Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较自然，但存在 filler（如 “Umm, well”）和略微重复的信息。可以更直接用一句主题句回答，再用连接词给出具体频率和原因，控制在最多五句，并补充一两个具体例子以增强说服力。注意使用更丰富的词汇代替重复的“quality”。

例: Not really — I only buy shoes two or three times a year, usually during big sales because I prefer to invest in durable brands. For example, I buy a pair of everyday sneakers and a pair of formal shoes, which last me a long time.

提案: 回答直接且信息清楚，但有些冗余（两次提到 online shopping）。可以用一到两句概括经历并用连接词补充具体细节，如下单习惯、尺码选择或退换货体验，使内容更具体。避免简单断句，使用更自然的衔接词。

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because the delivery is very fast in China — usually two or three days. I also read reviews and check size charts carefully to avoid returns.

提案: 回答简洁且包含数额，但可更自然地表达货币并补充原因或例子来丰富内容。建议把价格放在句末或用括号式说明，并说明何种鞋类对应不同价位，增强信息具体性。

例: I usually spend a moderate amount — around ¥300 to ¥500 — because I prioritise comfort for everyday wear. For instance, I might spend about ¥500 on a good pair of sneakers and ¥300 on casual shoes.

提案: 观点明确，但表达有些重复（两次提到 comfortable shoes）且缺少进一步细节或对比。建议先给出立场，然后用一两个原因和一个具体情境或例子来支持，使用连接词如 'because' 或 'so' 使逻辑更紧密。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I’m on my feet most of the day at work, so cushioning and support are more important to me than current fashion trends. For example, I choose sneakers with good arch support rather than trendy high heels.

× Delivery in China is very fast and it takes only two or three days for package to arrive.

✓ Delivery in China is very fast and it takes only two or three days for a package to arrive.

句子中缺少不定冠词“a”。在英文中，當名詞被泛指且為可數單數名詞（如“package”）時，需要用不定冠詞“a”或“an”。建議在“package”前加“a”，使語法正確且自然。

× It costs about 300 to CN¥500.

✓ It costs about CN¥300 to CN¥500.

金額表達中順序與貨幣符號位置不當。通常貨幣符號置於數字之前，並且範圍應標示完整的兩端金額。建議改為“CN¥300 to CN¥500”或更自然的“about CN¥300–CN¥500”。