Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes, then give a realistic frequency with one supporting reason. Avoid contradictory statements and grammar errors. Use linking words like "usually" or "however" only when needed.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy one pair every two or three months because I prioritize comfort and like to replace worn-out footwear regularly.

提案: Keep it natural and focused: answer directly, give a brief past experience and a clear consequence. Remove filler words and correct sentence structure. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" succinctly.

例: Yes, I have. For example, I bought a comfortable and stylish pair from Myntra last year, so now I prefer shopping for shoes online because it is convenient and offers many options.

提案: Provide a clear realistic amount and avoid confusing or incorrect phrases. Begin with a direct statement about your typical spend, then explain your choice (quality vs brand) with one linking phrase like "because".

例: I usually spend around $50 to $80 on a pair of shoes because I prefer good quality and comfort rather than expensive designer brands.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence that sums up your preference, then give two specific contrasting reasons using linking words like "however" or "but". Avoid unclear ending phrases and correct small grammar errors.

例: I generally prefer comfortable shoes for work because I stand all day and need good support; however, for special occasions like weddings or parties, I choose fashionable shoes to match my outfit.

× I always buy a pair in a month whenever I get a chance to get a comfortable shoes.

✓ I always buy a pair each month whenever I get a chance to get comfortable shoes.

'a pair' is singular and 'shoes' is plural; remove the article before 'comfortable shoes' so it matches plural noun usage. Also 'in a month' is better as 'each month' for habitual action. Suggestion: say 'a pair each month' and 'comfortable shoes' without 'a'.

× I didn't miss the chance to buy.

✓ I didn't miss the chance to buy them.

The original sentence is grammatically possible but sounds incomplete because the object is missing; adding 'them' (referring to shoes) clarifies the past action. Maintain past tense consistency.

× As a matter of fact I ending up buying a pair of shoes in a year.

✓ As a matter of fact I end up buying a pair of shoes each year.

'ending' is incorrect form; use simple present 'end up' for habitual action. 'in a year' should be 'each year' for regular frequency. Also keep verb form consistent with present tense description.

× Yes, this is an era of advancement and online shopping is very trending.

✓ Yes, this is an era of advancement and online shopping is very popular.

'trending' is a present participle used incorrectly; 'popular' is the correct adjective to describe online shopping. Use adjectives rather than progressive verbs for general statements.

× I also tried uh once I bought shoes from Myntra and which are quite comfortable and stylish.

✓ I also tried it once: I bought shoes from Myntra which were quite comfortable and stylish.

Sentence is run-on and uses 'which' incorrectly. Break into two clauses, use a pronoun 'it' for 'online shopping' or remove 'tried', and use past tense 'were' to match 'bought'. Remove filler 'uh' in formal answer.

× So as a result, I will feel that I will go further for online shopping.

✓ So as a result, I feel that I will continue to shop online.

'will feel that I will go further for online shopping' is awkward and redundant with double 'will'. Use present 'feel' with future intention 'will continue to shop online' for clarity and naturalness.

× Actually I'm earning A proxy 20 to 30 K per minute and according to me that is very low for buying a branded shoes.

✓ Actually I earn approximately 20 to 30 K per month and, in my opinion, that is very low for buying branded shoes.

'A proxy' is wrong; use 'approximately'. 'per minute' is unlikely—use 'per month'. 'a branded shoes' mixes article and plural; remove 'a' before 'branded shoes'. Use simple present 'I earn' for habitual/regular income.

× But I usually go for good quality shoes which are quite comfortable as well as affordable.

✓ But I usually choose good-quality shoes that are both comfortable and affordable.

'go for' is acceptable but 'choose' is clearer; 'good quality' should be hyphenated as 'good-quality' before noun. Use 'that are both' to link two adjectives naturally.

× Before my work, I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I have to stand for a whole day and I want comfort more than just fashion.

✓ For work, I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I have to stand all day and I want comfort more than fashion.

'Before my work' is unnatural—use 'for work'. 'a whole day' -> 'all day'. Simplify 'more than just fashion' to 'more than fashion' for conciseness.

× But whenever I want to go for any ceremony or occasion such as wedding, birthday parties, I prefer trendy shoes.

✓ But whenever I go to a ceremony or occasion, such as a wedding or a birthday party, I prefer trendy shoes.

Use 'go to' not 'go for' with events. Use articles 'a wedding' and 'a birthday party' and singular/plural consistency. Move examples inside commas for clarity.

× So which compliment which can?

✓ So which will complement which?

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended: 'So which complements which?' or 'So which will complement which?' Use auxiliary 'will' or simple present 'complements' and correct word order to form a question.