Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng rõ nhưng ngôn ngữ thiếu chính xác và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm/các từ lựa chọn không phù hợp (ví dụ: "display" không đúng, "when it went out" sai cấu trúc, "bands" thay vì "brands"). Hãy sửa ngữ pháp, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, và giới hạn độ dài tối đa 4 câu. Cố gắng dùng từ vựng phù hợp (brand, formal shoes, sports shoes) và thêm một liên từ để nối ý.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially sports shoes. I mostly choose them because they are comfortable and durable. For formal occasions I keep a pair of classic black leather shoes. For badminton I prefer brands like Li-Ning or Gen X because they provide good grip and support.

提案: Nội dung trả lời rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi lặp từ và cấu trúc câu chưa chính xác ("they are they are can be", "the store had" nên là "has"). Nên rút gọn, dùng linking words như "however" hay "because" một cách gọn gàng, và nêu điều kiện cụ thể. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu và sửa thì của động từ.

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because they can be unreliable and sizes may not fit. However, if an online store has a clear return policy and a strong reputation, I would consider buying from them. In that case I would read reviews carefully before ordering.

提案: Câu trả lời lộn xộn với nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ dùng sai ("depends on the car" vô nghĩa; lặp từ "last last"; "5 day training shoes" không rõ). Hãy trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề, đưa ra khoảng giá rõ ràng cho từng loại và giải thích ngắn gọn lí do. Dùng số và đơn vị đúng và tránh câu dài rời rạc.

例: It depends on the type of shoes. For good quality training shoes I usually spend between $100 and $150 because I want them to be durable and comfortable. For fashion or casual shoes I often spend around $20 to $50.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng câu có lặp từ và ngữ pháp yếu ("a comfort because comfort ones", "all days"). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, dùng linking words như "because" và "although" đúng chỗ, tránh lặp, và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về tính năng bạn cần (support, cushioning).

例: I prefer comfortable and durable shoes because I play sports regularly and I’m on my feet a lot. Although fashionable shoes can look nice, I choose comfort for good support and cushioning. For example, I look for shoes with strong arch support and thick soles.

× I usually display my formal shoes when it went out.

✓ I usually wear my formal shoes when I go out.

The student mixed past tense 'went' with present habitual context 'usually'. Use present simple 'go' for habitual actions; also 'display' is incorrect collocation for wearing shoes. Suggest using 'wear' and maintain present simple for routines.

× I mainly buy sports shoes because they are comfortable and durable.

✓ I mainly buy sports shoes because they are comfortable and durable.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Habitual present tense and adjective use are appropriate.

× For example, I prefer bands like lining or Gen. X for badminton.

✓ For example, I prefer brands like Li-Ning or Gen X for badminton.

Use 'brands' not 'bands'. Proper nouns and brand names should be capitalized and spelled correctly. Preposition 'for' is correct to indicate purpose.

× No, I haven't bought shoes online because I think they are they are can be really unreliable and it might not fit or meet my expectations.

✓ No, I haven't bought shoes online because I think they can be really unreliable and they might not fit or meet my expectations.

Remove duplicated 'they are'. Use modal 'can' correctly and match plural subject 'shoes' with plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'fit' pattern 'might not fit'. Maintain present perfect 'haven't bought' to indicate experience up to now.

× However, if I have a return policy or the store had a strong reputation, I would probably try buying a pair of shoes online once.

✓ However, if the store had a return policy or a strong reputation, I would probably try buying a pair of shoes online sometime.

Use conditional structure consistently: 'if the store had' with 'would'. Place 'return policy' with article 'a'. 'Once' is awkward; 'sometime' or 'one time' fits better.

× Well, depends on the car, type of shoes.

✓ Well, it depends on the cost and the type of shoes.

Original lacks subject and has 'car' which is likely a mistake for 'cost'. Add subject 'it' for a complete sentence and correct vocabulary.

× 5 day training shoes I usually spend about $100 to $150.00 because I prefer comfortable and durable brands last last a long time.

✓ For five-day training shoes I usually spend about $100 to $150 because I prefer comfortable and durable brands that last a long time.

Spell out numbers in text, add preposition 'for' and article 'For five-day training shoes'. Add relative clause 'that last a long time' to modify 'brands'. Remove repeated 'last' and unnecessary decimals.

× Forecast through our fashion shoes I often spend less, maybe $20 to $50.

✓ For casual fashion shoes I often spend less, maybe $20 to $50.

'Forecast through our' is incorrect. Likely meant 'For casual/fashion shoes'. Rephrase to clarify meaning and use correct preposition 'For'.

× Well, I actually play a lot of sports so I prefer shoes that are durable and comfortable all days rather than the fashionable ones.

✓ Well, I actually play a lot of sports so I prefer shoes that are durable and comfortable every day rather than fashionable ones.

Use 'every day' instead of 'all days'. Remove 'the' before 'fashionable ones' when speaking generally; both forms can work but dropping 'the' is more natural here.

× Although stylish can make it look good but I usually choose a comfort because comfort ones because I'm on my feet a lot and I need reliable support.

✓ Although stylish shoes can look good, I usually choose comfort because comfort shoes support me better since I'm on my feet a lot and I need reliable support.

Original has fragmented structure and repetition. Use subject 'stylish shoes' and comma after the clause. Use noun 'comfort' or phrase 'comfort shoes'; avoid repeating 'because'. Clarify cause 'since I'm on my feet a lot'.