Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, correct grammar and pronunciation, and answer directly with a clear frequency. Keep to 2–4 sentences, include a topic sentence and one supporting detail using a linking word.

例: Yes, I love buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair every few months. For example, last month I bought a pair of sneakers because I walk a lot, so comfort is important to me.

提案: Use standard grammar and concise reasoning. Start with a direct response, then give one clear reason with linking words (because/so). Avoid slang like "Not gonna lie" in the test.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because my shoe size seems to vary between brands, so I prefer trying them on in a store to ensure a good fit.

提案: Provide a direct estimate and a clear reason. Give one or two specific details and use linking words (so, because). Correct phrasing for preferences and time references.

例: I usually spend around $50–$100 on a pair of shoes because I need comfortable footwear for long days at work, so I’m willing to pay more for quality and durability.

提案: Answer directly which you prefer, then give a concise example and reason. Use linking words (however, because) and correct word choices (comfortable, stylish, durable). Keep within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often walk long distances; however, I also like shoes that look stylish. For example, I recently bought a pair of sneakers that are both supportive and fashionable, so I can wear them all day.

× I like buying shoes so much.

✓ I like buying shoes very much.

'So much' is informal and can be awkward here; 'very much' is the standard adverb phrase to modify 'like'. Place the adverb after the verb phrase to clearly show degree. Suggestion: use 'very much' in formal speech.

× Like every once I buy a new pair of shorts because it's my addiction and also there is a quite interesting thing about myself.

✓ Almost every time I buy a new pair of shoes because it's my addiction, and there is something quite interesting about me.

Multiple errors: 'Like every once' is incorrect adverbial phrase; use 'Almost every time' or 'Very often'. 'Shorts' should be 'shoes' (word choice, but treated as sentence structure); 'about myself' should be 'about me'. 'There is a quite interesting thing' is awkward—use 'there is something quite interesting'. Suggestion: reorder adverbial phrase before the main clause and use 'me' instead of 'myself'.

× When I meet someone new, I only look her shoe.

✓ When I meet someone new, I only look at their shoes.

Incorrect pronoun and missing preposition: 'look her shoe' lacks the preposition 'at' and uses 'her' which assumes gender. Use the gender-neutral singular 'they' or 'their' and plural 'shoes' for naturalness. Suggestion: use 'look at their shoes'.

× At their shoes, at their shoes because I can understand their personality by just looking their shoes allock.

✓ I look at their shoes because I can understand their personality by just looking at their shoes.

Redundant phrase 'At their shoes, at their shoes' removed. Missing preposition 'at' after 'looking'. 'Allock' is nonstandard/unintelligible—omit it. Keep pronouns consistent: 'their'. Suggestion: use single clear clause and include necessary prepositions.

× Not gonna lie, I have never buy shoes online because my shoe number is so changing like one day I bought forth number and the next day I'm gonna buy forty two it changed from shoe to shoe and that's why it's not clear.

✓ Not going to lie, I have never bought shoes online because my shoe size keeps changing: one day I bought size 4 and the next day I might buy size 42; it changes from shoe to shoe, so it's not clear.

Several grammar issues: 'Not gonna lie' is informal colloquialism—use 'Not going to lie' though still informal. 'have never buy' mixes present perfect with base verb; should be 'have never bought' (past participle). 'my shoe number is so changing' is incorrect; use 'my shoe size keeps changing'. 'forth' is misspelling of 'fourth' but intended '4'; use 'size 4'. Use modal 'might' instead of 'gonna' for clarity. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experience and past participle form 'bought', and use consistent verb forms.

× And also I don't want to take that risk to buy shoe from online platforms.

✓ Also, I don't want to take the risk of buying shoes from online platforms.

Incorrect preposition and noun forms: use 'take the risk of' rather than 'take that risk to buy'. Use gerund 'buying' after 'risk of'. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes' and 'from online platforms' is acceptable but 'on online platforms' is more common. Suggestion: 'take the risk of buying shoes on online platforms.'

× Shoes are so essential to me.

✓ Shoes are very important to me.

'So essential' is informal; 'very important' or 'essential' alone is clearer. 'Essential to me' is acceptable but 'very important to me' is more idiomatic here. Suggestion: choose one strong modifier and place it before the adjective.

× So I never looked at prices if I like so much.

✓ So I never look at prices if I like something so much.

Tense inconsistency: 'never looked' (past) conflicts with general habit; use present simple 'never look'. Sentence structure and word order: place 'so much' after the object 'something'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions.

× Of course, first it comes my comfort because I'm working all day with my friend and that's why when choosing the shoes, I always prefer to buy something expensive but less longing.

✓ Of course, my comfort comes first because I work all day with my feet and that's why when choosing shoes, I always prefer to buy something expensive but long-lasting.

Multiple issues: 'first it comes my comfort' wrong word order—use 'my comfort comes first'. 'I'm working all day with my friend' makes no sense; likely 'with my feet' meaning standing all day, or 'at work all day'. 'Less longing' is incorrect; intended 'long-lasting' or 'more durable'. Use present simple for habitual facts: 'I work'. Suggestion: reorder phrase and replace incorrect words.

× Recently I bought a shoe that's fashionable and also trim and I like it very much the comfort even as though it looks hard from other side but when you view them, you can walk any kilometers if you want and that's really good for me.

✓ Recently I bought a shoe that's fashionable and slim, and I like it very much for its comfort. Even though it looks stiff from the outside, when you wear it, you can walk for many kilometers if you want, which is really good for me.

Several errors: 'trim' likely intended 'slim'. 'I like it very much the comfort' is ungrammatical—use 'I like it very much for its comfort.' 'as though' should be 'even though'. 'looks hard from other side' -> 'looks stiff from the outside'. 'view them' -> 'wear it'. 'any kilometers' -> 'many kilometers' or 'a long distance'. Ensure pronoun consistency (singular 'it'). Suggestion: split into clearer sentences, correct vocabulary and prepositions.