Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容较完整，直接说明了购买频率，也提供了两个原因，逻辑清晰，并使用了“First”和“Second”进行衔接。需要注意“wear shoes more for a longer time”和“buying new shoes once all the time”表达不自然，可以改为“wear them for longer”以及“buying new ones frequently”。此外，问题问到“Do you like buying shoes?”，最好先明确表达喜欢或不喜欢。

例: I don’t really enjoy buying shoes very often. I usually replace them only when they are worn out because good-quality shoes can be quite expensive. I take care of them by cleaning them regularly and repairing them when necessary. Also, wearing shoes for longer is better for the environment than buying new ones frequently.

提案: 回答有具体经历和细节，例如购买时间、品牌以及清洁习惯，因此内容较生动。但最后一句存在多处明显语法和搭配问题：“want them to play games”应改为“wear them to play games”，“suffering them”应改为“damaging them”，“prepare to keep”应改为“preferred to keep”。同时，“They were ... shoes bought from...”略显重复，可以简化，并使用“because”清楚连接原因。

例: Yes, definitely. I bought my favorite pair of Michael Jordan basketball shoes online when I was in sixth grade. I treasured them and cleaned them almost every day. However, I rarely wore them during games because I was afraid of damaging them and wanted to keep them in pristine condition.

提案: 回答直接回应了价格，并通过舒适度和耐用性解释愿意多花钱，观点清楚。建议在“higher-end”中加连字符，并在“durability”后加入“and”，使并列结构更自然；最后应补上句号。还可以说明这是人民币或其他货币，以避免“two to three thousand dollars”听起来不符合语境。

例: I usually spend around two to three thousand yuan on a pair of shoes, especially basketball shoes. I’m willing to pay more for higher-end models because they offer greater comfort and durability. Although cheaper shoes may cost about one thousand yuan, they usually don’t last as long.

提案: 回答有明确比较，且加入了现在与过去的对比，内容方向很好。不过“faith health”应改为“foot health”，“I choose”应改为过去式“I chose”，“lattice trends”应改为“the latest trends”或“fashion trends”。建议使用“However”连接今昔变化，并在结尾加句号。

例: I currently prefer comfortable shoes because they provide better support and are healthier for my feet, especially since I walk a lot during the day. However, when I was in elementary school, I chose fashionable shoes because I wanted to impress my classmates and keep up with the latest trends.

× Second, I think it is better for the environment to wear shoes more for a longer time rather than buying new shoes once all the time.

✓ Second, I think it is better for the environment to wear shoes for longer rather than buy new shoes all the time.

原句中“to wear”与“buying”的结构不平行，而且“once all the time”搭配错误。使用“rather than buy”与前面的“to wear”保持结构一致；“all the time”表示“一直、总是”，不需要再加“once”。

× So I rarely want them to play games because I was afraid of suffering them and prepare to keep them pristine.

✓ So I rarely wanted to wear them for games because I was afraid of damaging them and preferred to keep them pristine.

这段内容讲的是过去的经历，因此“want”应改为过去式“wanted”，“prepare”应改为过去式“preferred”。另外，“want them to play games”表达不自然，应使用“wanted to wear them for games”；“suffering them”不能表达“损坏鞋子”，应改为“damaging them”。

× Right now I prefer comfortable shoes because they are more supportive and better for my faith health, especially since I walk a lot during the day.

✓ Right now I prefer comfortable shoes because they are more supportive and better for my physical health, especially since I walk a lot during the day.

“faith”表示“信仰”，不能修饰“health”。这里应使用形容词“physical”，表示“身体的、身体健康方面的”。

× When I was in elementary school, I choose fashionable shoes because I wanted to impress my classmates and fit in with the lattice trends.

✓ When I was in elementary school, I chose fashionable shoes because I wanted to impress my classmates and fit in with the latest trends.

“When I was in elementary school”表示过去时间，所以动词“choose”必须使用过去式“chose”。另外，“lattice”不是这里所需的形容词；表达“最新潮流”应使用“latest trends”。

× When I was in elementary school, I choose fashionable shoes because I wanted to impress my classmates and fit in with the lattice trends.

✓ When I was in elementary school, I chose fashionable shoes because I wanted to impress my classmates and fit in with the latest trends.

“lattice”通常表示“格子结构”，不能表示“最新的”。这里应使用形容词“latest”修饰“trends”，构成“the latest trends”，意思是“最新的潮流”。