Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct noun forms and verb tenses, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Provide one or two supporting details with linking words. Also keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don't purchase them very often. For example, I bought a pair of Skechers three years ago and I'm still wearing them because they are durable and comfortable.

提案: Use correct grammar (e.g., "didn't have" not "didn't had") and more natural phrasing. Begin with a direct response, then briefly explain reasons using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Avoid exaggerative adverbs like "tremendously" and prefer specific descriptions of the problem.

例: Yes, I bought shoes online last year, but it was a poor experience. The shoes were too large and the site had no clear return policy, so I couldn't return them and wasted the money.

提案: Be specific and avoid unclear figures and filler words. Correct grammar ("cost" or "cost me", not "costed me") and remove contradictory numbers. Give a clear typical price range and one reason using a linking word (e.g., "because").

例: I usually don't spend much; I tend to buy shoes in the range of ₹500 to ₹2,000 because they meet my everyday needs. However, I once spent about ₹3,000 on Skechers because they lasted a long time and were very comfortable.

提案: Good clear opinion and reasons; reduce repetition and combine sentences for conciseness. Use linking words like "because" and "however" to make it coherent, and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a long distance to work every day. However, I sometimes choose fashionable shoes for parties or special occasions.

× 'I like to wear different kinds of shoe, but I don't buy it very often.'

✓ 'I like to wear different kinds of shoes, but I don't buy them very often.'

'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' when referring to types; pronoun 'it' must match plural noun, so use 'them'. Use articles appropriately with countable nouns.'

× 'I bought a Skechers brand shoe, which is a really expensive brand.'

✓ 'I bought a Skechers pair of shoes, which is a really expensive brand.'

'Skechers' typically refers to a brand and 'shoe' is countable and usually comes in pairs; use 'pair of shoes' or plural 'shoes' to be natural.'

× 'I bought it three years ago and I am still using it.'

✓ 'I bought them three years ago and I am still using them.'

Pronoun must agree with plural noun 'shoes', so use 'them'. Present continuous 'am still using' is acceptable because the action continues to present.'

× 'last year I bought a pair of shoes online.'

✓ 'Last year I bought a pair of shoes online.'

'last' should be capitalized at sentence start; content has correct plurality. Capitalization is not listed but keep for sentence correctness.'

× 'The experience was tremendously bad.'

✓ 'The experience was extremely bad.'

'tremendously' is grammatically possible but collocates poorly with 'bad'; 'extremely' is a more natural adverb to modify 'bad'. This is an adjective/adverb word choice issue (treated as present tense/usage).'

× 'the website didn't even had a written policy,'

✓ 'the website didn't even have a written policy,'

'didn't' requires the base form of the verb 'have', not the past form 'had'. Use 'have' after 'did not'.'

× 'so it was just a waste of money and I couldn't even return it.'

✓ 'so it was just a waste of money and I couldn't even return them.'

'it' refers to 'shoes' (plural); pronoun must agree in number, so use 'them'.'

× 'I prefer to buy shoes within a range of uh, rupees 502,000.'

✓ 'I prefer to buy shoes within a range of, uh, rupees 50–2,000.'

'502,000' is unclear and likely a typographical error; ranges should be written clearly and realistically. If intended 50 to 2,000, use '50–2,000'. Also include currency symbol or word appropriately.'

× 'I bought a pair of Skechers that costed me around ₹3000.'

✓ 'I bought a pair of Skechers that cost me around ₹3000.'

'Cost' is an irregular verb where past simple is 'cost' (same as base), not 'costed'. Use 'cost me' for past reference.'

× 'But it was worth it because the longevity was very good and the shoes were very comfortable too.'

✓ 'But it was worth it because they lasted a long time and the shoes were very comfortable.'

'longevity' as a noun is awkward here; better to use 'they lasted a long time' to describe durability. Also change 'it' to 'they' if referring to shoes.'

× 'I definitely prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes because mostly I have to travel a long distance to reach my workplace.'

✓ 'I definitely prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because I usually have to travel a long distance to reach my workplace.'

'mostly' is less natural than 'usually' here; 'fashionable shoes' repeated can be shortened to 'fashionable ones'.'

× 'So in daily life I need comfortable shoes because I have to walk a long distance.'

✓ 'So in daily life I need comfortable shoes because I have to walk long distances.'

'a long distance' is acceptable but plural 'long distances' sounds more natural for habitual action; keep present tense 'have to'.'

× 'I do prefer fashionable shoes in some parties, but not for regular use.'

✓ 'I do prefer fashionable shoes at some parties, but not for regular use.'

Use preposition 'at' with 'parties' rather than 'in'. Article use is fine; change preposition for correct collocation.'