Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the frequency question directly by stating how often you buy shoes. Avoid repetition such as “different varieties or different kinds,” fillers like “uh,” and the unnatural phrase “off offline.” Use “buy shoes in physical stores” and ensure subject–verb agreement, for example, “shoes that match my outfits.” Add one specific reason or example to make the answer more effective.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, although I only purchase a new pair every few months. I usually choose different styles to match my outfits, but I prefer buying them in physical stores. This allows me to check their quality and make sure they fit properly.

提案: Use the present perfect accurately: “I have never bought shoes online.” Replace incorrect or unclear phrases such as “shop them on offline,” “in the weekend,” and “a image like thing products.” Organize the answer with a clear reason and a contrast using “whereas” or “because.” Avoid sentence fragments such as “Try them out.”

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I am concerned about the size and comfort. I prefer shopping in physical stores, where I can try the shoes on before paying for them. Online photos can be misleading, and returning an uncomfortable pair can be inconvenient.

提案: Give a clearer approximate amount or price range instead of repeating “reasonable amount.” Use natural collocations such as “expensive shoes” or “high-priced shoes,” not “high prices of shoes.” Explain your spending preference with a specific condition, and use consistent grammar: “If I find a pair comfortable and attractive, I am willing to pay a little more.”

例: I usually spend around 50 to 80 dollars on a pair of shoes. I try to avoid expensive designer brands because I do not think they are necessary for everyday wear. However, if a pair is comfortable, durable, and suits my style, I am willing to pay a little more.

提案: The answer is relevant and compares two choices, but improve the grammar and phrasing: say “It depends on the occasion” and “On gym days, I prefer comfortable shoes.” Use a clearer contrast with “whereas” and avoid repetition of “comfortable.” Mention a specific event or reason to make the comparison more natural and precise.

例: It depends on the occasion. For the gym or everyday activities, I prefer comfortable shoes because they protect my feet and allow me to move easily. However, for a party or a night out with friends, I would choose fashionable shoes because they complete my outfit.

× Yes, definitely I like buying shoes and also I like to uh buy different varieties or different kinds kind of shoes that matches my attire.

✓ Yes, definitely, I like buying shoes, and I also like to buy different varieties or different kinds of shoes that match my attire.

The relative pronoun that refers to shoes, which is plural, so the verb must be match, not matches. The plural subject shoes requires the plural verb form match.

× Also, I like to buy shoes off offline because I think uh I can see what they are actually and what they are not.

✓ Also, I like to buy shoes offline because I think I can see what they actually look like.

Offline is used as an adverb here, so it does not need the preposition off before it. The phrase off offline is grammatically incorrect.

× No, I never bought shoes online because I got worried about its size and also if they are comfortable or not.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I worry about their size and whether they are comfortable.

The question asks about life experience, so the present perfect form have never bought is more appropriate than the simple past form never bought. The phrase whether they are comfortable is also the correct structure for expressing uncertainty.

× No, I never bought shoes online because I got worried about its size and also if they are comfortable or not.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I worry about their size and whether they are comfortable.

The noun shoes is plural, so the possessive pronoun should be their, not its. Its is used with a singular or non-human singular noun.

× I would prefer to shop them on offline because there is no issue of size in the weekend.

✓ I would prefer to shop for them offline because there is no issue with the size at the weekend.

The correct preposition after shop is for when referring to the things being purchased. We also say an issue with something and at the weekend, not an issue of something and in the weekend.

× Try them out. But uh in online way we cannot try it and we receive a image like thing products.

✓ I can try them out. However, when shopping online, we cannot try them on, and we only see an image of the products.

The phrase in online way is incorrect; when shopping online is the natural grammatical expression. The preposition on is used with try when referring to clothes or shoes.

× Try them out. But uh in online way we cannot try it and we receive a image like thing products.

✓ I can try them out. However, when shopping online, we cannot try them on, and we only see an image of the products.

The singular noun image requires the article an because image begins with a vowel sound. The phrase a image is therefore incorrect; it must be an image.

× Try them out. But uh in online way we cannot try it and we receive a image like thing products.

✓ I can try them out. However, when shopping online, we cannot try them on, and we only see an image of the products.

The pronoun them should be used because it refers to shoes, which is plural. The singular pronoun it does not agree with the plural noun shoes.

× Well, I usually spend a reasonable amount of money on my shoes. I do not buy extremely high prices of shoes and also I buy at a reasonable amount because I would not like to spend money on shoes.

✓ Well, I usually spend a reasonable amount of money on shoes. I do not buy extremely expensive shoes, and I do not like to spend too much money on them.

The phrase high prices of shoes incorrectly combines an adjective with a noun phrase. The sentence also repeats the idea of spending a reasonable amount and needs a clearer parallel structure.

× I do not buy extremely high prices of shoes and also I buy at a reasonable amount because I would not like to spend money on shoes.

✓ I do not buy extremely expensive shoes, and I do not like to spend too much money on them.

High prices describes prices, not shoes. When describing shoes directly, use the adjective expensive. The adverb extremely correctly modifies expensive.

× But if I found them comfortable or looking nice I can buy it if it is some.

✓ But if I find them comfortable or if they look nice, I can buy them if they are reasonably priced.

This sentence describes a general or possible situation, so the present tense find should be used in the if-clause, not the past form found. In a first conditional structure, use the present tense after if and can in the main clause.

× But if I found them comfortable or looking nice I can buy it if it is some.

✓ But if I find them comfortable or if they look nice, I can buy them if they are reasonably priced.

The pronouns must agree with shoes, which is plural. Therefore, use they and them instead of it. The phrase they are reasonably priced also clearly refers to the shoes.

× Well, I think it depends on occasion if I have to wear it on my gym days or some regular days.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the occasion, such as whether I have to wear them on my gym days or on regular days.

The singular countable noun occasion needs the definite article the. The article identifies the particular occasion being discussed.

× Well, I think it depends on occasion if I have to wear it on my gym days or some regular days.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the occasion, such as whether I have to wear them on my gym days or on regular days.

The pronoun them should refer to shoes because shoes is plural. The singular pronoun it is not consistent with that plural noun.

× I think comfortable should be preferable because it is important to be comfortable in every situation and if I have to go out with my friends or any event I then I prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ I think comfortable shoes are preferable because it is important to be comfortable in every situation. If I have to go out with my friends or attend an event, I prefer fashionable shoes.

Comfortable is an adjective and cannot function as the subject by itself in this sentence. The noun shoes must be included, and the subject comfortable shoes requires the verb are.

× I think comfortable should be preferable because it is important to be comfortable in every situation and if I have to go out with my friends or any event I then I prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ I think comfortable shoes are preferable because it is important to be comfortable in every situation. If I have to go out with my friends or attend an event, I prefer fashionable shoes.

The correct preposition is used in the phrase attend an event, or alternatively go to an event. The original phrase with any event is missing the appropriate preposition or verb.

× I think comfortable should be preferable because it is important to be comfortable in every situation and if I have to go out with my friends or any event I then I prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ I think comfortable shoes are preferable because it is important to be comfortable in every situation. If I have to go out with my friends or attend an event, I prefer fashionable shoes.

Event is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. The correct phrase is attend an event, not attend any event in this context.