. One comfortable pair is usually enough for me. I would rather spend my money on other things, such as clothes or books.

提案: Cevabınız doğrudan bir deneyim sunuyor ve nedenini açıklıyor; bu olumlu. Ancak “a shoes”, “this shoes was in a wrong size” ve “I don’t think that I’m going to buy again that time” dilbilgisi ve doğallık açısından sorunlu. “I bought a pair of shoes online” ve “They were the wrong size, so they didn’t fit me” yapılarını kullanın. Olayı geçmiş zamanda tutun ve sonucu net biçimde belirtin; “at that time” tekrarını kaldırın.

例: Yes, I bought a pair of shoes online once, but it was a terrible experience. They were the wrong size, so they didn’t fit me properly. As a result, I had to return them, and I haven’t bought shoes online since then.

提案: Bu cevap tamamlanmadığı için soruya net bir miktar vermiyor. IELTS Part 1’de kesin bir rakam vermek istemiyorsanız “I usually spend around...” veya “I don’t spend much...” şeklinde yaklaşık bir cevap verin. “As I said before” kullanılabilir, ancak önceki cevabı tekrar etmek yerine doğrudan bütçenizi ve alışveriş sıklığınızı açıklayın. Cümlenizi sonuçlandırmaya ve en az bir neden ya da örnek eklemeye dikkat edin.

例: I don’t usually spend much on shoes because I rarely buy them. I normally spend around 50 to 70 dollars on a pair, depending on the quality. I prefer buying one durable pair rather than several cheaper ones.

提案: Cevabınız iyi yapılandırılmış; tercihinizi açıklıyor ve “but” ile karşılaştırma yapıyorsunuz. Ancak soruda bir tercih istendiği için sonunda hangisinin daha önemli olduğunu açıkça belirtmelisiniz. “If I like the appearance of shoes, I would like to buy it” yerine “I might want to buy them” daha doğal olur; ayakkabı için çoğul zamir olarak “them” kullanın. “It is hard to use it” ifadesini “they would be uncomfortable to wear” şeklinde daha doğal ve bağlama uygun ifade edebilirsiniz.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes, although I also care about their appearance. Fashionable shoes may look attractive, but I won’t buy them if they are uncomfortable. Since I wear my shoes for several hours a day, comfort is more important to me.

× Actually I can't say that I like I don't mind buying shoes because I feel like when I have one it is enough and more than one is not essential to my life.

✓ Actually, I can't say that I like buying shoes. I don't mind buying them, but I feel that one pair is enough and that I don't need more than one pair.

The sentence incorrectly combines two structures: I like and I don't mind. These ideas should be separated or connected with a suitable conjunction. The revised version has a clearer and grammatically complete structure.

× When I have one it is enough and more than one is not essential to my life.

✓ When I have one pair, it is enough, and I don't need more than one pair.

One cannot normally refer to a complete pair of shoes without a noun such as pair. Pair is singular after one, while more than one pair correctly expresses the plural meaning.

× I can't spend my money to other things.

✓ I can't spend my money on other things.

The correct preposition used with spend money is on, not to. For example, we say spend money on clothes or spend money on food.

× Yeah, one time I bought a shoes online.

✓ Yes, one time I bought a pair of shoes online.

Shoes is plural, so it cannot be used with the singular article a by itself. A pair of shoes is the correct singular expression.

× I don't think that I'm going to buy again that time.

✓ I don't think that I'm going to buy shoes online again.

Again is placed unnaturally in the original sentence. It should normally come after the object or at the end of the phrase: buy shoes online again.

× This shoes was in a wrong size so it doesn't fit me.

✓ These shoes were the wrong size, so they didn't fit me.

Shoes is plural, so this must become these, was must become were, and it must become they. The pronoun and verb must agree with the plural noun shoes.

× This shoes was in a wrong size so it doesn't fit me.

✓ These shoes were the wrong size, so they didn't fit me.

The student is describing a past shopping experience, so the past tense is needed. Doesn't fit should therefore be changed to didn't fit.

× This shoes was in a wrong size so it doesn't fit me.

✓ These shoes were the wrong size, so they didn't fit me.

The phrase the wrong size refers to a specific incorrect size. Therefore, the definite article the is required instead of the indefinite article a.

× As like I said before, I don't like buying shoes so much.

✓ As I said before, I don't like buying shoes very much.

As and like cannot be used together in this expression. The correct phrase is as I said before. Very much is also the natural adverbial expression after don't like.

× I don't need to buy so usually I can say that I don't do.

✓ I don't need to buy shoes often, so I usually don't spend much money on them.

The expression I don't do is incomplete because do needs a clear object or complement in this context. The corrected sentence uses a complete verb phrase, don't spend much money, and clearly states what the speaker does not do.

× If I like the appearance of shoes, I would like to buy it.

✓ If I like the appearance of the shoes, I would like to buy them.

The shoes being discussed are specific, so the appearance of the shoes is clearer. Also, shoes is plural, so it must be replaced with the plural pronoun them.

× If I like the appearance of shoes, I would like to buy it.

✓ If I like the appearance of the shoes, I would like to buy them.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to shoes, which is plural. The correct object pronoun is them.

× If it is not comfortable, I can't buy it because it is hard to use it.

✓ If they are not comfortable, I can't buy them because they would be difficult to wear.

The pronouns must agree with the plural noun shoes. They and them are required instead of it. Wear is also the appropriate verb for shoes, rather than use.