Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief reason using linking words. Correct plural and article errors and avoid repetition. Be specific about frequency (e.g., "once every few months").

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often because they are quite expensive. For example, a typical pair costs about one thousand yen, so I usually only buy new shoes once every few months.

提案: Organise into a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use correct tense and specific details (what you bought, when, why it was convenient). Use linking words like "for example" or "because" and avoid unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I have. For example, I bought a pair of sandals online last month because I needed them quickly and it was more convenient than going to the store.

提案: Give a clear direct answer with a specific amount or range, then explain briefly why. Avoid unfinished sentences and repetition. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas and be concise (max 3–4 sentences).

例: I usually spend around 2,000–5,000 yen on a pair of shoes because I try to buy good-quality items without spending too much. However, I sometimes save up and plan to buy a more expensive pair next month.

提案: Start with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons and one example. Use correct subject-verb agreement and avoid repeating the same idea. Include a linking phrase like "because" or "although" if contrasting comfort and style.

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I enjoy following trends and they make me feel confident. For instance, I often choose stylish boots for special occasions, even though I sometimes choose more comfortable shoes for long walks.

× I like buying shoes but I don't often buy shoes because shoes is so expensive one shoes is one thousand yen.

✓ I like buying shoes, but I don't often buy them because shoes are so expensive; one pair of shoes is one thousand yen.

Plural nouns must agree with plural verbs and measurements: 'shoes' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. Use a pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. When referring to a single unit, say 'one pair of shoes' rather than 'one shoes'. Separate ideas with punctuation for clarity.

× Yes I have bought shoes online I bought our Sandals last month because I have to buy ali so it was convenient.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online. I bought our sandals last month because I had to buy Ali's shoes, so it was convenient.

Mixed tense and word choice issues: 'have bought' (present perfect) is fine for experience, but the second clause needed past simple 'bought' for a specific time (last month). 'have to buy ali' is incorrect: likely intended 'had to buy for Ali' or 'had to buy Ali's'. Use apostrophe for possession. Also capitalize proper nouns consistently and use punctuation to separate sentences.

× I don't spend on shoes much money because shoes are expensive but I I will buy next month.

✓ I don't spend much money on shoes because shoes are expensive, but I will buy some next month.

Word order for 'spend much money on' is fixed: 'spend much money on shoes'. Remove repeated 'I'. Use 'some' or 'a pair' after 'buy' for clarity. Tense contrast is acceptable: present simple for habits and 'will' for future intention.

× So I

✓ So I will buy a pair next month.

Incomplete sentence: 'So I' is a fragment lacking a verb and object. Complete the thought to match context by adding 'will buy a pair next month' to show the intended future action.

× I prefer fashionable shoes to comfortable shoes because fashionable shoes are very cute and that I like fashion.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes to comfortable shoes because fashionable shoes are very cute and I like fashion.

Unnecessary conjunction 'that' is incorrect here. Use 'and I like fashion' to join two independent clauses. Maintain parallel structure and clear connectors.

× So fashionable shoes makes me happy.

✓ So fashionable shoes make me happy.

Subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'make' not 'makes'. Ensure subject-verb agreement for number.

× So I like fashionable

✓ So I like fashionable shoes.

Incomplete sentence: 'fashionable' is an adjective needing a noun. Complete the sentence with the noun 'shoes' to convey the intended meaning.