Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более связно и уверенно: избегайте заполнителей («uh», «umm»), дайте чёткое вступление и добавьте небольшое объяснение частоты. Уточните «half the time a month» – лучше сказать «once or twice a month». Используйте связку и конкретику, например: причина интереса и типы обуви, которые вы покупаете.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I like trying different styles, and I usually buy them once or twice a month. For example, I often shop for casual trainers and a pair of smart shoes for work.

提案: Дайте более развернутый и естественный ответ: объясните причину отказа и, возможно, упомяните условие, при котором вы бы купили онлайн. Используйте связующие слова для логики и формулируйте фразу правильно («see and touch it»).

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer to see and touch them before buying. However, if a reputable website has clear return policies and customer reviews, I might consider it.

提案: Уточните диапазон и приведите примеры: говорите конкретнее (например, «about $50 on average, but higher for special occasions»), используйте связки для расширения мысли и покажите способность сравнивать или объяснять выбор.

例: I usually spend about $50 on a pair of shoes because I don't like very expensive brands. For special occasions I might spend closer to $100 for something more durable or stylish.

提案: Сформулируйте чёткое мнение и приведите конкретные примеры/контрасты: начните с главного утверждения, затем используйте связки («however», «for example») и объясните ситуацию, в которой вы выбираете удобство или моду. Избегайте тавтологии («looking good and nice»).

例: I generally prefer fashionable shoes for social events because they look stylish. However, I choose comfortable shoes for activities like running or walking long distances, for example, cushioned trainers that protect my feet.

× Yes, I love, uh, buying shoes because I love it and umm umm, 1/2 time a month.

✓ Yes, I love buying shoes because I love them, and I buy them about once or twice a month.

The student used singular pronoun 'it' to refer to plural noun 'shoes'; use 'them'. '1/2 time a month' is unclear and ungrammatical; use 'once or twice a month'. Also remove filler words for clarity.

× No, because I don't physically see it touch it.

✓ No, because I can't physically see or touch them.

The student used singular 'it' for 'shoes'; use plural 'them'. Also combine verbs with 'or' and use modal 'can't' to express inability. 'Physically see or touch them' is natural word order.

× Maybe fifty dollars because I don't purchase very pricey shoes.

✓ Maybe fifty dollars, because I don't buy very expensive shoes.

'Purchase' is formal but not incorrect; however 'buy' is more natural in spoken English. 'Pricey' is informal adjective but acceptable; 'expensive' is clearer. Maintain simple present 'I don't buy' for habitual action.

× I prefer fashionable but sometimes comfortable because when I'm running I won't feel comfortable but when I go out I prefer fashionable because it's looking good and nice.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes, but sometimes comfortable ones. When I'm running I won't feel comfortable in fashionable shoes, but when I go out I prefer fashionable ones because they look nice.

Pronouns and nouns were omitted or inconsistent; add 'shoes' or 'ones' to be clear. 'It's looking good and nice' is incorrect: 'they look nice' agrees in number and uses correct verb form. Break into two sentences for clarity and correct subject-verb agreement.