Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız anlaşılır ve doğal; ancak tekrarlardan kaçınmalı, cümleleri daha kısa ve doğrudan kurmalısınız. Konu cümlesi ile başlayın, ardından bağlaçlarla kısa destekleyici detay verin (ör. neden sevdiğiniz, nereden aldığınız). Sözcük tekrarlarını azaltmak için eşanlamlılar kullanın ve 5 cümleyi geçmemeye özen gösterin.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually shop for them about twice a month. I prefer colorful designs because they brighten my outfits. I often choose practical styles for daily wear but sometimes buy bold pairs for special occasions.

提案: Cümle yapınız karışık ve bazı ifadeler yanlış kullanılmış (ör. “best baddest worst”, “boating”). Net bir konu cümlesi kurun, sonra iki kısa neden verin ve bağlaçlar kullanın. Kelime seçiminde dikkatli olun; “exchange” veya “return” daha uygun. Ayrıca dilbilgisi düzeltmeleri yapın (ör. "I haven't" ardından yardımcı fiil ve sebep).

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on first. Trying shoes in a store helps me avoid size and fit problems, and returning items can be difficult. Therefore I usually buy shoes from physical shops.

提案: Cevabınız belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Doğru yapı "It depends on the brand" olmalı. Fiyat verirken net ve anlaşılır olun; para birimini belirtin. Ek olarak tercihlerinizi ve bir örnek marka belirtin ama cümleleri kısa tutun.

例: It depends on the brand, but I usually spend around 50 to 60 dollars on a pair. Sometimes I pay more for well-known brands like Nike because they last longer. For cheaper styles I might spend about 30 dollars.

提案: Temel fikir açık, fakat zaman uyumu ve kelime tekrarı sorunlu ("bought", "shoe shoes"). Konu cümlesiyle başlayıp kısa bir sebep ve bir örnek verin. Bağlaç kullanarak tercihlerinizi karşılaştırın ve gereksiz sesleri ("umm") çıkartın.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use because I have to walk a lot at school. However, for special events I choose fashionable shoes to look stylish. So generally comfort comes first, but I enjoy wearing stylish pairs sometimes.

× Yes I do. I love my old shoes. I buy shoes like maybe twice a month because I love shoes. I love colorful shoes.

✓ Yes, I do. I love my old shoes. I buy shoes maybe twice a month because I love shoes. I love colorful shoes.

The original had no major subject-verb agreement errors but contained an unnecessary filler 'like' used before 'maybe' which is informal and can be omitted for clearer grammar. Suggest removing redundant filler words to improve accuracy and formality. Use commas after interjections (Yes,).

× No I haven't because I think online is the best baddest worst place for boating buying shoes because you can't try it so maybe it's can be wrong size and the changing is more bad.

✓ No, I haven't because I think online is the worst place for buying shoes, because you can't try them on so they might be the wrong size and returns are more difficult.

Errors include wrong word forms and tenses: 'boating' should be 'buying'; 'best baddest worst' is incorrect word stacking—use 'worst'; 'you can't try it' should be 'you can't try them on' (pronoun and particle for shoes); 'maybe it's can be wrong size' mixes modal forms—use 'they might be the wrong size'; 'the changing is more bad' should be 'returns are more difficult' or 'exchanging is more difficult'. Suggestions: choose correct verb forms, use appropriate modal verbs (might), and use correct nouns ('returns'/'exchanges'). Use commas to separate clauses.

× It's depends on what brand is it but it's like 6000 maybe 5000 but I usually buy bouts Nikes.

✓ It depends on the brand, but it's usually around 6000 or maybe 5000, and I usually buy Nike boots.

'It's depends' is incorrect; use 'It depends' (subject-verb agreement). 'what brand is it' should be a noun phrase 'the brand'. 'it's like 6000 maybe 5000' clarified to 'it's usually around 6000 or maybe 5000'. 'bouts Nikes' is incorrect word order and form—likely 'Nike boots' or 'Nikes' (brand name as plural). Suggest ensuring verb agrees with subject and correct noun order for modifiers.

× I often bought comfortable shoes because of I need to wear them in school, but I prefer fashionable shoe shoes for umm styling.

✓ I often buy comfortable shoes because I need to wear them to school, but I prefer fashionable shoes for styling.

Tense inconsistency: 'I often bought' (past) conflicts with habitual present—use 'I often buy'. 'because of I need' is ungrammatical; use 'because I need' or 'because of needing' depending on structure. 'to wear them in school' should be 'to wear them to school'. Duplicate 'shoe shoes' fixed to 'shoes'. Suggestions: keep consistent present tense for habits, remove redundant words, and use correct preposition 'to' for destinations.