Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答の文法と時制を正しくし、主張（トピック文）の後に具体例や理由を一つか二つ付けて論理的に繋げる練習をしてください。接続語（for example, because, so）を使って文を自然につなげ、重複や不必要な語を減らしましょう。また、単数・複数や動詞の時制（buy/bought）に注意してください。

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new pairs about once a year because I tend to replace them when they wear out. For example, I often wait until the soles are worn before I shop for a replacement.

提案: 論理は問題ありませんが、文法と語順を正しくして、接続語を用いてより自然な英語にしましょう。具体的な経験や代替案（返品やサイズ表の利用）を加えると説得力が増します。

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on to make sure the size fits. However, I might consider online shopping in the future if the website has a clear size chart and a good return policy.

提案: 語法（become → has become）と語順を直し、金額について具体的に説明してください。また、なぜその価格が妥当だと感じるか理由（品質、ブランド、頻度）を付けて答えると得点が上がります。接続語を使い、文を統合しましょう。

例: I tend to spend more on shoes as I get older because I look for better quality and comfort. For example, I recently paid $100 for a pair that I expect to last a long time, so I think it was a reasonable investment.

提案: 良い構成ですが、最後の文は文法と語順が不自然です（'But why if I go to mountain' は誤り）。代わりに条件や理由を示す接続語（when, because, if）を用い、具体的な例を追加してください。"mountain"には冠詞が必要です（the mountain / hiking）。

例: It depends on the situation. For social outings with friends I prefer fashionable shoes because they look nicer, but when I'm hiking in the mountains I always choose comfortable, supportive footwear to protect my feet.

× I bought shoes once a year because when the shoes was broken I bought new ones so it's not frequently.

✓ I buy shoes once a year because when the shoes are broken I buy new ones, so it's not frequent.

The sentence had mixed tenses but primary errors are plural agreement and word choice. 'Shoes was' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are' (singular/plural agreement). Also use present simple 'I buy' to match habitual action; 'frequently' is an adverb but 'not frequent' (adjective) fits better with 'so it is not frequent' or 'so not often'. Suggestion: use consistent tense for habitual actions and ensure verbs agree with plural nouns. (日本語説明: 複数形の'shoes'には複数形の動詞'are'が必要です。また、習慣的動作には現在形'I buy'を使い、'frequent'を形容詞として使う方が自然です。)

× I've never bought shoes online because I think it is important for me to check the size.

✓ I've never bought shoes online because I think it is important for me to check the size first.

The sentence is mostly correct but could be improved for clarity by adding 'first' to indicate checking before purchase. The main grammar type is use of past participle in present perfect 'I've never bought' which is correct. Suggestion: add words to clarify sequence and keep present perfect for life experience. (日本語説明: 'I've never bought'の現在完了形は正しいですが、購入前にサイズを確認するという意図を明確にするために'first'などを加えると自然になります。)

× If the size is not suit me, I can't wear the shoes.

✓ If the size does not suit me, I can't wear the shoes.

The verb 'suit' requires the correct subject-verb form and structure: 'suit me' with the size as subject. Use 'does not suit' for third-person singular (size). Alternatively, 'If the shoes do not fit me' is natural. Suggestion: use 'does not' with singular subject or 'do not' with plural subject and consider 'fit' for clothing. (日本語説明: 'suit'の主語が'size'で三人称単数のため' does not suit'とする必要があります。あるいは'If the shoes do not fit me'と表現するのが自然です。)

× As I get older the price become bigger.

✓ As I get older, the prices become higher.

Subject-verb agreement: 'price' is better as plural 'prices' when speaking generally, and the verb must agree: 'become' matches plural. Also 'bigger' is less appropriate than 'higher' or 'more expensive' when referring to prices. Suggestion: use 'prices become higher' or 'things become more expensive'. (日本語説明: 一般的に価格について話す場合は複数形'prices'を使い、動詞と一致させます。'bigger'より' higher'や'more expensive'が価格に適切です。)

× Recently I bought shoes, the price was $100.

✓ Recently I bought a pair of shoes; the price was $100.

When referring to a single purchase, use 'a pair of shoes' or 'a pair' for clarity. Comma splice: two independent clauses should be connected properly (semicolon, conjunction, or separate sentences). Tense 'bought' and 'was' are correct in past simple for a recent completed action. Suggestion: use 'a pair of shoes' and separate clauses correctly. (日本語説明: 一回の購入を指すときは'a pair of shoes'が自然です。さらに、二つの独立節がコンマだけで繋がれているのでセミコロンや接続詞で正しくつなぎます。)

× I think it is good price for me to buy that.

✓ I think it was a good price for me to pay for them.

Article missing: use 'a good price'. Also 'to buy that' is awkward; since shoes are plural use 'them' or 'a pair' and match tense (past). Suggestion: 'I think it was a good price for me' or 'I think it was a good deal.' (日本語説明: 'good price'には不定冠詞'a'が必要です。また'shoes'は複数なので'them'や'a pair'を使い、文脈に応じて過去形に揃えます。)

× I think it depends on the situation.

✓ I think it depends on the situation.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. It fits the conversation and tense. (日本語説明: この文は正しく、状況に応じるという意味で適切です。)

× When I go to shopping center with my friends, I want to wear fashionable shoes.

✓ When I go to the shopping center with my friends, I want to wear fashionable shoes.

Article usage: 'shopping center' requires 'the' when referring to a specific, usual place. Otherwise grammar is correct. Suggestion: include 'the' before 'shopping center'. (日本語説明: 'shopping center'の前には通常定冠詞'the'を付けます。)

× But why if I go to mountain I want to wear comfortable shoes?

✓ But if I go to the mountains, I want to wear comfortable shoes.

Word order and particles: 'But why if' is awkward and unnecessary; remove 'why'. Use plural 'mountains' or 'the mountain' and include commas appropriately. The correct conditional is 'If I go to the mountains, I want to wear comfortable shoes.' Suggestion: drop 'why' and use 'the mountains' or 'the mountain' depending on meaning. (日本語説明: 'why'は不要で語順も不自然です。'the mountains'や'the mountain'を使い、条件節を正しく構成します。)